I've been told to never question,
never look back on depression
but you had a hold on me
you took away that part of me
that could love
that could trust
and now I
know I must
find myself
(away from your stare)
get myself
(able to care)
until then I will
stay, lost in your lie...
Lost in your lie
dead on the inside
lost in your lie
unable to hide
lost in your lie
Deranged looks of satisfaction
from your evil reaction
I was a pawn in your game
unable to save
myself from your game
and now I
know I must
pick myself
(back up from the ground)
forget that you
(were ever around)
until then, I, will,
stay, lost in your lie
Lost in you lie
dead on the inside
lost in your lie
unable to hide
Break free
or be lost
in your lie.
Author notes
This came out as a song but I was listening to evanescence when I wrote it.
Written October 10th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Chalk Smiles And RazorBlade Romances by PaperChainHearts.
300 points, ended October 26, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this flows so beautifully. i loved it. it's amazing how one person's poetry can mean something completely different to one person than another. i would love to hear this with music :]
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wow i cried..i feel like this and i cant seem to let go of this person he has such a hold on me..it was gr8 poetry
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Great lyrics and I can so relate to your song, I would love to hear it put to music. Excellent!!!
Theresa
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That sounds good to me, I have a guitar and I think I can sing, but I can't play my guitar
This poem is from real-life too, and I have found that writing about things that have pissed you off in your life seem to make them better, plus this was a cool contest because I love evanescence. Thanks for your comment momma!!!
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Wow
Great poem!
Good luck
Katy
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very good
enjoyed your poem very much - tells a story that we all can relate to at times - the poetry rhyme is great and the song like flow is beautiful - Joe -
before coming to your Author's Comments, I was going to make mention of the lyrics-quality and sound of this poem, Charna. And it really is good writing even by poetic sense only...which I'm more familiar with.
There's very much I can relate to in reading this poem, and I don't know if it was written personally as to you--I'm presuming it is to some extent, it just has that "voice" that seems to resonate to a reader as your TRUTH. I spent a long time over the past year getting myself over hurdles of lies and hurdles of unnecessary hurt, and from the first lines on, this poem rang so true within me, for me...it so very much felt being lost at the time.
You're becoming an better-and-better writer by each poem I read of yours, Charna...And if you can sing, bring this poem and a guitar along with you on our roadtrip!
Jo
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damn....this is really good. no wonder it came out as a song...you said you were listening to evanescence when you wrote it. well, I think it would sound awesome if Amy Lee sang it. lol. this piece is amazing. great write.
-Vanessa- -
Thank you, I really liked this contest and it let me get some of my anger out.
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hey this is pretty good. and i can only imagine how it would sound like with music.
Deranged looks of satisfaction
from your evil reaction
I was a pawn in your game
unable to save
myself from your game
and now I
know I must
that was my favourite part. good job on this and good luck with the contest.
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