Amidst the desert desolation.
Isolated from civilization.
On a trail of desecration.
Lifeless matter lack vegetation.
Dunes beneath and dunes above.
Ripple like waves of love.
Off the horizon
on this barren plain
sun ray's illuminate
the wasteland like rain.
Scorching heat that mimic hell
hovers over the land
like nightingale's.
Creatures of every kind
live in haste on
borrowed time.
An eerie silence
cloaks the sky.
As the death bell tolls
for some will die.
A vulture rest
above a lofty cliff
in hope's of dining
on some unlucky stiff.
Scorpions scatter to and fro
lusting for the life below.
A little before dusk
the sun starts to descend.
Between camel mountain
it appears again.
In brilliant splendor
with a saffron glow,
it cast it's magic
on a desert rose.
Author notes
4.) Write a poem with one of the following titles
Written October 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- Evoke My Artistic Vision by crazylittledevil.
440 points, ended March 20, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well written, a very vivid depiction of the desert landscape. Whilst I don't feel competent enough to attempt painting this t the moment, you have provided me with something i definitely work with in the future.
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WOW!!! I love the metaphor and the descriptions of the desert. Your words make the reader see it all. Your meter and rhyme are splendid!!!. I really enjoyed this pen and I love your creations.....
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to you again >>>>>>> Sandy 
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Wonderful write. Great imagery brought to life in your words. The flow and rythme are very good. It is a very enjoyable read.
I love the last line, very strong.
Best to you in the contest! -
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This is very beautiful. I live in the desert myself. I really liked your poem. There really isn't any advice to offer.
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i have yet to see the desert and probably never will...your poem has shown me a glimpse of it
who doesn't love a rose?
beautiful description to create a mood that soothes
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Great!
Short descriptions can hold as much detail as a long winded storyteller with good diction. You've added that element to this write. Good flow. Holding the Rose to last was a very good thing here. Well written, and I hope this wins.
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