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Prayer for a new season

Lord of the circling spheres,
As a new season nears
I must look back with tears
At all my former years.
          Jesu Lord, come to me,
          Jesu Lord, comfort me,
          Lord, hear my heartfelt plea:
          Make me what I should be!

Reckless and unafraid,
Thy Laws I've disobeyed,
Oft from Thy paths I've strayed,
In sin's black mire to wade.
          Jesu Lord, come to me,
          Jesu, Lord, comfort me,
          Forgive my perfidy,         
          Make me what I should be!

So much I have to rue,
Foul thoughts and words untrue,
The false ends I'd pursue,
The good I failed to do.
          Jesu Lord, come to me,
          Jesu Lord, comfort me,
          Heal Adam's legacy,
          Make me what I should be!

Christ, who high on the peak
Rebuffed the tempter sleek:
Help me Lord, I am weak;
Thy healing grace I seek:
          Jesu Lord, come to me,
          Jesu Lord, comfort me,
          Crush Satan's tyranny,
          Make me what I should be.

For though the fiends mauraud,
I trust Thy given word,
My soul Thou hast restored,
Thou art my risen Lord!
          Jesu Lord, come to me,
          Jesu Lord, comfort me,
          Bid every darkness flee,
          Make me what I should be!

As the new season nears,
Heal me, Lord, dry my tears,
And with Thee, without fears,
I'll face the coming years:
          Jesu Lord, come to me,
          Jesu Lord, comfort me,
          Since Thou hast died for me,
          Make me what I should be!

               

Author notes

Ad per the rules of your competition: My name is Vera Rich.


This is, as you will possibly have guessed, a hymn (unfortunately, I do not have the technology to add the music here) which can be used e.g. at New Year, or before any new season
Or, of course, it can be used as a private prayer for the beginning of ANY new beginning in one's life. e.g. passing a significant birthday.

For "moderns" who prefer to address the Lord as "You", the necessary changes (e.g. "You are" for "Thou art") can be introduced without affecting the rhythm,

I have to say, though, that I personally am more at ease with the "Thou" forms...

May I ask you to read the poem in full, (NOT skipping over the "refrain" (lines 5 - 8 of each stanza, since it in fact changes each time).

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  • Shadow Stalker
    September 10

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    I loved this,

    you did an amazing job with the detail, the rhyme, the rhythm, and the story and morale behind it. I agree with you in that only God can bring humility and peace at the same time. Great job and thank you for entering. Also please put your name in your AN. Thanks.

    *~*Night Mistress 1*~*


  • rinzurajan
    May 11

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    wow...a beautiful poem...truly inspiring and reads out well as a song...

    Good luck


  • Gods Lil Warrior
    September 19, 2008
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    This is a great poem.

    Keep up the great writing.

    Thanks for entering my contest.


  • Over and Done
    August 1, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    This does have the flow and structure one would see in hymnals. I enjoyed it and found it to truely embody what we all seek from the Lord.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • XxForeverFaithfulxX
    July 23, 2008

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    bravo

    I loved it..lots of emotion...I love the fact that it's a hymm! Keep up the good work! Thanks for entering and good luck!

    In Christ,
    ~Kayla~


  • Kim
    July 2, 2008

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    I WOULD HAVE RECOGNIZED THIS AS A HYMN, EVEN IF YOU HADN'T STATED SO. THIS IS A GREAT WORK OF ART AND I TRULY ENJOYED IT. THIS SHOULD BE THE PRAYER OF EVERY SAINT THAT JESUS WOULD MAKE THEM ALL THAT THEY SHOULD BE.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Thank you for your wonderful entry in our contest, it was a pleasure to read and although neither Jeff or I are religious we both found this to be a really good poem.
    Congratulations on the HM, it is well deserved and we look forward to more from you in our future contests...Sue and Jeff


  • Talking Toni gold member
    March 24, 2007

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    I Would Love To Hear...................

    this song sung!!! The words chosen are beautiful!!!A sinner's humble cry he always hears....I like the form you used in writing this as well. Thanks for entering our contest and good luck to you!!!!

    • Vera Rich
      March 25, 2007
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      If your computer has the necessary facilities, and you are willing to let me have your e-address, I can send it to you as a voice file...

      If you would like me to do this, please write to me at manifoldpoetry@googlemail.com


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    I should like to hear this sung, you've written this well. The shortness of the lines, the monorhyme and the repition work extremely well. The music accompaniment would be like the icing on a perfectly baked Celebration cake! Thanks for sharing. I hope you're well. Laura x


  • Samplette gold member
    October 11, 2006
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    A wonderful write. Thank you for entering.
    Sam

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