I try to fill my lungs
but only get halfway
as the tears and cries
take my breath away
My stomach burns
and sides are ripping
my reality is
slowly slipping
You broke my heart
and soul again
yet I still hope
to be your friend
You did it once
and even twice
you never took
any advice
And then you found
that not a thing would fit
because if you moved on
your world would turn to shit
So you picked up me once more
to do this dance of tricks
until we have another fight
and you decide that we don't mix
Then again I must endure
the lungs that just won't fill
until the time you find again
our fights are your life's thrill.
Author notes
Written October 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- King Of Sorrow by King Neirad.
300 points, ended October 22, 2006, 35 entries
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i think this one is my favorit of your poems..it soo good. good job =]
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i really like the way you set this poem up it lets the reader know that youre really feeling sad and that you are willing to give this person a second chance~i think any one would be lucky to have you when you stick by them in such a meaningful way -its stupid that they would use you and i know how youre feeling i guess youre right~ all relationships do have their bad times.
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its ok, im still happy... i was just writing about a sad time... every relationship has its bad times... its not always like that or anything... its just... she has broken up with me like 3 or 4 times... so.. it makes me feel kinda shitty... but... she always comes back... so... its not so bad, i still have fun tho, im not being abused or unhappy or anything... so... do feel bad, ill be alright
thanks for the concern tho. 
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well... it was... but... im not trying to like... get people to feel sorry for me... it was inspired by real life... and the contest... so... i dunno....
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I hope this isnt inspired by anything personal. It is very sad, but well written. You still amaze me. Good luck in this contest
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Nice, isn't it sickening how love can be so.. well.. sickening? Good write. Thanks for reading mine ♥
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