Spider Webs and Carnivals
By secret invitation
Mailed through imagination
I found myself upon a stair
That crawled below the nation
Then once upon arrival
I saw no spell could rival
The haunted beauty in the air
That caused my heart to spiral
Webs of magic and of mystic
Caused by carnival of this tick
Sucking blood from innocence
Causing floods experience
Shall we continue?
While there I learned the art of
The story writing part of
Dreams that unite the dreamers
That dream of the sacred love
A teacher taught the teachings
Of racist ways of bleaching
The many kinds of streamers
That culture says needs reaching
Spiders run the world we know
Cause our flight toward the glow
Of the cities full of dancing
Broken hearts still romancing
Continue we shall!
If breathless breath grows faster
And we find hatred our master
Then who’s to say we’ll see the day
That proves that we’re not bastards
The music is overwhelming
The choir boys are telling
Secrets of the hidden way
That gives escape from spelling
Spider webs and Carnivals!
Spider webs build Carnivals!
Spider webs fill Carnivals!
The clowns all have eight legs.
Author notes
Written October 11th, 2006
A contest entry
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300 points, ended June 10, 2007, 36 entries
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The music is overwhelming
The choir boys are telling
Secrets of the hidden way
That gives escape from spelling
Spider webs and Carnivals!
Spider webs build Carnivals!
Spider webs fill Carnivals!
The clowns all have eight legs.
this is really good. it has a very....edgar allen poe feel. Excellent work!
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Awesome write. Pow, linguistically punches ya in the fuckin face from the start, then lulls in the middle, climbs with a raw mystique and brazen truth, but the ending.. WOW.. That is almost worthy of being enscribed upon a tombstone. It's the Cycle, only conveyed thru such an unexpected combo. Mind blowin, truly. Creates a category of it's own.
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Very cool.
Liked the rhyme scheme. -
I don't think I do fully understand it either. But I like its mystery and obscure analogies. I also like the lyrical flow of your language. Good piece.
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Thankyou for your comment. I didn't even fully understand this one.
Latet Artifex. -
Triptastic. I don't think this really belongs in the fantasy category, as I find it's meaning quite accurate. This nation is indeed a carnival run by spiders. Very unique style and flow you've got. Good show.
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