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in qualms of time that cross my mind


Even if you stand up straight
it can't untangle what's within
fingers interlock
what a conscience never will
lines drawn invisibly
only exist

in a very small sense
ice sized cubes can still take
forever to melt
answers can be there
but where
oh where
the
hell
is
there?
 
Even if you walk don't run
footprints tend to follow where you go
the shavings an eraser makes
never taste like the past
'cause it's gone
words can slither farther
than they're meant to
and they do
a garage is not a healthy place
to leave parts
of
who
you
are.
 
Even if you felt how I feel
or could read what isn't written
and sing what's never been sung
would my ears unlock the door
to the sound
a beating heart makes
when it's left out in the rain
three
centuries
ago?


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feeling unfeeling
Written October 12th, 2006

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  • Anthony-
    October 14, 2006
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    I like the idea of the conscience being a true part of this life that we lead. Your structure (if one wishes to call it that) was also eye grabbing/attention grabbing and interesting which leads the piece to become a line of unique ones that you are the sole creator of. I hope that you are having a good day and are happy. Thank you for sharing. Anthony aka Tony.


  • Nature Song silver member
    October 12, 2006
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    I like how you describe feelings and emotions here. "Don't leave parts in a garage for its not a safe place", love that line captures volumes. This is quite a uniqe poem, and Blind-Ambition says, it is worth a second read! ~Sie


  • Blind-Ambition
    October 12, 2006
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    love it

    Once again, your observations are unique and the questions are insightful. This is one to read slowly and more than once. Great write.

    "There is no there there."~ Gertrude Stein