There's this world that's full of guys
There's this one guy who's different
He's sweet, he actually cares
He's far away,
It's not his fault though
It's something that no one could have predicted
He makes me smile and giggle
He says all these sweet things
There's so many feelings
There's something between us that is more than special
I'm so scared that I care about him to much
I'm scared he may be leaving for a long time
It shouldn't bother me as much as it seems to
It does though
It's just one of those things
It's something that kinda makes me mad
The cops suck ass
The system is fucked up
I really don't want him to go
I want him to stay with me
There's nothing I can do though
There's nothing he can do either
He's one of those rare guys
He's the type you take home to mom
Then you fall in love with him
Then your mom constantly asks
How come he's so sweet
How come he's single?
All you can do I smile
All you wanna do is smile
Author notes
well i tried to do every 2 lines the same... i don't know if this is an actual way to do it, but i did! so whatever! haha... let me know how you think... it's about a guy that i recently met and stuffs movin fast...
Originally Written October 12th, 2006
entered in contest by Joleahe on 7/27/07
Option # 2
A contest entry
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300 points, ended August 1, 2007, 10 entries
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I would say you did a great job with what you were trying as you took Bronze
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hey so that thing on your page was that about michael? beautiful write i like it, reminds me of ross. great job keep it up
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angelbaby87
this wasn't to Micheal, actually! haha... there was a different guy in my life and he turned out to be different than i thought he was... oh well though, right?! im only 18.. and still hopelessly in love with my ex... wow, what a life i lead! haha... oh well, what can you do! Micheal will always have a HUG place in my heart and that's just how its going to be... he knows it too, which i don't know if that's good or bad, but i does give him the ability to hurt me even more, but i trust him not to... oh well... here's the deal on this poem... the guy i wrote it for turned out to be a HUGE d!ck! no joke... i recently talked to him online though and he was actually decent... so who knows... anyways.. hope all is well with you and Ross!
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This piece move very quickly like hip hop and I had to make myself slow down while reading it. I have never read your work but think you might be genuinelly impressive. I know that while you carry the mantra that guys suck, it could be that the right guy has obviously not come along-yet. RC
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A good poem
You can feel the emotions put into it
And it was very harsh
But all in all a very good poem
Well done -
Understandably it is a thought poem. It's good for what it is.
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Beautiful write darling, I think its sweet to find someone so perfect ♥
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Welll, I was actually a little surprised when I read this. I can completely relate to it and it always is a shocker when somebody else has put down your thoughts in a poem. Guys do suck...I agree with that...but I always try to remember that my dad is a guy that doesn't suck and I'm damn sure he can't be the only one lol
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Awesome write and hope all works out for you both!
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yeah, i dunno... GUYS suck though! haha... you know how it goes babe!
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awwww. I know who this guy is!! and i can tell he means somethin special to ya girl. ya know im here for ya too. lots o love.
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