engulfed by the insanity that draws the fiction her mind desires
the girl lay upon the cold sand, embracing the warmth of the fire
her dreams were like broken paths that crumble beneath her
her muses hide keeping at bay, the child runs out of options
finding all her colors at deaths end, withering soon to fade
not even the fates could stand before her way
the passage she had laid before her consists of dark lit midnight bliss
the horse rider who carries her, caressing every bit of her soul
to drag her into an eternity where cold weather no longer exists,
Where snow's made of cotton balls, clouds of darkened mists
upon her innocent painted red sinful lips the rider dares to kiss,
bringing unto her heart guilt, a pain stricken desire, painted black walls,
alone she shall not be missed, completely decapitated he fell for her cause
risen to the highest part of a soul, cowering within a temple sacred mind,
the girl has found a doorway, crowded to the edge of time,
no one here lends an ear, turns to listen to the poison she dares say,
a crucified soul, tormented, alone, to disappear into nothingness, chaos
guides her way,
drowning every bit of her into a turmoil depressive sea, flipping her off
wits end,
completely drowning me, stabbing me with the weather blown debris, caging
all her demons,
possessing the child within,
trapping her like Zeus did the failing almighty titans, monsters grabbing
her saving her from fellow men,
she became a spirit, less freedom felt than spoke of, acting swift like a
billowing ghost that joins the ghosts that sway into the river of the dead,
emerging from the decay, lying lifeless thrown into a tomb, alone there she
cries,
darkness shall always loom ,
the building dreams that seep into iris filled eyes,
the thoughts of a mind with oneself finds a compromise,
she's her own queen, my master of demise, distant with the longing
of acceptance, feeling of unnatural despair, clinging within, savior
the feeling of lonesome, child which not even for I care,
the dizzy sensation, bleeding wrists will leave her ,myself, finding us
both there,
I watched numb to the fact this child sails so far from dry land, twisting
all images of herself into a complex web of uncertainties,
drenched head to toe, covered by a blanket of black sin,
immortal souls never rest, their lives outlast the existence of the moon,
I inhale the smell of stale dismay, watching this child take her own life
away,
the stars that shine upon once inflicted scars that inlay within the skin,
she walked the road to hell,hollow, soul spilled upon the floor, silence
kept her, gagged her tightly, squirming wasn't ever an option, not the
devil himself would take this soul to hell within,
he called upon his servent the harpies to do away with her then,
I reached out for her, tried to make her join me, hide her among
the brush, deeply within the last safe place ever known to our kind,
but she refused my offer,left me stranded, all hope swelling within me
began to declined,
pain had woven an atlas about her face,
written by descriptive signatures reminding us of its place,
she tripped off the edge
of reality, fell from great heights into the rising sun that lay wake upon
this world,
to see her trying to put stop to life itself, one would be found editing
reality by the statements of her facts,
I watched her deteriate from a normal human being, desolated within her
acts
all her dreams burn like wax melting upon the ruin of long lost scriptures
once told, I found myself crossing dreams and dotting why's,
her solemnest fixed upon me, hatred within those light blue eyes,
reaching out again I find myself reaching for a personality that forever
finds home within the skies
a piece of a broken heart, my limbo, find myself speechless silent, shy
her voice inflated with the echoes of the sirens, their voices crying upon
the grim reapers shoulder,
shunning from the earth, raining out the sought out wisdom just to wash it
away, spiral down the drain of once what would have been called mans rule,
the way her visions leaked out would to others seem unreal, so cruel
she sat like a sphinx silently upon me she gazed,
I wouldn't dare move, not till I was given such a praise,
gray shinning light dimly lit the castle like hallway with its metal
picture frames,the burnt smell of pleasure, milking from me my excitement
taking all my joy, hollowing out my inner being,treating me like a usable
toy
grinding me into a speck of dust ,sending within me guilt, she loved to
hate,
more so hated to love,
confusion had been made to be a labyrinth that shall fit within her velvet
glove,
dark conflicts within her I found raging within myself ,
driving me to disbelieved her, to try to become only one with myself,
whole again,
never to be, I knew that no one however so hard they try could kindle a
flame
that wished to grow into a fire,
these were the girls ego trips they only made her fly higher,
within her thoughts the world would be squeezed into a tight fist held
within her palm,
the universe would evaporate, throwing shadows among the peoples calm,
art won't exist no more, its been banned from this colorless world,
the day I lost myself I lost everything, even the innocence of a once
departed,
small hearted,
fragile, glass made
dream invisioned
doll like girl
who unfortuantly has been lost within the confidments
of her own little depressing world.
Author notes
Written October 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- Give me your best for 2000 points by Hadji Murad.
1887 points, ended December 7, 2006, 97 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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'I watched numb to the fact this child sails so far from dry land,
twisting all images of herself into a complex web of uncertainties,
Drenched head to toe, covered by a blanket of black sin,
(our) immortal souls never rest, their lives outlast(ing) the existence of the moon,
I inhale the smell of stale dismay, watching this child take her own life away,
the stars that shine upon (these) once inflicted scars that inlay within the skin,
she (has) walked the road to hell, hollow(ed pieces of) soul spilled upon the floor, silence kept her, gagg(ing) her tightly, squirming wasn't ever an option......'
Hey Darl, long time no chat... I will be back on board soon... Looking forward to writing more... I have been longing to come back here to visit, and I have missed this place and the great people I know...
I love the above quoted section...(hope you dont mind the added bits in brackets..)
This one certainly is long, and I would expect no less from you dear girl...
Structure seems a little blurred, but with some structural gathering this would be brilliant not just fantastic as it is...
You keep the great work flowing darl, and I will return..
Jeffro


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Intense!
A long read, that's certain... but you never lost my intrest. "I inhale the smell of stale dismay, watching this child take her own life " << would have to be my favorite line. I consider this to be a powerful write and I am once again more than pleased as I walk away from one of your stories/poems. Thnx Babe
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awwwww i pleased u *wimpers*
YAY

thanks so much for takin the time to read it! means lots
NOW LINK ME MORE!!!
mariah!
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wow. your imagery here is very powerful. i also like the way you constructed this poem. good job.
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HOLY CRAP THAT IS A LONG POEM! lol, great job though. keep it up, glad you put the link in our group so i could read it.
Faythfully
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WOW, very emotional piece that you have written here. Throws the readers mind into a train wreck of feelings. Quite long, but an enjoyable read none the less, keep on writting . ~Bret~
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wow call me the better twin again and ill block you =-0, that was amazing, and kept me hanging on every word, very well done my dear
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twas like honey on the tongue with a chilli kick to it.it has no begining no middle and no end,that is a rair poetical gift that only few posess.lol
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I'm sorry but this was long and I was lost in the meaning of it.
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whoa.. it is long..! but its worth the time readin it n feelin every word..!
Good job.. i love the entire story you've told n the gr8 descriptions...
Loved it!
Keep up the awesome work.. i shall be back to read it again!

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WOWEE I LIKE IT NO WAIT I DON"T LIKE IT I LOVE IT !!! YAYNESS !!!
it is very long but so worth the time to read its twisted and creepy its dark and shows good flow and emotion LOVE IT -
Whoa... *said that out loud also, and then let out a large breath* damn... I am literally speechless! It's like.... O god.... You deserve the gold... at all costs... I would easily give you the gold... I've never seen ANYTHING so long, nor so amazingly written, and kept so much on topic, and not drifting off, because of this length... This was just insane! FANTASTIC JOB!!!!!!!! Like WOW!
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you have been busy,
very long,
threw my mind all over the place,
came from deep inside I would say at a guess..lol
and like always, you have done a fantastic job,
very, very wel done Tess,
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