Another You
Anger...
Betrayed by one
who was once so close.
Wicked...
cruel...
two-faced...
Spreading your malice with a
lying tongue.
Deep inside I feel the sharp pain.
Pain from the dagger
to which you so
willingly placed in the center of my back.
Twisting...
pushing...
turning...
Deeper inside me.
Until I could breathe no more.
As the angered thoughts
continue to invade my once
sane mind...
I fight to keep my sanity.
You can lock me in a cage,
torturing me...
taunting me...
laughing at me...
but you can't take away my rage.
You can beat me down,
a bloody broken mess.
Again, I will get up
and again, I will press on.
You can run your mouth
all you want.
You will not break me.
You will not bring me down.
I will not play your game.
I will not become.......
......another you.
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Written October 9th, 2006
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What a powerful poem! I could feel every emotion just...piercing through me. I can relate to it very well. I'm impressed with this piece. (And you're absolutely amazing for making an Evanescence-inspired list...that background for it is just plain sexy. hahaha.)
Great job =]
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excellent write here by you...I can really feel at the differnt sotrs of pain in the poem. Sh has been a totally differnt person to me which I do not like at all and I think she used me now to get to be friends with my nasty, bitchy sis in law(she hates my guts) to be friends and when we hang out, her and the nasty sis in law are so rude and cold to me, its like my sis in law brain washed her to be a witch to me when she was around. She wants me to forget and forgive for what shes done to me and take her back. I am still pissed off at her. The words such as torturing me,taunting me,laughing at me, twisting, pushing and turning are words that I can descibed and still feel. Really like the very last 2 lines of the poem and it is the damn truth now...Im done playing head games with her and so on. Again great write and thanks for entering
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Yet another amazing write from you, my friend. I was most impressed with the flow of your words and the vivid description of the situation. Well done, and all the best to you.
Laura -
Thank you friend for reading and commenting. I am glad that you enjoyed this and I appreciate your comments.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate it very much.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
i love it!!! aboslutely love it. you really really grabbed my intention right from the get go, absolutely amazing!!!
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Great job kiddo. Your words painted a feeling of anger, pain, and betraya. And I know betreyal. I am not familiar with the music but the words are full of images and emotions,..great work.
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Magnificent Verse!!
Wow! What a verse You have penned my Friend
This could be a Magnificent set of lyrics all its own.
I have yet to hear the new song by Evanescence~~
Wonderful job on this Masterpiece
Powerful expression of emotion~~
Thank You for sharing this with us
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings to You
and much love~ Desire~*~
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very good poem here, dark, deep and expresses the anger thruoghout. Thank you for sharing this with us my love.
Elizabeth
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very angry and well put. i think you did a fabulous job.
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deep
This was very incredibly deep...I can feel your pain and anger in this Master Ktulu. Well done. Good luck to you in the contest.
Kari -
I think you really captured the angry mood really well here. I can definitely see the connections between this and the atmosphere of the music and how that would inspire you to write this. Lovely job, especially the line: "Spreading your malice with a lying tongue." Oh, and I liked how you incorporated "breathe no more" in there as well. Nicely done. :3
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