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The Slide

I never minded

being number two
I sort of like

standing in the wings
I was always just

over the horizon
I just had to bide my time

But I started sliding
And I don't think

that I like that
I'm really not a number three

I think it's time to move on
Become a number one
Find someone to hold me tight

So tonight I take a step
Out from where it's safe
Find myself a lover and a friend

I may always adore her
And wish I'd made her mine
But it's time I get off this slide

Author notes

For all those who have waited in the wings hoping to get a chance to make someone very special their's.  Get off the slide and become someone else's number one and stop settling for number Two, Three, Four,
Written October 13th, 2006

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    Spunky!

    Very well put. Glad you show your spunk.


  • TallDrinkofWater
    October 15, 2006
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    Sandy, I was thinking a lot about ladies who had married men for boyfriends when I wrote this and about a lady friend here and how the two situations were almost the same. None of us should settle for being number two. Duckie got it right.


  • Sandygram
    October 15, 2006
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    SO WARM AND HEARTFELT.I LOVE THIS POEMi

    Ah Charlie, you are a number 1 and you should never settle for being a 2. I hope you find that someone special. When you see her, grab her and never let her go. Your poems are always so thoughtful and tell of how you feel. You will make someone very happy my dear friend. Always a pleasure to read your awesome poetry. . Take good care of yourself. Love, Sandy


  • Broken-Rickie
    October 14, 2006
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    Great job Daddy. With some of the things I been going through, this really makes me think...Miss ya!


  • individuality gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    a good poem though perhaps changing sorta to sort of? i think ti would read better. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

  • herrbench
    October 14, 2006
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    This is quite a clever image. I don't know if I can completely identify with it, but I certainly get what you mean, and you've expressed it well. It didn't really flow that well for me - not a fan of the commas in the middle of lines, but a good effort. Well done. Bench

  • dont-4-get- duckie
    October 13, 2006
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    Hmmmm.... I see your point. This must be my day to read about relationships (unintentionally but, oh well). I think you're saying to stop waiting on someone to pick you out of their line up, and to go get your own. Not a "line up" but get your own number one, someone just for you and you for them. Nicely written. Allie.

  • June-bug
    October 13, 2006
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    still confused LOl

    Very different kind of write. Kind of left me a little confused. Not sure if you are telling someone to give up hope or hold on to it. But than again I am easily confused at times. LOL. Must be having one of the moments. Maybe it is just this cold I have clouding my brain. LOL Just looking for an excuse!LOL
    Reread this and now my head is a little clearer, so I just wanted to say that I get it I think. No one should ever settle for less than number one in a relationship.
    Edited on Oct 14, 8:44 because ''.

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