Stalking Death
Feasting upon your soul.
The shadows
manifest all around you,
consuming your conscious being.
Engulfing your mind.
These voices...
These visions...
Locked away in your head,
buried deep
far from emotion
far from you.
Collected through your life.
Stored for all eternity
inside you.
Breaking you down,
slowly...
methodical...
what you once were
you are no longer.
No longer human.
Transformed into a soulless being.
Eyes pierce your prey,
through their soul
deep into their being.
Hunted...
Haunted...
Stalking...
until, finally what you seek
you have devoured.
Leaving just an empty shell,
left with no life.
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Written October 12th, 2006
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I truly enjoyed this piece, it is dark and deliberate in its format and I love it. What I didnt like about this piece was the last line.. as I was reading it.. in my head the last line was different, instead of 'left with no life' I was thinking, 'left without life' other than that.. it was great, you did very well with this poem! Thank you for entering, goodluck!
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Yayyyyyyyy.........another good poem here my dear,
Elizabeth
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Magnificent Verse!!
Whoa!! I instantly got these images of a chase in the deepest
darkest woods but not just any woods..whatever the mind could
Create~that person's nightmare-daymare...
It builds momentum which is Magnificent because when a person
stops eating while reading...Then it is a good write
A Dark Masterpiece to get the blood pressure to rise and
the crimson to flow...faster
Best wishes to You in the contest!
Many blessings to You
and much love~ Desire~*~
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i like the minimal use of words in each line... makes it seem like you are chasing something or desperately searching to kill.. i always enjoy reading fast... engages my mind more
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deep
This was another chilling deep write Master Ktulu.You've done a great job.The very best of luck to you in the contest!
Kari
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