One glance
At the stricken and frail figure
Of a devastated, battered renegade
Her failed attempts of escape
Never quite making it
As told by a devious prevaricator
Departure would be promised
On a passing train the night of an eclipse
But the message was disjointed
It wasn’t too clear
Which train, what time
She never knew
That mystic evening
It was an emerald sky
A melancholy mood in the air
It ended before it started
The trauma of this feeble attempt
Sent the young beauty
Into waves of despair
Her very being
Disintegrating into pieces
Eroding into the ditch
Defiled by the muck
Internally eaten away
Deliverance for this maiden
Was as hopeless as seeing the sight
Of a piglet soaring in the sky
But her soul lives on
In memoirs of her day
Author notes
mua ha, title and all the words in the word back! lol. anyway. hope you like it.
Written October 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- †Titles and Word bank...† by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended October 16, 2006, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
haha... yea... me, rhyme? not likely lol. last year i had to write a ryhming poem for english and i used the rhymer on ap for the whole thing. i am basically incapable of writing rhymes lol. but thanks though
-
Congratulations on third place ^.^!!! You used the word bank impressively. I would've liked to have seen what you would've done with this piece if it rhymed, though. It's still excellent though. Great job. Good luck in your future contests
! 
~Aly -
thanks
-
VERY BEAUTIFUL AND HEARtFELT
Awesome poem you have written. Very touching and heartfelt. So deserved to be among the winners. CONGRATULATIONS!!!! Take care, Sandy -
haha thanks, I don't usually write much of the more depressing genre of poetry lol
-
You did this write very well. A lot of emotion and I liked the imagery you portrayed in this. Good use of the words, really grasped my attention in this. I liked the ending a lot. Nice work on this desolate write, I did enjoy it. Thanks for entering and good luck.
x~Shotgun
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
1 old applause
