Grizzly mane, a sight to see;
Bent over by guilt of sin;
He desires, from frame, to be free,
And be a simple man;
But he can’t escape his woe;
He follows him all about;
He sees him in his mirror’s glow,
And wails a mournful shout;
In a crowd, one night, he sees a Man,
One of princely kind;
Following like an adoring fan,
Forgets how he’s confined;
The Man then turns about
Seeing this sad beast;
He beckons with a love devout
Like holy King and Priest,
“Friend, what would you like,
For Me, to do for you?”
The gravelly voice shook the night;
Spoke words all too true:
“I hate my life that’s given me,
I feel You are the Way;
Lord, dear One, make me free;
All You need is say!”
The Man touched him,
With hand answering his plea;
The wicked curse of sin
Left for all to see
The beast was made whole
Standing fully upright;
Clean was his soul;
Felt a strange new might;
But to all this Prince
Deformed before their sight;
The image made them all wince;
It seemed so far from right;
The former hunchback pled
With a weep in his words,
“O Lord, this sight I dread
On You’s a woeful scourge;
It is not fair, to You my King,
To take my curse on You!”
Then the Prince began to sing,
With words just as true,
“What you say, you’ve spoken well;
Truly grace is not fair;
I have chosen to take your hell;
It’s My right to share;
I’ve deemed you to receive
My righteous privilege;
For you have truly believed;
Now you’re within My hedge.”
The new man wept
With much humility;
This truth, hard to accept,
For its divinity;
A new love soared,
Deep within his heart,
This King he now adored
And chose to impart;
Then, with joy, this Lord
Set upon a new path;
The Man was seen by him restored
Be subject to heaven’s wrath;
He came to his own
As the Thing of offense;
The sight, a chill to bone,
As He met without defense
Strikes by evil men,
Pawns of celestial plan;
To death, He was sent;
They considered Him as damned;
Confused the simple man
Walked away hollow-hearted;
He seemed, to him, the great ‘I am’,
Yet, by death, departed;
Gray days had passed;
All three of them;
To him, they were a great contrast
To the joy he felt within;
He began to wonder why
He had felt this way;
Came to him a question’s sigh,
“I’m under Satan’s sway?”
A voice then spoke from behind,
He quickly turned about;
The Prince stood unconfined,
New man let out a shout,
“O, My Lord, You’re here,
And You are alive!
The sight of You brings me cheer;
I started to take a dive;
“I saw You die a gruesome way;
They treated You, oh, so ghastly;
Yet You’re now alive, will you stay?;
Surely you’re power’s more than vastly;”
“No, My child; I must leave;
I go the Father’s way;
Yet, dear one; do not grieve;
I’m with you every day;
Take My heart, with its truth;
There I’ll always be;
Make My love your final proof
Of how I made you free;
“Tell the world what I’ve done;
My joy is made complete;
And as I am the Father’s Son:
All can be replete;”
The Son then lighted away,
Through the clouds, out o’ sight;
Yet the new man knelt to pray,
And he prayed with a new might:
“Lord, You’re more gracious than
I could e’er know;
I take Your Son, this one of Man,
And take Him for all to show,
How You are with Your great love;
You take us, all our woes;
Through Him, we’re borne above,
We’re sons of Sharon’s Rose;
“And I will be forever Yours,
With all that I am;
With Your strength for eternal chores;
That many would not be damned.”
And how could I know this story;
I know every fact;
It was I who saw His glory,
For I am heaven’s hunchback.
© 10-10-06
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Marvelous!
From one Hunchback to another this is So Great! I can totally identify & this is such a wonderful write bringing the Truth of His Salvation into a personal reference. Nice job friend!
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what a tale! this is great! i cannot pick a favorite part as all was so well written. i guess this speaks loudest to me:
“Lord, You’re more gracious than
I could e’er know;
I take Your Son, this one of Man,
And take Him for all to show,
How You are with Your great love;
You take us, all our woes;
Through Him, we’re borne above,
We’re sons of Sharon’s Rose;
wonderful, wonderful message! keep writing brother. God bless you always
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There were two stanzas here that really stood out to me. They were the ones about imparting grace, and how undeserved we are. It really made me think. Excellent, Bob.
Justin -
You know, I think you more than compensated for lack of enthusiasm by applauding 5 times, LOL!
You are a gem!
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It's long because it's an epic, contry gurl! LOL!
Just sit back and rest; if you fall asleep where you are, at least you're home. I'm sure you got my IM. I mean all of it. I think you know my heart.
Your favorite Taco Bender,
Me (Lubyamucho!) -
This is a terrific piece Bob... lots of truth written into this one... written in an excellent manner as well! It's a little long though...
I like how you carried this... you kept the theme throughout it...
Sorry I'm not giving a more enthusiastic (spelling) comment... just got home from work... I worked 14 hours and got rather sleepy on my way home...
God bless you...
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gift from God
Bob this is an amazing write. It is wonderful, holds so much truth and gives a wondrous hope to each and every one of us. Thank you so very much for sharing Gods Gift with us.
Go with God my friend,
Valerie -
BRAVO!!! BRAVO!!!!
OMG, this SO brought tears to my eyes. It is such a beautiful piece, with an awesome, awesome message. It is very well written and I just love it, it's amazing. I can't even pick favorite lines becasue it's all so very touching and inspiring that I feel it might take away from the awesomeness of other lines....wow...as strange as this may sound, I needed this this morning! Maybe even needed the cry....lol! EXCELLENT. -
THis is a great epic! I truly enjoyed this one and the reflection of the grace of God!
I love this the best ...it is the one that hits home for me.....just like I was a mentally crippled and sinful one...but the touch of GOD mercy and saving grace I became a new and whole woman. Praise the Lord for His love!
"The Man touched him,
His hand answered his plea;
The wicked curse of sin
Left for all to see
A man made whole
Standing fully upright;
Clean was his soul;
Felt a strange new might;"
God bless you Bob!
Liz -
Thanks, Sissy-poo!
A masterpiece, huh? Only the Lord knows.
God bless!
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Tessarah, you keep saying this is long. LOL!
That's why I put that it was an epic, suggesting length.
Your comments are appreciated. I usually use such long words, so I'm glad this was an apparent change for me, for the better.
The longest part of this was coming up with an ending. I had 3 writers here give me some suggestions, and ended up using all of them combined. But my favorite part was the surprise ending, which came to me alone, in the human sense.
Thanks. God bless!
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WONDERFUL POEM
Wow M0ofie, You have written a masterpiece here. It was long but was worth the read. I so enjoyed the message of God's love and sacrifice you have written about. Thank you for sharing this with everyone. Blessings to you always. Got has given you many gifts. Writing is just one of them. Take care, Sandy
Love these lines
“And I will be forever Yours,
With all that I am;
With Your strength for eternal chores;
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Thanks, E.S. We hunchbacks are pretty please with this fact as well. The ceilings are eternally high, for when we stand straight up, under divine power.
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Thanks, pixxiepoetess; this was a really fun write.
Long isn't bad, is it?
I'm glad it held your interest. That's my idea of success with this one.
God bless!
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Thanks for the applause and comments, Cyberartist. Intriguing idea about the recording. I may do it.
God bless!
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Fantastic,Brilliant and wonderfull!!
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This was a true epic with a message and well worth the read I hope you concider recording a read of this Story poems like this do well recorded something to think about...
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WHat a message of love and sacrifice. Favorite lines:
"Make My love your final proof
Of how I made you free;"
"And how could I know this story;
I know each and every fact;
It was I who saw His glory,
For I am heaven’s hunchback."
Wow. I'm so happy I read this piece. Even though it's long, it keeps you captivated. Not easily done, so I'm super impressed. It's so moving. Thank you for making something so wonderful,--->pixxie<---
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I am delighted to hear that hunchbacks and other deformed people are apparently to be welcomed in "Heaven".
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DELIGHTFUL
wow intresting and very long piece. wonderfully written i love the ryhme the way its constructed the short words you use when the charactors speaks. i love the idea at the end the way you made it end and just blow you away. its so long and so keeps to the topic very well, must of took awhile to write. THIS IS WONDERFULLY WRITTEN thanks for sharing such a delight.
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You did a wonderful job., It spoke to me in ways i havent expreinced. I enjoyed ready every word of it. You truly have the Lord's light inside of you. You're my inspiration.
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The poem so nice, you clicked it twice! LOL!
Thanks, sis. This was a fun one! I wept all though it as I wrote it.
Thanks for the help. You had a part in this.
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outstanding
Now this is simply amazing Bob! I do love the ending and this is the best piece I've ever read of yours! Outstanding! Bravo and kudos! I hope this one gets a lot of reads! I love it! Blessings,
Frog~
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