There were dreams I dare not see
For the reason of them breaking me
And for the visions but, that come
I have no hold to ensure them
So be it fortunate if I am alone
That's how songs of love have gone
No matter where my heart will breathe
My undying desires will simply greet
And when my dear you will see
That there is no one for you to be
If those days ever seem so long
Don't be scared of this lonely song
We might just be on different roads
Solemnly mourning our unfufilled boasts
We shall but,meet where we are destined
Seldom Alone I think in my mind...
Author notes
Form A...
Written October 11th, 2006
"Never feel the loneliness of being alone its just that you can take care things yourself just take a peek in"-sunny
option -2
In a list
A contest entry
- Rich Words and Strong Emotions by thankful4theSuNsEt.
600 points, ended December 31, 2006, 32 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round 1 of 5 (My second 5-part contest) by Kei-Aira.
300 points, ended February 5, 2007, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the best you can do! (for our none acomplished writers) by honey bear.
550 points, ended March 4, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - NEED AN AP BOYFRIEND by Tempa Lee.
300 points, ended March 4, 2007, 4 entries
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360 points, ended March 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Intereting Poem
A very interesting poem. Thankas for sharing.
Hugs
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Lonliness is always difficult, but even more so when one is surrounded by people and intolerable when around so-called loved ones. I do think some of the punctuation in this is a bit off, but thats jes my thought, so no biggie. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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Sentiments well expressed in these lines - can feel that hope that being alone is just a passing thing, that even when along there are others there with us going in the same direction.
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Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.
You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got. -
thanks for entering my contest NEED AN AP BOYFRIEND. nicely written and good luck. return the favor.
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what is this
this is not the work of a none acomplished writer 
it is an exelent write and aslo i see a silver cup winner , i also know this writer 
ha ha it is my beloved ap son sneaking in with this exelent write 
well it is too good to win a cup in this contest and i cant even applaud as i can t just applaud one entry in my contest or it wouldnt be fair to the others
exelent work though
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wow
very well written. I love it, and great quote! thanks for entering! good luck!
keep writing,
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Thank you...`
Thank you for the contest and the comment...
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I think this is rather a nice poem. You introduce some interesting lines and manage to use a lot of original ideas to make this poem stand out.
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awesome. i like it alot
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you painted a very pretty picture here with your words.
"We shall but,meet where we are destined" - that was beautiful...i wish i could remember that more often! thanks for entering, good luck! -
This is indeed a creative work you have entered here and most certainly abstract. Thank you for adding the form to the author's notes. There is a mysterious aire about this work. It leaves the reader hanging. It is cleverly written and flows with ease. Thank you for this entry into my contest. I wish you the best.
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this is a great piece of work! very complex and the meaning is deep rooted!
You're wording was phenomenal in this piece and the over-all poem was extraordinary. You also incorporated nice imagery, and it was an extraordinary read. Don't put down that pen! I love this so much. Keep up the killer work, take care and good luck.
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MeOW!
This is an awesome piece.
I think I'll add you to my favorites so I can read more when they come.
Great poem, great flow.
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Darling
All life must die
as needs crave eternity
including feelings that vie
love, marriage and maternity.
Smoosh
Janet -
beautiful
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And when my dear you will see
That there is no one for you to be
If those days ever seem so long
Don't be scared of this lonely song
wow .. just wow
thank for giving me the link here
this is awesome
i havent read a good poem in a while
its rly powerful
its like you can get so many meanings from this
makes the reader wonder
and i love poems like this
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WOW SUNNY! I'm sorry I haven't been on in awhile and we have been out of touch, I hope all's well with you. I LOVE this piece, it's dark and powerful. You did an AWESOME job!
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WOWY SUNNY I WILL SAY NO MORE BUT YOU CAN GET A APLAUSE FROM ME TOO!
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This is a good write though please don't make it sound like a contest if it wasn't for the frist few lines I would have never clicked. I hate contest cause they never truly explain anything they want but this is a good write and I like it alot. well done.
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Ok, I'll be shameless too and say I was expecting to read a poem that either won 10000 points or at least placed. If so, I'd like to see the poems that didn't place or at least the contest your post implies.
Did I miss something here?
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This is quite a dark and mysterious poem. Liked the rhyme and the sentiment was great. The title is cool too. Not really sure what it was about though and a couple of the stanzas were clunky and made no sense. The imagery was dark. Is this what you wanted?
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WHOA! This has had 410 views THIS WEEK! it is an excellent write but I clicked on it from the shameless promotion box and thought it was a contest because your exact words were:
A contest FOR 10000 Points...ARE you not alone...
and if it was in a contest then it isn't now
but in any event I am glad I clicked 
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Great write, i really like it. It says so much and it is just so great. i really like it! -
This is a good write and read. I really like how you wrote this poem.
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This is a good write and read. I really like how you wrote this poem.
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This is a good write and read. I really like how you wrote this poem.
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"We might just be on different roads
Solemnly mourning our unfufilled boasts
We shall but,meet where we are destined
Seldom Alone I think in my mind..."
Me and Ashley;... the roads we travelled through life are so different, yet filled with the same kind of energy. It's like we're magnets, but the magnets are facing the repelling sides; We love each other so much, yet we can never be together, alone, just the two of us. Something always comes between us; to separate us through distance... yet the miles between us have ironically brought us closer. I pray you never have to suffer the way we do;
that the one you love can always be beside, holding you so dearly.
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It is a great to have your comment on my poem thank you so much your comment means a lot to me....
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It is a great honour for me to have your comment on my poem thank you so much your comment means a lot to me....
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Thanks
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this is beautiful. it flows with this indescriable uniqueness and is hopeful and full of heart. this was incredibly good and really relatable. thanks for sharing this. keep it up!
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Good poem
good poem,I liked it!Great job,very well written,nicely done!Lisa K Haslett raytown Missouri -
nice work!
"Heart breathe" didn't vibe well with me, as I just couldn't picture it. Likewise, the word 'simply' in the next line felt like filler. Simply and really were two words my parents always tought me to remove from a speech
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great write. but with all that applause I guess you already know that. You've probably heard all the beautiful words that tis poem brings out so....I will just say DITTO to the good comments....and let you know how beautiful it is to me too. Great write!
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very well written.
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good wrk!
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Happy republic day
Wish you and all a very happy republic day say to yourself today you are Proud to be an Indian...
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Grooooooooovy
Yes. Yes. Yes. I love the whole "WHo knows what will happen- and- I will coalesce to the hand I've been dealt." If I've misinterpreted please set me straight. Very nice poem. -
This is wonderful!
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its precious piece but may be i m not agree with some of your passage but still a nice work and with alot of real and true things i liked tht alot
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words -
thank you for your kind comment on "Please forgive me". as well as leading me here to this piece. There is beauty to be found in loneliness...as long as the heart and soul behold memories of yesteryears and hopes of tomorrows. Someone once told me that loneliness is the keeper of the stars and the town crier that forces us to get to know ourselves inside and out, so that eventually we can share all that with someone else. And look how we fill our lonely times------by seeking words to express it, by reading books to further our knowledge or just for personal introspect
reenie
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You can really relate to this poem. It's almost like you're writing from each of our souls. But then, most of us write for the same reason. Great write. You have a great talent. Keep it up, I'd hate to see such potential go to waste .
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Well done, very relateable. Wish it wasn't,
This piece really hit home. I read a lot of my head in this write. It is a far better work than the ones that I've tried to accomplish in recent days, but I suppose we all must fight with everything we are. Well done -
This poem is great, and I feel there is a lot of historical memorabilia in this, such as photographs, records, tapes and other communicative items.
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Beautifull, lonely but sweet. Though we crave love we are never really alone in this world, or at least that's what I feel it's telling me.
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So lonely, and yet so hopeful. I love a poem that ends on a high note. Call me sappy. I don't care. You've got some nice rhyme here and just a great poem altogether. --->pixxie<---
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so sweet!!! so simple..so beautiful..one of those poems that u can just read over and over..nicely done
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Packed with emotions and descriptions, this is and expression of loving and longing I think. I really like this, calls for a re-read. Bravo.
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I had seen this contest and could have never pulled off the lovely poetry you have done here Wonderfully Written...I'm amazed that's all I can say, your talent shines
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this is amazing..
you can feel the sadness.
its got loneliness dripping from
each line to the next, and that want
to have something or someone that you can't
or you just don't but could.
you have a great amount of talent,
i can tell just by reading this peice,
that your poetry is well thought out,
and you pour your emotion into everything
that comes from your mind to this site, or
anything that you write in general..
thanks for a great read
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I love this poem it was great... This definately got an applaud from me... I really enjoyed it
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oh, so sad and melancholic but WHAT a great write written by a beautiful soul that surely appreciates and knows the goodness brought by loneliness...Loneliness was one of the things I love most- the one who knows me and who makes me a real.You are so great when you write these lines...
*So be it fortunate if I am alone
That's how songs of love have gone
No matter where my heart will breathe
My undying desires will simply greet*
BEAUTIFUL...LONELINESS was so amazing but how sad that most people a fears him.I'm so grateful that YOU are one of those who love him. Like an existent being not as a state of emotion.Thank you for the read...you made my day so great!
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Good write
A sad, but profound write, you are a talent my dear and I enjoyed the read. Your flow kept me entangled in your words and gave me a smooth release at the end. Thanks for sharing this write and keep up the good work, my pleasure to read your work! ~Tia -
Truly an amazing and heartfelt piece, it's laced with emotion and filled with sadness. But still within it all it portrays a beautiful scene between two people..
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There is too much sadness in the world and why people seem to thrive on it I guess I'll never know. I guess they would say they have too. How unfortunate that your poem brings such thoughts to mind. Best Wishes.
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a very sad and melancholic write , but with this even melancholy has a certain beauty ( for the beauty lies in the memories that you are keeping in your heart)
reenie
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Thank you
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Sunny this was truly a beautiful pen, filled with longing emotions..poignant, ahh
The only 'things' I've been able to gleen are photographs and music, perhaps precious items you keep in remembrance..and of course your memories. This truly touched me today
Best wishes and many blessings Sandi
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This sounds like there are many photographs around you, of someone who is no more, and your skill to write such poetry is through this person. I have been away from someone close for 2 years, I write my best stuff. There is a remote control to play your favourite songs of yesterday. I have no hold which means there is a lot on show which are reminisces, and not so far from your thoughts, that lovely light in your sitting room, which puts you in this poetic period of total vision. Loved the poem, very good indeed!!! Titus. It does sound a very isolated person, but I am sure there is plenty of family in the wings. Best Wishes, Titus
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wow this was awsome the rhythem and what you wanted to say.. Wow this was incredable.. I wish I could spit stuff like that out to make it sound like that.. GREAT JOB..
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I love this line
And when my dear you will see
That there is no one for you to be
This came out clear and rhymed perfect.
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A beautifully talented write,Full of longing and maybe just a little hope , "And when my dear you will see
That there is no one for you to be
If those days ever seem so long
Don't be scared of this lonely song"
This is great stuff...Scott -
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These In A Sense Are The Best Dreams To Dream. Powerful Write & Flowing Well.
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Beautifully and tastefully written. It's gentle and yet starkingly effective. The words you have chosen create an intriguing atmosphere. Well done! xxx
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Awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was sooooooooooooo sad!!! I feel lonely alot as I am a divorcee, you've captured feelings here that vividly remind us all of lonely times we have had to overcome in our lifetime.Great job writing, choice of words exellent, and flow was awsome. I sincerely hope that you are not this lonely and that it is just a great write that you have graced us all with reading. Thanks for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!Toni -
sheer brilliance
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Ah, I, have one of these as well.....I lvoe how you ahve written this...makes me lonely indeed.
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Well, done and thank you for sharing. I think you did an outstanding job on this poem. Another magnificent poem to your collection. This is a great poem. I love it all... the poem, the background, the topic....it's all great. there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you. -
Thank yoiu for the read
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I'll hold on this one, for now, as I am still guessing, and the purpose for prewrites are for my wondering that these objects still persists, even though prewrites can be vague as well!
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TRhank you so much mom your words are gold to me
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exelent
exelent work here sunny ,i am so proud as your writing just seems to get better and better a lovely but very sad write that leaves the reader feeling the loneliness from the words exelent
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Wonderful
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Ah Sunny I always love to read your work and this is sad and very powerfull you are soooooooooooooo talented, but immediatly the first stanza grabbed me:
There were dreams I dare not see
For the reason of them breaking me
And for the visions but, that come
I have no hold to ensure them
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i felt drowned in your lonely song --with the the smooth flow of words and strong emotion...beautiful and gripping too...
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Hmmmm... interesting. I'm not quite sure what to say. Only that it's an awesome write, with a nice, smooth flow. And did I mention interesting?
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very nice indeed, sunny. There is always such simple, direct purity of soul in your writing.
best,
rachel
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All you work is wonderful and heart felt
I agree with the other poets this is a masterpiece. Truly amazing write.It flow good it works. (Lisa) I applaud you sincerely
"And when my dear you will see
That there is no one for you to be
If those days ever seem so long
Don't be scared of this lonely song"
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This reads so easily and is just a wonderful read. A true masterpiece! Keep that pen flowing!
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Lovely peice of work. Brings the picture of a love parting for unknown reasons, but at the same time never being gone. Two starstruck souls wafting through dreams and tears for the want of that which they can't ever have.
Simpatia
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a nice light piece of poetry which you have written here, an enjoyable poem, good flow to it. thank you for sharing your poetic piece with us. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Lovely poem indeed. Very true for many people too. Well done, a beautiful write.
x x
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Wonderful work! This poem was sad and yet almost feel a touch of acceptance in this work. Very moving peice to read!
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There is a soulful quality to this poem, deeply moving and beautifully expressed. You have penned a gem. Thanks for sharing.
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OH wow, I ABSOLUTLEY AM in LOVE with this.
Awesome flow,Great write!
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment It s about the way you feel you are wnated by all yet lonely well thanks a lot for the read have a great day...
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Thank you so much for your comments
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Your rhyme and meter are great! The lines aren't choppy to maintain the rhyme, so the poem reads smoothly. Good stuff. --->pixxie<---
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You start reading and it gets better and better till it reaches the last stanza.....
"We might just be on different roads
Solemnly mourning our unfufilled boasts
We shall but,meet where we are destined
Seldom Alone I think in my mind..."
And then you are like Aahhh!!!What a Lovely Poem!I start wishing there is more to it.Its Exquisite! No doubt all those who have read agree with me....the number of applauds you already gained. And here's one more to add to it. -
I really like how you wrote this piece. It has good rhyme and flow. I did have to read it a couple times to really get it.
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Hi, by your comment next to the title, I see you have had moronic clickers clicking their little hearts out, godness knows why they do it, probably no brain so do not know what to say,lol, nice write, all the best, Di
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this is very pretty and comforting. Well done!
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a very well wriyyen poem with marvelous flow and images that can mean many things to different persons,,,blessings...Fire Storm
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this poem is very fittingly for the group. the title of the group kind of relates to your poem. cool write and very well put together. obviously this is one of perfection
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Beyond the hopes of my eyes could see
Beyond tomorows to come and be
I ll be there in one form or other
Don't be alone I'm your soul mentor
Sunny -
My favriote stanza is:
"There were dreams I dare not see
For the reason of them breaking me
And for the visions but, that come
I have no hold to ensure them"
Excellent. The whole piece was amazing.
Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing
~ImmortalUndead~
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