She's cold and blue.
I'm heaving and weeping.
Why's my mom dead and not just sleeping?
There's blood and tears.
My cuts make me forget all this horrible pain.
I promise I'll stop, one of these days.
I'm lonely and lost.
No one can find me.
I'm lost for a reason, so please let me be.
Drugs are the only thing that make me forget.
Screw living at home, I don't need a safety net.
I'm confused and scarred from living on the streets.
I've overdosed, been raped, and even beat.
Now it's time for my tragic end.
Goodbye to you, gooodbye my "friends".
...[Death]...
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This is what became of my downtime in my honors english class.
Written October 10th, 2006
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she died from a drug overdose
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I can understand the pain of losing a parent, I lost my father. I used to cut myself, attempted suicide, been abused, and have been raped. I did run away from home, but was lucky enough to stay with my boyfriend's parents. So I am able to understand much of what you are going through. From someone who has lived through a suicide attempt, I am very glad I did. I still cry for my father, and there are still days that everything seems to be going wrong. But I am a stronger person for what I have been through, and you are, too. Whether you know it now or not. Your poem captured the depth of your pain very well. If you ever need someone to talk to, feel free to write me. If you don't mind me asking, how did your mother die? I'll understand if you don't want to share, but I know for me it helps. Keep writing, that helps, too. And you're good at it.
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Awesome write, deep and very to the point. I do agree with Yazhi too though. We are all here. keep writing from within, can be the best medicine!
See you around the deep end
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wow, this is just a plain piece of raw emotions with amazing wording and flow. It seems to be screaming out in pain and hurt, begging for help while insisting none is wanted or needed. you really did a wonderful job with this one. -
A poem worthy of an applause and much concern if truly this is what is in your heart dear one
I hope these are fleeting thoughts of confusion and sadness and that this is not what is surrounding your days
I am here for you if you need a friend!
Yazhi
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good poem...i enjoyed reading it...hmm...i think you should add more to it to make the poem whole...good day.
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I'm so sorry for everything that has happened to you, and no, I am not just saying it, I mean it.
You know, I live in Michigan, too and, I have to admit it is a pretty depressing place for young people to live.
Just, don't forget, drugs might make you forget your problems, but they dont solve them. Find the power within you, and grow up, to face your own problems. -
WOW this is terrific!!! exellent writing
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Its very stong but I want more! I want to know why she's dead why you puch away, why your on the streets, I want details plain and simple your strong but brief and your making me think to hard. I'm dwelling on the past lines as I read the current ones I should be about to put the story or puzzle together but its kind like I spilled something on the box ruining the center because your at home wiht a dead mother say then your on the street being raped and beaten. Sorry thats what you get from me. Though I liked the strengh its what many poems lack.
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great job
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this is really sad, but you show your emotions well in this piece. I really liked it!
~Michaela~ -
oo wow theres not another word.. just wow..
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Wow really deap emotional poem i really adore you poety it's really sad. But i love it.
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wow that's deep. I liked it, it was strong and had a deep meaning, Bravo! ~LLSS
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WOW!
Excellent. I just hope you didn't really snuff yourself after you posted this! Dave -
wow emotions emotion....I think this is worthy of applause
hope it helps toward points I love dark and sad writes this had before.
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wow.. very good... i enjoyed it.. u write well i think im gonna view more of your poems..
love chloe -
awe,this is..wow.amazing s.hit right here.
well done.,i feel the emotions.its great
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very good sad but good
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Wow... this is definitely a stronge, powerfully intense write, it's like the building up of an emotional dam, and I'm expecting this huge burst of frustration screaming out of you, and then you end quietlly with a simple 'death'
Very brilliant darling, I loved this, and I hope you get enough points for your contest, I don't have alot of points, but I can donate some if you'd like.
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I really like this. I'm sorry about your Mom. My Mom passed away a few months ago and I can totally relate to what you are/were feeling.
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