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Sacred Thoughts Of You

Beneath a colored sky

I wade in pools of silver  

  with Sacred thoughts

of you.

 

 

Our journey together

is a long one

lingering, soothing, cleansing

ours souls in a sacred bond.

 

 

It is glided out

to the deep blue sea

by glistening frothy oceans

 

and

 

Down far into

the desert sands in the heat

of an indian summer

and

 

Up high unto the mountain tops

to shiney snowflakes in winter

like the beauty of icicles

frozen in time.

 

 

In unison we surrender and begin

to make ourselves worthy

The transformation begins

a metamorphosis emerges.

 

 

 Like wings of a butterfly

we join forces

with our spirits

in this sacred bond of love.

 

 

yesterday, today and tomorrow.

We are,

eternal partners

Forever~

 

~8~

Author notes

About a love that nothing can come between. Cords that cannot be broken.

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  • Not-The-Sun
    November 16
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    beautiful

    i love the repetition of pools of silver
    in the beginning. usually I don't like repetition but this subtle poetic device works well there : ) drew my attention. every stanza had me begging for more! well written and good luck in these various contests!!


    • Twinstar
      November 16
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      Thank you! Actually the Pools of silver repeat was a mistake, it is corrected now, I don't really know how that happened. Thanks for taking the time to read this poem.

      Love & Light
      Debbera

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 17, 2007

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    This is a truely beautiful write,I love it. If you would put your user name in your Authors box I would appericate. If it is not in there when I return I will remove your poem fopr not following my rules.Thank you.


    • Twinstar
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank You!

      Thanks so much for the honorable Mention on this poem...
      Love & Light
      Debbera


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    July 7, 2007

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    3 claps...9pts

    Bandits Poetry auction #1

    Lilac


  • JustADutchie gold member
    July 5, 2007
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    Came back, because I forgot to give you applause.


  • lostinthevoid
    July 4, 2007

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    very good

    Like this one too, this kind of love is hard to find, would be a blessing to write this from experience, would also be a blessing to write it from hope,and belief,as to many poeple give up on such things...miracles do happend! Gives hope,and is refreshing!


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    July 3, 2007

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    Poetic Bandits Auction 1

    Oh, I like it! Very personal and beautifully written. I love the description of true love, how amazing you've displayed the image here too. Great poem!


  • JustADutchie gold member
    June 28, 2007
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    Poetic Bandits Auction #1

    Nice matching background. Hope you've found your everlasting love.


  • debilynn gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    BANDITS AUCTION#1

    beautifully written poem of love. great rhythm and the imagery is superb. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    June 11, 2007

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    This is a powerful peice on love a devotion packed full of imagery and metaphor. The flow is lovely.

    Best of luck in the auction.

    Dennis :^)


  • blondone
    June 11, 2007
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    Bandits Auction#1

    imagery the colors of Love the flow flow with such an ease and the tones are soft Lovely writing Best of Luck to you

  • blondone
    June 11, 2007

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    Bandits Auction#1

    imagery the colors of Love the flow flow with such an ease and the tones are soft Lovely writing Best of Luck to you


  • Florida Sunshine
    June 10, 2007
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    Bandits Auction 1

    This is beautifully written! NICE JOB! I LOVE the background!


  • Lady Altheia
    June 9, 2007

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    Poetic Bandits Auction 1

    Love is a powerful bond. I thought your poem was vividly painted and metaphorically told. Your feelings are clearly seen.


  • pixxiepoetess
    June 8, 2007

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    Bandits Auction #1

    You have some very reach images in these lines. I think you express your vision of a love that can't be broken very vividly in this poem. I really like your choice to use natural images to describe the depth of the emotion. The world is so much vaster than any of us. >pixxie<


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    May 17, 2007
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    Very good a real nice write.
    Thanks for your entry in the contest.
    Good luck.


  • golden-red
    May 7, 2007
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    Okay very nice poem... It's very beautiful

    Good luck in my contest


  • BloodyCrystalEmbers
    May 5, 2007

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    Very beautiful...would make a beautiful vow at a wedding...Love is a beautiful thing when it is like how you wrote it,and I loved the image it fits perfectly with this as does the background...beauty penned....


    • Twinstar
      May 5, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your gracious comments on my poem.


  • Beating gold member
    April 24, 2007
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    wow. this is truly a beautiful write! At first read, I was kinda lost in the sense that I couldn't find a proper rythm to follow, but the second time I read it, it all came together. It's an amazing write and I love how you described that unbreakable love.
    btw - great choice of music. Makes one relax and fly into harmony while reading your lovely poem


    • Twinstar
      April 24, 2007
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      thank you very much Snow White Queen! for your gracious comments on this poem.
      Love & light

  • magneticblue
    April 7, 2007

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    lovely

    Beautiful. It actually reminded me of the ocean! The words had a lulling wave-like quality. Great imagery and use of different aspects of nature in comparison of emotion. Good job!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    Awesome write

    Beautiful imagery all through this love enhanced journey..through sands, waves,cleansing purifying,the mountains,as a journey into the metamporphisis into a butterfly of beauty to spend its' life in a special unity together forever....Have never seen such majestic use of imagery in natures comparisons' to the journey of love.....Majesticlly moving with the use of words, and creations' beauty...Awesome!


    • Twinstar
      March 26, 2007
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      Thank You very much for your gracious comments on this poem.
      Love & Light


  • Errant Panther gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    Beautiful

    captivating imagery and the feeling of love just flows through this like a surging tide. How blessed we are when we find such a person to share the bond you speak of. great write.

  • pruedence
    March 26, 2007

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    This is beautiful...so meaningful...love is wonderful when seen this way...felt like a dream while reading it..thanks for sharing


    • Twinstar
      March 26, 2007
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      Thanks so much! Dreams are good right? It was dream when I wrote it.
      Peace


  • Endeavor gold member
    February 18, 2007

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    Still Excellent

    Perhaps one of you best writes

    I may be lost in the message

    or just surrendering to the words

    they are both very amazing

    Rick

  • angelelectra
    January 28, 2007

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    Brilliant Imagery as usual!

    Hey you got a real talent for comming up with these beautiful imageries which kind of transports us to other places! That's the second time I've come across your style of imagery and i must say that it's really really a beautiful picture which you've painted here!
    I also like the structure of the poem- gives a very nice flow and shape to the poem and adds a musical note to it as a whole!
    The love you described in your poem is not the typical head over heels feelings but i sensed that it was something more intense and profound and i really liked it...and that last line made me think of the kind of love which will last forever, no matter what...very romantic...and tastefully done!
    Lovely write!
    Take care,
    Neera


  • trista gold member
    January 4, 2007

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    For your first attempt at free verse, I'd say this was very successful! I believe in this kind of love and wish everyone could experience it in their lives. The transformation you write about is one that has world-changing possibilities, the kind that can "move mountains" as it's said. I don't know if you like to play around and "tweak" your poems at all once they are written, but if so, you might take a look at your comma use. A line break will automatically make the reader pause, so there are several commas at the end of lines that probably aren't really needed and break the rhythm of the poem slightly. Beyond that I think this is beautifully done! I needed something bright and uplifting to read this morning and this certainly is all that. Thanks so much for commenting on my story, and thanks for sharing this wonderful piece of writing.

    Best wishes,
    ~J.

    • Twinstar
      January 4, 2007
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      Thank You Trista for your gracious comments on my poem. I took your advise and eliminated the commas, I see what you mean. It seems to flow better without them. I don't have a problem with changing things to make my poems better. I usually do have to make changes as a general rule in nearly all of them. Thank you so much for taking the time to read this poem. This one is special to me because I have experienced this kind of love. Although we are not physically together at the moment, he is always with me spiritually.
      Love & light

      • trista gold member
        January 11, 2007
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        Hi Debbera,
        I loved this so much the first time that I wanted to come back and read it again after you made the changes. I think the poem flows beautifully this way! Not to be picky, but how about changing the word "white" in line 18 (since the word snowflakes automatically makes one vision them as white) to "shimmering" or "sparkling" or something else on that order? As always, just a suggestion.

        I'm sorry to know you and your love aren't physically together...I understand that very well, as I too am separated from the man I share this kind of love with. But spiritually, yes...I always feel that connection to him, and it's one that neither time or distance can ever break.

        I wish you much happiness in the coming year and look forward to reading more of your writing. I'm bookmarking this for those times I need a gentle reminder that the sacred bond of love truly exists.

        ~J.

        • Twinstar
          January 11, 2007
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          Thank-You Trista for suggesting a better word in place of "White" I replaced it with sparkling and I do agree with you about the vision of snowflakes automatically being white, so thank you again. I am just learning about free verse, I am a lyrical rhyme poet by nature, so this is a little different for me. I appreciate any advise others will offer. I have faith that my true love & I are a lot closer to a physical union than we have been in awhile. We are both closer to being spiritually ready, for a love like that, we have to be worthy and I feel we are closer to that now. I trust that God is paving the way for us throughout our journey with perfect timing. I am honored that you have bookmarked this poem to lift your spirits and remind you this special kind of love...
          love & Light

  • Endeavor gold member
    December 31, 2006

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    Excellent

    Just beautifull

    Wonderfull choise of words

    great thoughts

    like this a lot

    Up high unto the mountain tops,

    to white snowflakes in winter,

    like the beauty of icicles,

    frozen in time.



    In unison, we surrender and begin,

    to make ourselves worthy.

    The transformation begins,

    a metamorphosis emerges...

    Lovely

    Rick

  • enigma-78
    November 20, 2006

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    Eternally Super

    This is a very endearing poem, romantic and sweet. Your words float as if caught within the passion and emotion of love. It is truly an amasing poem.

    • Twinstar
      November 20, 2006
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      Thank-You so much for stopping by to read my poem, I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for applauding as well.

      Peace


  • panegyric ink
    November 18, 2006
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    ireallycravethoughtsasthese

    everythoughtcountsandtogetheraresofantastic.

  • Paradise Prisoner
    November 10, 2006
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    good freeverse. i liked the ending.

  • Twinstar
    November 3, 2006
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    Thank You so much Rick for your gracious comments on this piece, i so appreciate that and thanks for adding me to your favorites. That was so nice, all of my other poems are lyrical, and ryhme poetry, this piece was my first free verse. Thanks again!!!
    love & Light
    Debbera
    Edited on Nov 03, 8:41 p.m. because ''.

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 3, 2006
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    Excellent

    Upon reading this I will add you to my favorites. Your words are very origional and match my own in passion and humility.

    In unison, we surrender and begin,

    to make ourselves worthy.

    The transformation begins,

    a metamorphosis emerges...



    Like wings of a butterfly

    we join forces,

    with our spirits,

    in this sacred bond of love.


    Amazing, Rick


  • -LilacThOughts-
    October 27, 2006
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    Nice metaphors for the dance of the heart and a gorgeaous weaving of words, with a good expression of emotion...wonderfully penned and inspiring to me...enjoyed it thoroughly, keep up the great work

    Love and smiles
    ~Lilac


  • Twinstar
    October 26, 2006
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    Thank You Grendyl for your nice comment on my poem and your suggestion, I so appreciate it...
    love & Light


  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 26, 2006
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    Hi Debbera. You're very welcome. It was a pleasure to read. Take care and God bless. Shelley


  • Twinstar
    October 26, 2006
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    Thanks Shelley for your gracious comment on my poem, I so appreciate it...
    love & Light
    Debbera

  • Twinstar
    October 26, 2006
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    Thank You so much for kind words on Sacred Thoughts You. I appreciate it so much.
    Peace
    Debbera
    Edited on Oct 26, 5:47 p.m. because ''.

  • Twinstar
    October 26, 2006
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    Thank You Tim so much for your nice comments on this piece. Actually this isn't like any of my other poems, it is my first free verse, I ordinarly write lyrical ryhme poetry, but I am trying to write some different stuff. Thanks again!!!
    love & Light
    Debbera


  • Sharcu silver member
    October 26, 2006
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    Wow... so much beauty and sincereness (if that's a word) came from this... Very heart-felt, sweet write you have compossed here. Loved every line of it! Also nice because it gives me an idea of what type of poetry I should expect from you. Well done! Thanks for sharing
    --Tim


  • Fug-azi
    October 26, 2006
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    Good

    Nice write, good flow .. though I felt the "ands" broke the rhythm a bit .. Just a thought but I find free seems to look and read better if it is left aligned.
    The message is well displayed and some of the imagery is excellent

    Like wings of a butterfly
    we join forces,
    with our spirits,
    in this sacred bond of love

    This verse certainly caught my attention. All in all a good write.

  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 26, 2006
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    A beautiful write. Romantic. Lovely imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Excellent descriptives. Very nice word usage and simile. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley


  • RevHead
    October 26, 2006
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    aww this is beautiful! lovely imagery, and very well written thanks for posting this, it was a pleasure to read Ampd

  • Twinstar
    October 25, 2006
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    Thanks so much, This is my first and only, so far, Free Verse...
    peace
    Twinstar
    Edited on Oct 25, 8:44 p.m. because ''.


  • superstition
    October 25, 2006
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    If there's such thing as perfection, this is it! The imagery, mixed together with heart and emotion, is stunning. I love how you mentioned how far the love is stretched out to, as there's not a place it wasn't able to touch.

    "Down far into,
    the desert sands, in the heat
    of an indian summer..."

    That was my line...that one really made it for me. Excellent.

  • Twinstar
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank You so much for taking time to read "Sacred Thoughts Of You" It is my first free verse and inspired by my own Twin Soul, even though we are not physically together...thanks again!
    Expect Miracles
    Twinstar


  • PerfectImperfection
    October 15, 2006
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    This is such a lovely piece! Filled to the brim with a love that just won't back down; this piece is heart warming, sincere, and so well expressed. It is so refreshing to read something with this sort of magical glow to it - it enhances the mood for the reader, just as it does for the poem itself. Best wishes!

  • Twinstar
    October 15, 2006
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    I am very familiar with the Twin Soul concept and that is exactly what this poem is about... Thank You for your nice comment and I am so Glad you liked it... Will check out your work also. Thanks again!!!

    Love & light

    Twistar


  • rite
    October 15, 2006
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    This poem is an eloquent ode to the twin soul principle that survives all places and times, the spiritual bond that realms of matter and spacetime are unable to break. It requires a lot of soul searching to write anything like this while in the frame of a poem only the tip of the iceberg surfaces. I enjoyed being on this page to read your popnderings. Take care,

    RAge

  • Twinstar
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank You so much for your kind words, I'm glad you liked this poem. Thanks for taking the time to read this piece.
    Peace
    Twinstar


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    You're quite welcome...I'm so glad I made a favorable first impression... I often say these words to new Poets: "It is quite difficult to be a Poet, to be any sort of a creatively~inclined Spirit...We are the Keepers of the Gate Key, the strongest & last line of defense between what passes as survival & what defines actually living...It is a multiple task we should be honored by, for we are the splendid voices of our cultures...We are the unerring disciples of Love, the awestruck apostles of Compassion..." I believe in the sanctity of our artistic expression...Carry on, Poet... Wanda

  • Twinstar
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank You! night Hope, for you were the first poet I came across when I joined AP and I was so inspired by your poetry and you were the first to welcome me here. Your comment and your time means a whole lot to me. Thank you so much!!!
    Live Your Dreams
    Twinstar


  • SuicidalMurderer82
    October 15, 2006
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    Very nice, I liked it a lot, it was a joy to read!


  • Child of Water
    October 15, 2006
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    ooo...sorry about the big space..it was an accident. you can delete the comment if it annoys you


  • moonmagick
    October 15, 2006
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    A beautiful poem to honor a true love. I love the way you have told this story with nature woven in the fabric. Remarkable.


  • TallDrinkofWater
    October 15, 2006
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    Very good

    Very well done, I love the simlicity of the words, They are strong yet not over powerering, Keep the pen flowing poet.

  • Child of Water
    October 15, 2006
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    A lovely piece, such a romantic idea. We should all be so lucky. Nicely done, best wishes
























  • I AM SpokenFor
    October 15, 2006
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    This poem blows me away. I especially love the last stanza,

    'Yesterday, today and tomorrow.
    We are...
    eternal partners...
    Forever......'

    It's like the narrator is trailing off, thinking of their Love...

    Keep on writing from your heart and expressing what is in your soul. It is so refreshing to read poetry of this nature So honest and true.

    In His Peace,
    ~*~K~*~

  • Night Hope gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    "In unison, we surrender and begin, to make ourselves worthy." I must concur with my dear Friend Nicolette, twinstar...Indeed, it reads like a love song, laden with emotion, devotion & fire...For Love to succeed, you must nurture it, as you would a precious flower...most of all, you must be friends, concerned with each other's welfare & happiness...Well done, Poet... Wanda

  • Twinstar
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank you so much, that means a lot especially coming from you, I love your poetry, I have read several of your pieces. They are beautiful!!! This is my first Free Verse... Thank you so much for taking the time to read this...
    Love & Light
    Twinstar
    Edited on Oct 15, 1:17 because ''.


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    A lovely poem, Twinstar, that reads like a song...a song from the heart. I like the way you've weaved nature throughout this poem - isn't nature the best metaphor for love? There are indeed loves that one wants to sing about; love that can stood the test of time and tides. When one finds this love, life is worthwhile. Truly a lovely poem that made me believe that life is good - and that love is indeed sacred.

    ~ Nicolette


  • DieForYou
    October 14, 2006
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    hey!! a hai ku is a hawaiin form of poetry that has so many syllables in one line (3 lines long) and so many in another and it's really complicated. that's why i dislike them.

  • Twinstar
    October 14, 2006
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    Thank You! Shepdog72, for your kind comments on my poem "Sacred Thoughts Of You" I'm glad you liked it. It is my first free verse poem, I usually write lyrical poetry, and lyrics to music, as I am a singer. I will check out your work also, I always make a point to read the poems of those who read mine. I would read them even if they don't read mine, if I happen to come across them, there are so many poets and poems here it would take a couple of life times to read them all. Thank you again so much!!!
    Live Your dreams
    Twinstar
    Edited on Oct 14, 8:04 p.m. because ''.


  • shepdog 1972
    October 14, 2006
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    Thgis was awsome i love the way it made me feel when i was reading it. The imigery was awsome and the hole concept of the poem was good. I do have a thing about all the poems that i read..................They allow me to open my mind and open my sole. I hope in the future that i am able to find more time to read more of you work. Untill then .......have a great day.
    JOHN'

  • Twinstar
    October 14, 2006
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    thank you for your comment and taking the time to read " Sacred Thoughts Of You" I so appreciate it...
    Peace
    Twinstar


  • Brigitte11
    October 13, 2006
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    I really like how you organized the words in this poem. The 'ands' out of place. it really caught my eye.


  • DieForYou
    October 13, 2006
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    aww this is sweet


  • runandhide
    October 13, 2006
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    Great poetry, i really enjoyed it, and well done,
    I especially liked your beggingin and end.
    Thanks for sharing,
    rah


  • JoyfulWriter
    October 13, 2006
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    A very beautiful piece here...your pen shows great promise...your words kept me glued to every word.....Bravo! Smiles, Terry

  • Twinstar
    October 13, 2006
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    Thank You Gaerielle!!! My first free verse. You must have read it at the very moment I posted it. I can't believe I actually did it. I am a lyrical poet, What is Really Going On???
    Love & Light
    Twinstar
    Edited on Oct 13, 7:14 p.m. because ''.

  • gaerielle
    October 13, 2006
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    Beautiful

    Ouffff i am completely siderated by the beauty of this poem. The feel of nature is very tactile. I am a fan of these lines:
    Like wings of a butterfly
    we join forces with our spirits,
    in this sacred bond of love.
    Yesterday, today and tomorrow.
    We are eternal partners,
    Forever......
    Definitely love is a sacred flame which is inexhaustible in time and distance. All my love xx


  • Twinstar
    October 13, 2006
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    Wow!!! I wasn't expecting anyone to read this so fast. I just posted it and it is my very first Free Verse. Thank You so much!!!
    Live Your Dreams
    Twinstar


  • Goody two shoes
    October 13, 2006
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    Very Good

    Twinstar--Very good and very deep. This is a write with a lot of meaning and I liked it very much. It is refreshing to read a poem like this after scouring through a lot of dark writes. I just wonder what kind of lives these ones lead to write with so much hate, venom, knives, suicide, etc. I think a lot is posted for shock value as I can think of no other reason. I would like to see some of them grow up, but then I read a lot of good mature poetry written by some of the very young. I like to give them encouragement when I see them write so well. Then again, I am no professional critic but just know what I like...and I must admit that I have lived in a different age than these young ones. I wish you well with all you write and again I must say that I enjoyed this. May the rest of your life be the best of your life.
    loves ya
    goody two shoes

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