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*Morning Sunshine*

 

 Chorus

Morning sunshine, is everyday with you,

just to see your smiling face, fades away the blue~

All I knew was at first glance, I'd always want you near.

Forget me not, our love has grown,

with every struggled year~

 

1st Verse


Hard times and bad rhymes, we can still be friends,

lovers spats, imagine that, they happen now and then.

and in time, if love should fade, not growing as it should,

we'll just have to find a way, to change the bad to good~

 

2cd Verse


Rainy days and saturday's and all the days that come,

we can calm the storms ahead, if we can still have fun~

And when years show faces old, you'll still look to me,

as beautiful as that first glance and that's all, I will see~

 

Chorus


Morning sunshine, is everyday with you,

just to see your smiling face, fades away the blue~

All I knew was, at first glance, I'd always, want you near,

forget me not, our love still grows

with every passing year~

 

Repeat Chorus & fade out


Morning sunshine,

fades away,

the blue~

Author notes

My Ex Husband & I wrote this song together he wrote the music and I wrote the lyrics, while we were still together. We remain best of friends.

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  • second-born
    January 15, 2008

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    Wow...this is such a very beautiful lyric...and while reading it...I think I heard a lovely melody accompanying it...no wonder it won a gold trophy for love surely is in the air with this kind of song...


  • Candy6
    June 15, 2007
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    Oh! You wrote this song? Cool!


  • Talking Toni gold member
    May 15, 2007

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    Boy is this not...........................

    bittersweet for you and him as well!!!!! Sounds like you once made beautiful music together. I am sorry your not otgether anymore. It seems as if people could only heed the words in this song they could possibly have a terrific marriage."We can calm the storms ahead if we can still have fun" this rings so true if couple would onlylearn to laugh together again and just have fun lijke they were kids every grea once in awhile!!Thanks for sharing this song. Would love to hear it with the music!!!~~Toni~~


    • Twinstar
      May 15, 2007
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      Thanks Toni!
      Thanks so much! for your wonderful comments on this song. We are still great friends so it's all good.
      Love & Light
      Debbera


  • Andy Stephenson
    May 10, 2007
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    I Got Your Tapes

    Both songs are good. I don't know that you will win the contest, but I would like to play with this song and maybe add a bridge and/or another verse. I will then record it. I really appreciate you sending the tapes and entering the contest.

    Andy


  • blondone
    May 6, 2007
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    Bandits United !!!

    Oh this is beautiful, the words flow with such an ease and the imagery is beautiful, love is poured all over this one...Just so pretty another great show of your talent I hope this one lets me applaud I've tried three others ~ I've so enjoyed reading your poems this morning and I hope you have a great day


  • Andy Stephenson
    May 3, 2007

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    I like this.

    Can I hear this on the net or can you email it? I would like to hear the melody. I like this and I could hear a melody of my own as I read it. Thanks for entering my contest. I really appreciate it.

    Andy


  • Sharcu silver member
    December 5, 2006

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    But what if its cloudy or I sleep in till noon? Then are morning sunshines still with me? Wonderful... wow... I liked the way this poem flows off the tounge from one line to the next, if you know what I mean. Metaphorical and meaningful. Well done! Thanks for sharing
    --Tim


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    December 4, 2006

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    You have talent...

    This is very impressive and I got a tune in my head when reading these lyrics...flows well with nice rhyming, very catchy and so romantic...you have captured a light hearted romance in some loving stanzas, perfect meter and structure, an awesome song...

     

    love and smiles

    ~Lilac~


  • Tam
    December 4, 2006

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    Awww....I think this is lovely!!

    I love the flow and rhyme...very well done!!!
    So sweet I find this...a joy to read.
    Blessings! Tammy

  • Thedragonisgone
    December 4, 2006

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    THis is lovely...

    I enjoyed reading this on such a sleepy monday. I have so much work to do but would rather be reading works such as this... Ah...
    Just lovely!


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    December 4, 2006

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    Enduring!

    Love changes and adjusts over the years and the absence of sparks is compensated for by a comfort and ease that's even better.
    well done!
    xxo
    dk


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    December 3, 2006

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    This is a lovely piece and very heart felt. It is a lovely way to say "I love you". True love takes time to develop.


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    December 3, 2006

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    Awwwe this is very sweet! this is what I'd love to have out of life...someday

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    December 3, 2006

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    well am not sure if this is meant to be lyrics or not but it sure felt lyrical to me. I really enjoyed this read, the repetition works really well within it.


  • undertones
    December 3, 2006

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    This is really sweet. I thought it was written well and was really honest and direct about your feelings. Easy to read, and enjoyable!


  • ShelleyA gold member
    December 3, 2006
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    A lovely song. Very good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Lovely rhythm and good word choice. Nice descriptives. An uplifting piece. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read. Shelley


  • Endeavor gold member
    December 1, 2006

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    Good

    Like this

    Soft rhyne throught

    Nice ending

    All I knew was, at first glance,

    I'd always, want you near,

    forget me not, our love still grows

    with every passing year...



    Morning sunshine,

    fades away,

    the blue......

    Well done, Rick


  • Chase Me
    November 22, 2006
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    very nice

    nicely worded.


  • Twinstar
    October 29, 2006
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    Thank You Lee for your comment on Morning Sunshine, that is actually a song. my Husband wrote the music to that and I wrote the lyrics. We have been separated for 8 yrs but are still married. We are still friends and occasionally get a chance to do music together, I am a singer and he plays music, that's the one thing that holds us together...
    peace
    Debbera


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Rated: G for Great!

    Well written! I like your sunny smiling faces here, they're so uplifting; especially when one is down and blue... They smile like sunshine on your shoulder (my favorite John Denver song)!!

  • Twinstar
    October 19, 2006
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    Thank You so much!!! I'm happy that you liked this poem.
    Love & Light
    Twinstar


  • Shannon62875
    October 16, 2006
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    awww this write is really good.. i like it lotz!! you epxressed your emotions well and the rythem and flow was just awesome!!! I love this write! Keep up the great work! Good luck in my contest!!!!

    Shannon*Leah


  • Twinstar
    October 12, 2006
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    Thank You for taking the time to read my poem"Morning Sunshine" I so appreciate your elegant comments.
    Live Your Dreams
    Twinstar


  • BittersweetPhantasm
    October 12, 2006
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    this poem is so pretty - i don't normally use that word but it's trues. its full of hope and love and yet realistic at the same time.


  • Twinstar
    October 11, 2006
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    Thank you I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for taking your time to read this poem.
    Love & Light
    Twinstar


  • Mysterious Fate
    October 11, 2006
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    This is truly a beautiful poem, the poem and the way it touches you is beautiful. I personally love it! Great write!


  • Wolfdog silver member
    October 11, 2006
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    Your welcome.


  • Twinstar
    October 11, 2006
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    Thank you so much for your taking the time to read this piece and your nice comments. I'm happy you liked it.
    Expect Miracles
    Twinstar


  • Twinstar
    October 11, 2006
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    Thank You so much!!! I'm glad you liked it. I think this song has a real pretty melody as well.


  • superstition
    October 11, 2006
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    I really love the sentiment of this piece. It's beautiful while being both optimistic and realistic. A lovely way to convey the process and progress of love and the like.

  • gaerielle
    October 11, 2006
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    Confiante

    Such a sunny poem lighthearted and a beautiful song in itself.. if you have a solid foundation as friends, like you refer to with this line -
    Hard times and bad rhymes
    we can still be friends,
    lovers spats, imagine that,
    they happen now and then.
    the rest should be a breeze.. The most loving and generous commitment there can be is peace and serenity with your friend All my love xx


    Edited on Oct 11, 1:40 p.m. because ''.


  • Twinstar
    October 11, 2006
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    I thank you for the comment on this piece, I appreciate your taking the time to read it. I'm sorry I didn't understand the advise.
    Peace
    Twinstar


  • Twinstar
    October 11, 2006
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    I'm not sure I follow you on that comment about the cab. Could you elaberate on that. I did read the poem Amore' but really doesn't seem to fit. I really don't understand. Please explain.
    Thanks
    Twinstar
    Edited on Oct 11, 2:00 because ''.

  • Bob 42 silver member
    October 11, 2006
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    Excellent

    A marvelous piece of work, you should be proud here. I do believe, however, that you must have been following my cab last night as I composed 'that`s AMORE'. One word of advice,reach
    over, hold on to her and never let go.


  • Twinstar
    October 11, 2006
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    Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. It is actually lyrics to a song. Appreciate your comment, and I will check your work out also. Thanks again...
    Expect miracles
    Twinstar

  • Wolfdog silver member
    October 10, 2006
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    Superb/Fun/Unique

    A very good write indeed with a very somooth flow. I enjoyed it.


  • Twinstar
    October 10, 2006
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    Thank You Grannyeri!!! Actually this is the lyrics to a song... I appreciate your comment.
    Peace
    Twinstar


  • SabaSophiya
    October 10, 2006
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    This is so fresh in its appeal. Very original and almost naive enough to sparkle with that easy flow. Keep up the good work. Blessings always.


  • Twinstar
    October 10, 2006
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    Thank you so much!!! this is actually lyrics to a song. I'm glad you liked it and that you can relate.
    Peace
    Twinstar


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    Like the repetition of the one verse - like lyrics to a song, sentiments well expressed and easy to read and understand.

  • sunkissed07
    October 10, 2006
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    Wow! This is a very nice piece, it is really easy to read and relatable, it flows really well and portrays beautiful emotion. Great job keep it up and God bless!

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