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I'd Give Anything For Your Love

I'd give anything for your love
Because I never wanna be alone
I always want to be by your side
I only live for your love

I never knew love like this before
Because you walked in and took away my sore.
You are every part of me
And as the days that I live, and the love that is made
I could not let you go because I love you babe.

Baby your eyes are full of fire
And you have so much desire
And each moment and second we are together
I would die if had to end
Because this type of love will never happen again.

You are the one to win my heart and to guide my way through
Because your love is beautiful that i wont make it without you
If you try to leave me and as nights that will go by
I will sit here and only cry.

So My last words that I will say
Is I love you and I want you to stay.
Our love we share is so strong
That I think we could make it and always bond.



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Written October 11th, 2006

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  • Predair
    February 11, 2007
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    So...

    so...true
    this is a lovely piece, as much as i denouce, the fickle illsion, one calls love. But the words, and the form, convey a meaning, and express the perplexity that seems to rich, and maybe even true, that one can only hope to see in due time.

    made me think
    thanks...


  • Ascended to Hell
    January 19, 2007

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    I like it alot. Love. So hard to understand and so definate once you get it. Great write!


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    December 15, 2006

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    delicious

    ehhhee
    its so kind and nice with soft words and ryhme
    great
    by
    the poet of heart and beautiful words

  • Buckybearinlove
    December 10, 2006
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    Awwwww..

    That was so sweet i love it


  • Dwn
    November 28, 2006
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    Pretty good

    You have expressed your feelings very well, and though it is a nice piece on its own, it could use a little tightening up, I wouldnt change the wording so much as restructure a few of the sentences and it would be supper good!!


  • RevHead
    November 28, 2006

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    awww this is so sweet!

    my first empression. how powerful! I love how you worded this. It was heart melting. you did an awesome job with this (was this the poem you were talking about?) Ampd
    btw, loved the poem on your profile


  • sparkling-assassin
    November 24, 2006

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    Aaawww!

    Good poem!!! Nice rhymes!!!! It makes me want to cry!!!*sniffle* AAAWWWW! Love,
    Mariah


  • Silent Words
    November 24, 2006

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    You have truly captured the essence of love and I really felt a bond between this piece! Very well done and again I loved it!

    Andrew


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 24, 2006

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    Beautiful

    This is an amazing poem. Brilliant! Your words are truely spoken from the heart. It's explains what true love means and is all about. This is my favorite verse

    "You are the one to win my heart and to guide my way through
    Because your love is very true.
    If you try to leave me and as nights that will go by
    I will sit and only cry."

    I had my heart shattered too many times before from one that I thought loved me and our love was true love. "Love and to be loved" is the bond that makes a realationship so special. If this is a poem about a current relationship, I wish you the best of lluck.
    I'm going to add you my favs as well. Thank you for sharing this my new AP friend.
    Take care"F
    Bo


  • wings of an angel
    November 24, 2006
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    This is a very good write that you have penned here


  • u took my user name
    November 22, 2006

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    this is very sweet. I love the title too. made me want to read it :-P
    it seems like the rhyming is forced here and there, using "cheap" words. a few of the lines reminded me of this love song

    Never been in love...so i can't exactly relate.
    a pleasure to read

    best wishes,
    Albasoul


  • Trust Calvaire
    November 22, 2006

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    luv it

    aww i feel like i want to cry it has such passion behind your words and the love within your words aww it's like a desperate plea but a good one luv it


  • Snappy - Doodles
    November 22, 2006
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    Very nice write. Ir's beautiful in all ways. This is a clear and understandable read. The flow is excellent. I like it very much. You've done an excellent job here. Love is a beautiful thing to share with another.

    ~Snappy~

  • aelopez06
    November 13, 2006
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    good job. it seems we all can write from past or present loves. I liked it


  • Poet of Dreams
    November 9, 2006
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    this is a very good, very heartfelt poem. i know exactlt how you feel. this has such a great rythm to it, i can hear the tune in my head. it is truly wonderful and i know exactly what kind of love you are talking about.

    Great Write and God Bless
    ~The Poet of Dreams~
    ~Benjamin. B~


  • ceegeeess
    November 3, 2006
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    Love picturised

    Love arrests our body and makes our mind run. Makes our heart beat faster and breathe less. Immobilises us from saying 'No' and ratifies all our instantanous thoughts and decisions. They say love is blind, but it binds too! your poem on first love is very true and brilliant. Love is not an affair of a lone person. It requires two. One and one make two!you said it !lol


  • Mizzundaztood gold member
    November 2, 2006
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    It's very true to feeling. I like it, has he read this? He should, it is so pretty! Evie


  • lovelustre
    November 2, 2006
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    Your love for him is strong, and you express strong feelings in this piece about how you want him to always be by your side. Bravo on this write! Next write, I look forward to reading about what you two will do together, and what you will do to keep his eyes locked with yours!
    Keep the ink flowing!
    Karen


  • November 2, 2006
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    Very touching. A love like that is very special.

  • OurxBeginning
    November 2, 2006
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    Aww this is very sweet. I liked this a lot and I can relate to it as well. Ain't love amazing? I liked the last stanza the most. Awesome write and keep it up.

    ~ ~

  • gaerielle
    November 2, 2006
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    In love and serene

    Love 101 isn't it! You are on a roll with such a splendid poem like this : ) If it's authentic love, it will stand any tests, any obstacles and anything basically outside the realm of extraordinary. Love and Blessings : )
    Edited on Nov 02, 5:14 p.m. because ''.


  • November 2, 2006
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    Very well writen! It sounds like it came from the heart! Good Job!


  • Nicole Cudworth
    November 2, 2006
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    This seems like a long and lasting love. I truly hope it stands the test of time for you. Beautifully written. Kudos to you.


  • Findecano
    November 2, 2006
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    Sweet

    *wipes away a tear* Woah...a very moving peice. FUll of passion and the obvious love. I really enjoy your work so keep it up....


  • love me 4 who i am
    November 2, 2006
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    this is soo true for me and my boyfriend/husband or what ever you wanna call him


  • BarbiAngelle
    October 30, 2006
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    Very Good!

    Very heartfelt and touching....If I were a receiver of these words...it definately would make my love grow stronger. Great read...Very Good write! Keep up the great work!


  • sustaind
    October 22, 2006
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    aahhh love,i dont remember too much but can say that i dreamt of someone to say these things to me,great write and hope it works out for you


  • HerexButxGone
    October 12, 2006
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    a beautiful poem liana.keep up the great work,i loved this.

  • andyquero
    October 12, 2006
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    Nice, very touching... thanks for sharing


  • ericv89
    October 11, 2006
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    tear tear -- great write darling


  • NickN
    October 11, 2006
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    Excellent write, m'dear. Love is great isn't it? I'd like to think so...

    Anyways, keep up the great writing.

    -Nick

  • Buckybearinlove
    October 11, 2006
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    I loved the poem, Wow that was the greatest poem ever!!!!!!! Wow just wow you left me speechless.


  • Kari gold member
    October 11, 2006
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    sweet

    This was a very precious and heartfelt write. You've done wonderful Thanks for sharing such a touching piece with us.

    Kari

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