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A bit derange

I’ve stood here in this one spot,
watching all the seasons change.
Sometimes I thought` I’d go mad

or at least, a bit derange.

The winter snow, five foot deep,
with Icicles hanging low.
I was so cold and frosted,
and that wasn't long ago.

Then spring sprung, into my view,
butterflies swirled on the breeze.
Tree's budded into bloom, their
blossoms fed the honey bees.

Barnyard fun on summer nights,
children playing in the loft,
Brand new kittens, six in all,
they were cuddly, cute and soft.

That brings us back to autumn,
time to ready for this cold.
Weatherizing would be nice,
for I fear I’m getting old.

I’ve wished for this each new year,
yet words are never spoken.
Hey… I need some maintenance,
before I’m cracked or broken.

Someday you may be sorry,
when frost, bites you on your ass.
But what do I really know!
For I’m just a pane of glass...





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3)iii)Personify an inanimate object and make that the theme of your poem.
Written October 9th, 2006

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  • OnlyInMyDreams
    April 5, 2007

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    ooo, great poem!i loved how you made this poem about an inanimate object, you did a great job, i worte one of these poems for school (it was about a teddybear) but this piece is far better than mine! great job, i love the detial and imagery in this, it makes you feel like you are actually the window pane, great job!

    God Bless,
    OnlyInMyDreams

    P.S. Hope you are enjoying being hoodwinked!


  • maa gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    dearest cindy,
    this poem is just a cutie ... it made my smile a lot and I think that you have done an excellent job, putting yourself inside the "skin" of a window pane. good luck, sweet one.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    October 13, 2006
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    Very Cute! Frosty has bitten my ass! Or was that Rudolph? LOL! Falling out on the job? A little contact with a baseball make you fall apart? Cute cute cute!! Loved it!


  • FifthDove
    October 11, 2006
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    Hey, thanks mate


  • Legend silver member
    October 11, 2006
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    Dove an excellent piece I love the way you looked at this from the perspective of the window.Good Idea that worked well A most enjoyable read Good luck in the contest

    Edited on Oct 11, 2:17 p.m. because ''.


  • FifthDove
    October 11, 2006
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    Thank you very much


  • FifthDove
    October 11, 2006
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    Thanks


  • FifthDove
    October 11, 2006
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    hehehe, thanks
    It did take on a life of it's own when I started typing.


  • -Ink Artist-
    October 11, 2006
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    Marvelous persona piece! Wonderful flow, interesting window personification. Imagery was lovely! A most fabulous entry! Best of luck to you my friend!

    ~Lori~


  • wakingdevil
    October 11, 2006
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    BRILLIANT!BRILLIANT and even more BRILLIANT!

  • wakingdevil
    October 10, 2006
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    This was truly wonderful and much better than the other one.The syntax, rhyming, flow was all flawless and perfect except I think the rhyming of awesome and blossoms (In the midst of beautiful words awesome seems to ruin the feel )Other than that brilliant work and I had to read it twice to enjoy it more the second time!Thanks for sharing this marvellous piece and best of luck in the contest


  • queen Moderators member
    October 10, 2006
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    I think it is just right Great subject too


  • ma belle
    October 10, 2006
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    Hi Shalott sister, I thought I saw two entries from you! Did you pull one? This was a cool idea, personifying a window pane. Much luck in the contest. All my best, Belle

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