Something? is missing
I dont know what to do
Something? is missing
Is that something? you
I feel such a void
My mind is yearning
Maybe I should be?
back in school learning...
Why do I always?
hold myself back...
From you, and from this, and even from that
Enough confidence, I do lack!
How much more time?
is going to pass...
Before I'm brave enough!
to get up off my ass
Too much emptiness
My heart is aching!
Its on the line...
Its yours for the taking
Something? is missing
I wish I could see...
What something? is missing,
needed to fulfill me
A person?, a place?,
or maybe a thing?
I need! something to stop
my useless wandering...
A person?, a place?,
or maybe a thing?
I need! something?...
!something!
WHAT SOMETHING?
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Author notes
*Please let me know what you think of this poem.* The punctuation is off on purpose! The rhyming is off as well. Poor flow etc. Is it too confusing as a reader? I did it to put emphasis on the meaning...the key parts of it anyways. I'm not to sure what I think of it myself but at least I got a few things of my chest!
Written October 11th, 2006
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I loved it!
Oh hun how much do I feel you here.
I also feel emptiness in my life and heart, at the moment. yeah punctuation is off a bit, but I understood what you meant and stuff, all in all I loved it...maybe cause I can very easily put myself in your shoes! Gives me ideas to write a poem myself...haha oh yes and ty for the note on my guestbook! I appreciate it!
::huggs&kisses::
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ireallylovedthis,nicewrite!
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Thank you so much! I wasnt so sure what to make of this one. I'm still not sure what I think of it. I'm glad you like it though!
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