the song of an unseen bird
across the wet road among
tall pines
a melodic three note lilt
rings in my mind
through early autumn day
to timeless primordial forest
the green man
fleet fugitive
sparkleberry eyes
dancing in droplets
of leaf-strewn light
away through the trees
over the hill rushes the road
under cloud-marbled sky
Author notes
I think the idea of the Green Man may be a race memory symbolic of our forest dwelling forebears. But he is whatever we make of him.
The poem attempts to bring the reader to a visionary state, if only a fleeting one.
Written October 12th, 2006
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Absolutely beautifully written, so easy to get completely lost in the soft sway and melodic lilt of your words. Perfect Sunday afternoon reading.
Kat
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Well written and definitely a trip back into earlier memories.
Nicely penned.
John -
Hi, this is a very lovely poem in just a few lines is creates vivid images, a true pleasure to read,If you can find an honest comp I would think this would bring home a shiny trophy, loved it, all the best, Di
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Excellant/fun/intriguing
Aye, and for me, that was successful. A very good write, indeed. -
excellent
This is a beautiful piece, I liked it very much. -
nice
love the papa -
Your work was... intense. It conveyed powerful emotions, and gave the fleeting impression of something greet flitting just out of sight. I wonder, though, if it could be more clear, without losing any of the power?
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great
your picture was very intense. i found it to be an awesome poem. -
I really liked this alot. I get a real good feeling when i read this. i hope to get time to read more of your work. I hope that you have a great day.
JOHN
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this made me think of roy harper's album which holds the same title. a good poem though why the author notes? why not just let the poem speak without having to lay your thought on a plate to the reader
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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