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Play it Cool

Ok here we go

I can see her coming

Don’t let your feeling show

Gotta hold back from running


Just play it cool

Just breath slow

Don’t be a fool

Just don’t…oh no…


She’s got me rapped around her finger man

All these feelings I just can’t explain

Damn she shakes that…wow, I’m her biggest fan

I can’t hold back that I’m just feeling insane


Get it together

I’m good now

Think about the weather

Damn, not now…


I’m like a hound dog with my head hanging out the window

Jumping around the car looking for a treat

I think I’ll just tip over don’t let the wind blow

I just need to tell her that she is so damn sweet


Stop it man

Don’t let it show

She’s not in the plan

Wait…here we go…


Watch her move…man I can’t take it any more

She’s got me on my knees when she moves that way

Oh look at that…Now I'm drooling on the floor

She’s so damn crazy…come on baby, let’s play


Chill out brother

Put the seat back

There’s always another

Damn another attack…


Goddamn, I’m like that bad dog begging for attention

When she starts scratchin and rubbin, my leg starts twitchin

Just give me you loving girl…I need that affection

Baby I don’t even want a cure for this crazy infliction


Have is cig dude

Yeah, Chill out

Don’t be rude

Now I gotta shout…


Girl I’m howlin at the moon every chance I get

Loosing control I‘m like this super Frankenstein

I can’t freakin take it baby and we just met

I'm yours baby…I just wanna…You’re so fine


Now look at what you’ve done

She just walked away

You had your fun…

Hey, she’s coming back to play!

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Written October 13th, 2006 by ringside

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  • Mrs D
    January 19

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    EXCELLENT!!!

    this is a really cool poem ....absolutely love the rythme ...really upbeat and jovial...had me kinda dancing in my seat !!...great expression of how a girl could rock your world !!! great chice and stlye of language....it enhances the piece perfectly ....keep pennning bro!!


  • FightOffYourDemons
    January 17

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    This is good.
    I think it is a very common feeling that people can relate to, I mean some people have either gotten it and felt so nervus and out of control around another person or been the poor girl on the other side of the story.
    It was laugh and well written.

    Overall i would say that you did a good job with this.


    Nikki!


  • Onomarith
    December 11, 2008
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    all fun in this poem, i feel

    this all belongs to me!


  • Galaxy2
    November 22, 2008
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    fun...
    fun...
    sheer fun...


  • JustFallingApart
    November 8, 2008

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    This was very humurous. when I was reading this, it reminded me of an ex-friend of mine every time he would "fall" for a girl. He is still like that today unfortunately. Anyways, nice write, I liked how you can realy get to peoples thoughts. Hope all is well


  • still.she.waits
    November 7, 2008

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    i enjoyed this very much. it shows in a funny, "manly' way how men react to beautiful women. the language and the flow gave this poem a little kick. one suggestion, when someone is talking besides you, put in quotation marks, just so the reader can differentiate, so its easier to read.
    -andi

  • Onomarith
    November 5, 2008
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    thats all about me!

    ping ping


  • pringlepop
    October 6, 2008

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    this was amazing.

    i didn't wanna stop reading it,
    but it ended...
    lol.


    great job.


    *check out my poetry*


  • JustFallingApart
    September 6, 2008
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    wow, just wow. This was realy good, I mean realy good. You've got some talent. The way you wrote this was just captivating, grabing ahold of you and never leting go. I liked it. Realy takes the shape of what can go on in peoples thoughts. nice work, keep the pen flowing


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 24, 2008

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    Hummm..this is something very thoughtful my friend.....well done...I love it..and my thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece in my contest...


  • LalalalaLoopstah gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    I'm glad she came back! I was rooting for ya while I was reading!! This was fun to read and an interesting look at our alter ego. If this poem had a sequel, would her coming back have been a good thing in the long run? Or was the alter ego right? Hmmmm....


  • xXFreedom-of-LoveXx
    June 7, 2008
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    Watch her move…man I can’t take it any more

    She’s got me on my knees when she moves that way

    Oh look at that…Now I'm drooling on the floor

    She’s so damn crazy…come on baby, let’s play

    Chill out brother

    Put the seat back

    There’s always another

    Damn another attack…

    Goddamn, I’m like that bad dog begging for attention

    When she starts scratchin and rubbin, my leg starts twitchin

    Just give me you loving girl…I need that affection

    Baby I don’t even want a cure for this crazy infliction


    i liked only this part


  • Great Cthulhu
    March 15, 2008

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    So true!

    We men, when wrapped up in the world of a woman, become sadly like dogs, so ever expectant of the 'treat'. But society pressures us to keep it on the down low and all we want to do is pant, drool and get scratched a bit. Well done! Thanks for entering, this was a lot of fun to read!


  • katie-jo
    March 13, 2008
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    This was not what I am looking for. Unfortunately you are the 34th person to enter a prewrite so I have to remove you because I am only allowing 25 prewrites on a first come first serve basis.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    March 5, 2008

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    this was a fun read it was very clever to have both sides of your inner thoughts going thanks for entering and good luck


  • daviscth silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    This is a wonderful feel good piece to enjoy and I did. Thanks so much for posting in my contest.


  • mystic-angel
    February 11, 2008

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    I thought this was great. Very different and quite refreshing to read something not of the norm. Well written. Thanks for your entry. Good luck.

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