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Paradise Lost.

Missing image

Cushioned, beneath the


ancient Oak, the whispers


of wind speaks...


of times so precious and


indelible...and times


of deep sorrow and heartache;


Reflections of the yester-years,


glimpses of the passions


fill the ache...the never ending


search for completion;


So picking up the pen of


words, she leaves her final


contribution to the winds of


time.


Author notes


Written October 11th, 2006

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  • cutiepie gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    Thank you Praba ( lovely name ) for your kindness it is always appreciated

  • Praba
    October 21, 2006
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    beautiful

    A poem for the idelists. It captures the fragrance of time on a piece soft as silk. Everything compliment one another so well. You are an idealist n a romantic at heart n your words sing their hearts out of a forgotten time that we would leave behind,


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    Thank you Alice for your kind comments, as always very much appreciated


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    Thanks Nicole for your kindness it is very much appreciated

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    Lol, had to smile at the "know what you are on about"...don't quite have one foot in the grave just yet, but getting there Many thanks for your kindness, as always it is appreciated


  • aliceramone
    October 16, 2006
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    I love the opening lines cushioned,beneath the ancient oaks,the whispers of wind speak...and the rest just flows beutifully... great imagery...great write


  • Nicole Cudworth
    October 15, 2006
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    Good luck in this contest! You did a great job giving voice to someone in their last day. Very powerful.

  • LonelyLover01
    October 15, 2006
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    nice work...anything like this is always fun to read...I like how you really know what your talking about....i like the emotion.keep it up!!!,


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank you Many thanks for your kindess, it is very much appreciated

  • Nannar
    October 15, 2006
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    Well done!

    A most lovely poem about that final moment on Earth. Typically the things one would do at such a time are chaotic at best. The individual has found peace before the final moment and faces death without fear. Good show!


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    Many thanks for your kind comments, as always they are very much appreciated


  • NashvilleMomma
    October 15, 2006
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    Wonderful! I recall as a child reading Paradise Lost, long before my Senior year requirement. I visualized it all, for your flow and prose is articulated quite well. Thanks for sharing.


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 13, 2006
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    You have been most kind in your comments Frederick, many thanks

  • Frederick
    October 12, 2006
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    Considering the "contest's" topic and this exquiste poem's title, the using of the last line in way that brings forth and deftly delivers the last and very appropriate word, "time", the contents point and delivery is quite well enhanced. But, note, it is a small "t" and the poem ends with the no uncertainty (sp) of a period punctuation mark...this wordsmith (and make no mistake, this poem's creator displays a talented wordsmith at work here) seems to have a impressive natural sense, among other things/means, of timing, nearly original spacing style and ability to utilize the aura/tonal aspects of "words."
    Edited on Oct 12, 10:22 p.m. because ''.


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 12, 2006
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    Thank you Sara, glad you enjoyed it


  • DreamGirl8390
    October 12, 2006
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    OMG you are a great write. I wish i could come up with something this descriptive as you. Wonderful.
    Sara

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 12, 2006
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    Ah Jim, you never fail to bring a smile Lasagne happens to be one of my favourites as I adore Italians and also their food Glad you enjoyed my "Final Day" contribution


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 12, 2006
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    Thank you Theresa for your kindness Delighted that you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 12, 2006
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    Many thanks Karen, delighted that you enjoyed it


  • tawk gold member
    October 12, 2006
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    So beautiful and so creative. I just loved this, good luck in the contest. Theresa


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    October 12, 2006
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    Sensational write, I love the flow and imagery of this piece, you kept me captivated until the very end, it is wonderful, I wish you all the very best in the contest

    Karen

  • SadmanJim
    October 11, 2006
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    A poet to the very end. [which we all hope won't be for a long time yet!]
    this is a wonderful description of your last day. The fluidity of the phrases, your word choices, the [I think] aching emotion. All of these drew me to read through 3 times before commenting.
    my favorite portion? "Reflections of the yester-years,
    glimpses of the passions
    fill the ache...the never ending
    search for completion;"

    Like a really good lasagne, this has just enough of almost all the ingredients I love about poetry.

    And good luck in the contest!

    Write On!
    jIM

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