Twas' the check before Christmas, I searched through the house
No hidden money, he took it, that louse,
The piggy banks were empty, and broken into
I thought, I hope you get whats coming to you
The children were snoring loudly in bed
As I had visions of hitting Dad on the head
Yeah he's gone and left Mama to explain
They'll get no toys, just cryin and pain
So I threw his clothes on the lawn, it didn't matter
I even poured out his beer 'cause it makes him get fatter
To the front door he came, with a stupid grin on his face
He better think again, or I'll have to put him in his place
As I thought of my babies crying in their bed
My blood was so boiling, I threw the iron at his head
He ducked down with fear and said, let me in, You crazy lady!
He said have you gone crazy? I'd never do that to you and the babies
I said, you low down, no good honey
how could spend all the Christmas money
Now, little Sam and Susie won't wake to presents
So you better get out before I send you lower than heaven
Oh now, just wait a minute Baby darlin', he said
You are so mistaken, please hear what I just did
I got my check and I went all over the mall
I rushed home fast as I could to bring presents for you all!
Author notes
Sometimes people can jump to conclusions!
Written by: SilverButterfly October 12th, 2006
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A contest entry
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Very funny!
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This is a wonderful light hearted Christmas piece. Thanks so much for sharing it with me and I just love the background.
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Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I can really see the homor in this piece--Very well written!!
If you get a chance--Go to my site and read---
"Twas the Week Before Christmas"
I enjot your talent and deication to Our Savior!!
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I remember this poem, from a contest I held a long time ago.
This was a very good poem. I really enjoied reading it *again* thansk for entering my contest and good luck! -
Clever Twist to The Night Before Christmas!
I got quite involved in this little tale and was just as mad as you were at that "no good honey". But he pulled through and took care of gifts for all! Well penned...good rhyming, which I enjoy so much. Thank you for your contest entry! Best of luck....and have a jolly Christmas!
Carolyn
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This is a cute story and it is presented very well.
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Thanks so very much for your comment!!! GBY
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this reminded of a joke I heard many years ago about a man who was so mean he didn't buy his kids any present. On Christmas Eve, when his kids were in bed, he purposely burst a balloon at the top of the stairs, when his kids asked what happened the meanie told them that Santa had been shot and they wouldn't get any presents this year.
I'm glad the chap in your story wasn't as mean and the kids had a good christmas. LOL
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Ha I think I like your story better than mine lol. It was very funny!!!! GBY
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I love the title, the all importamt Check Before Christmas! This made me giggle and I'm so pleased it ended happily. Great write. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks again friend for the wonderful comment! GBY
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Yes indeed, all the wrong conclusions!
Thank you for your entry. You lead your readers down the path of (as you said) wrong conclusions, and then snap them back at the end quite deftly.
You've done pretty well with the aabb rhyme, although it slips about a bit: bed/dad, face/ok, daze/crazy, presents/heaven, said/did. I guess they could pass as half rhymes. Also, the meter goes through a few changes, making me stumble whilst reading it aloud.
However, in the main, you have created an amusing poem that turns a potentially sad tale into a happy one.
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Thank you so much for comment. It is an honor, since you have such great writing talent! GBY
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beer cheer
i like what you did here, the ending surprised
different the outcome, from what i had surmised
a new spin on christmas, presents we drink
wrapped in cardboard boxes, one dozen i think
so have a good christmas, some holiday cheer
just keep a handle on, the man you call dear
rudolf
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HA!!!! Thanks so much for the uplitfing comment. It made me By the way...I love your work so far!!! GBY!
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Great poem
I liked the rhthm and rhyme,Great work,on it!Keep up the great work,I hope to read more!Lisa k Haslett Raytown Missouri!Merry Christmas! -
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Merry Christmas to you too sweetie! and thank you for commentingGBY
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This is a wonderful write! I love the picture you used for this. Thanks for sharing this one!
Keep up the great work!
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oops! I sent a message to the wrong person lol. please for give me!! GbY
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Hi Jeremy. Well while she was jumping to conclusions, that he stole the money...he was out buying them presents. the pic is supposed to be Dad dressed up as santa...rushing home! But i guess it didnt go over too good huh? Thanks so so much my friend!!!GBY
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This poem was great! IT led me to believe one thing than totally switched it up at the end. Very good, if that was your intentions. I like the picture at the top, although I don't know what it has to do with the poem. So did he spend all the x-mas money and then was redeemed by the last paycheck or was she just jumping to conclusions the whole time? Just curious. Thanks for sharing. The title sold me honestly.
The NEw Kid
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Well while she was jumping to conclusions, that he stole the money...he was out buying them presents. the pic is supposed to be Dad dressed up as santa...rushing home! But i guess it didnt go over too good huh? Thanks so so much my friend!!!GBY
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Thank you much!
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Great ending!
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Why thank you Lori! He sure was close to being in the doghouse lol. GBY
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Thank you so very much! and especially for the applause my friend. GBY
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This is great! I really thought dad was about to spend Christmas in the dog house! Fabulous story!
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That no good.... Oh, what a sweetie! Nice and very creative! Great rhyme and flow to boot. Best wishes to you in your contest!
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Well thank you dear! I have a crazy imagination at times, I must admit. Good luck with your contest. I think its a great and original one indeed. GBY
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well, this was a very interesting story about a serious and almost fatal mis understanding! I liked this quite a lot. I liked how you werw able to keep with the poem style so well. Thanks and good luck in my contest!
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Thank you for your kind comment! I truly appreciate it. GBY
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nice i wonderhow you came up with the idea to write this.
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