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Never letting go.

Today I saw you fall, yesterday I seen you cry.
the day before I seen you begin to break. With
every tear my hand was there to brush up against
your cheek and take them away. With every weep
my voice softly sang “it’s alright, I wont let anything
happen to you.” With every sob I held you in my arms
told you to be calm. I looked you in the eyes you looked
back in mine and said “ I love you with all that I am, hold
me close never let me go.” I held you closer. Listened to you
breath comforted you in this time of need like a mother to
a child. Finally breaking the silence I said “ I love you and
nothing will change that, we went through a lot but there
will always be a spot for you in my arms and my heart.”
You smiled and laid your head on my cheast I kissed it
as you listened to my heart beat we sat there together
two souls brought into one entity. I watched you fall today
stood next to you picked you up looked you in the eyes and
say “no worries I will not let you fall completely.”

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This just came to me. i wrote it 5 min ago. tell me what you think and be honest please!! thank you.
Written October 12th, 2006

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  • Immortalbeauty
    August 6, 2008
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    it's beautiful

    It's a beautiful poem but my contest was about truth...something that actaully happend to you.....