Inside my stomach twists and turns when I think of you
Didn't you realise what you were putting me through?
Love and affection never came very easy did it?
Only person you cared for was you, you didn't give a shit
Very conveniently, always something else to do
Even when i was ill it didn't matter to you
Tripping you up to smash in your face
Only because you said that you want fucking 'space'
Suppose you don't care that I'm your only child
Please explain to me how you can be so vile
Inside, my feelings rush around when I see your face
These days you make me sick, you'll be easy to replace
Inevitable, I feel nothing but hatred towards you
Never expected you to do the shit that you do
Your mother would even be ashamed
Only she's not around so you get no blame
Unreal seem the memories of our happier days
Really, what made you change your fatherly ways?
For I just want to spit in your face
Allow you to see the person you call a disgrace
Call you a bastard, you know it's true
Even say you're no father, you haven't a clue!
Author notes
TRUTH
Well, I guess this got out the hatred I feel toward my father right now.
Some people may think that this is really horrible of me (well I guess it is) but if you check out my poems about my father in the section 'Fatherless Life' it may help you understand!:
allpoetry.com/list/32710
Hope it's what you are looking for and I hope you don't mind the swearing...i didn't see it say I couldn't.
Written October 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- The Darkness Within by Rosemary Stroebel.
525 points, ended January 24, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Don't Talk To Me Like You Know Me!! by Trixie08.
300 points, ended April 17, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HATE by lesbian-in-love.
565 points, ended November 5, 2007, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I like this one a lot because I can relate to it. My so called father kicked me out of his home and pretty much there I disowned him and he couldn't handle the fact I am a lesbian. My step mom pretty told my real mom that she should force me to talk to him. Yeah it may be harsh but I can say that I do hate him. Very moving piece. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I do not know why you have entered this into a contest for offensive poetry. I hear more offensive things in the news every day. Deleted from contest. Thank you. Edna.
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WOW! This is one of the most common angers felt among people ... is anger towards parents, mainly the father figure..and the situation is usually the father having left the child at a young age. Great write...thanks for your entry.
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People think it's bad for me to have hate for my father too. But, they really don't know what people really are going through because their father's are there. I loved your piece and it relates to my life as well as others. Thank you and best of luck!
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Great poem
Firstly I do understand the anger you feel towards your father. My dad may have been in my life but he was no asset for me, he actually stole from me more than he gave. That said you have written a difficult form of poetry and also made it flow naturally which is no easy feat.
A stunning write, although a very sad topic.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance.
Rosemary -
Honest anger from the heart, yes, this is what I wanted. You have let your ill feelings flow on this so well. I checked out your page, so I could get a feel for you, before I read this, and I like your style. We write alot alike, no structure. I color outside the lines!!!
Good luck in the contest...LOL -
wow, you said this was exactly what you were looking for but it didn't place
you must have had loads that were exactly what you were looking for A tough one to judge then! Thanks for a great comment all the same! Blissful Princess 
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this is exactly what i was looking for... swearing doesnt bother me at all... this was an amazing poem.. alot of emotion i could feel and a perfect rythm and flow... a perfect poem i think... flawless all the way through except a few minor spelling mistakes, but that doesnt matter cause i cant spell worth a shit...lol... well very good poem and good luck!
Jacob -
I can relate to this piece very well. It must feel even if slightly, better to let this all out. You've done well in the acrostic form and the emotions are raw and strong.
I like this piece very much.
Lil -
Yep, it helps me! Thanks so much for reading!
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wow, this flows increadibly well, and the acrostic is brilliant. i think hate poetry is very theraputic!
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Thank you so much for a great comment!
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Thanks so much dad...that means so much...you have filled the large gap in my heart!!
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timely
Dear Sarah,
For even worms procreate and most any male can be a father but mnay can never be a Dad.
To abandon a child is unforgivable, to abandon one as utterly sweet and blissfull as you relegates him to the darkest pit of hell for the rest of eternity.
For you were not just 'some' child. No, You were you, a most special one of heart and talent, one who survived lest the beast.
And I am most proud of you.
Love
Dad
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Geeezzz...this is great, really intense! I applaud you for being able to put your feelings in such great form.
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hehehe eh, yeah! I love'hotile masterpiece' thanks for that!! Thanks so much for a great little comment! Much appreciated! Blissful princess
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Thanks so much!! I really appreciate the excellent comment! Glad you enjoyed/sorry you could relate! Blissful princess
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Hostile Masterpiece
brutal!
i like the flow of the rhyme,like the smooth swing of an axe through someones neck.
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Another soul sister!! this morning is friday feeling revenge and feelin' fine!!!! Great write. Angry and expressing it beautifully!! I love this. I am amazed that you say the words that fit my relationship (ex) perfectly. OHOH this is fantsastic. You go and get it going!!
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Thanks so much IP! Much appreciated! I really appreciate you checking out more of my work! Blissful Princess
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wow!
wow. this piece is breath taking - full of emotion - i love it It is sad, in a way. Only because i think you should not have to feel this way about your father. If he was any kind of father, he would not let you feel this way...if you know what I mean. Again this is a wonderful piece. keep up the good work! 
Insecure Princess xox
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Thanks so much enigma! Much appreciated! Blissful princess
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Thanks so much Lady! Much appreciated! Blissful Princess
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Thanks so much for an excellent comment Wayne! Much appreciated! Blissful Princess
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Excellent
Wow, this is sad poem, but very well writen and it has great rythem to it. It's sad that you feel this way about father. My mother was my let down so I know what it feels like although I would presume the situation to be different. Exelent poem, Well Done you have great tallent. Good Luck in the comp. -
good acrostic ... if i didn't see this was entered into an acrostic contest i probably wouldn't have noticed it was an acrostic
this doesn't have that choppy feel typical of this type of poem
good to get that hatred out and that you did
good writing
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Wonderful piece of writing
TREMENDOUS PIECE OF WRITING HERE. I LOVED THIS. FULL OF PASSION, YET SO SO SAD. I CAN ONLY HOPE THAT IN YOUR LIFE YOU CAN FIND THE HAPPINESS YOU SO RICHLY DESERVE. GOD BLESS YOU. May the 'Light' always be with you. -
Nope, I guess you are right, but you may want to read some of the poems in my 'fatherless life' section and then, just perhaps, you may want to spit in his face too!
Blissful princess
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I was attracted by the title, expecting this to be a really funny and witty poem. How sad to find it is nothing of the sort. Spitting into faces is not the best way to resolve family difficulties, I have always found.
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