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Blended Pleas~

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Blended Pleas~ 


Many webs weave their laces of lies

 And compassionate hearts decompose

Rivers of teardrops fill hollow eyes

As I weep silently on a rose


Pieces missing of broken matter

Twisted fabrication, breath of bone

Left alone, to climb Jacob's ladder

My spirit searches answers unknown


Elements of earth, mystical jade

Hear me softly, my plea, my request

Grace embrace dusk, let light never fade

My soul tires, my Lord give me rest


Shadow memories, let peace prevail

From every depth, to shallow shore

So I may see the sunset sail

Loving others I could not before

Author notes

Some thoughts I jot for myself, hopefully it can touch someone out there that may be able to either relate, or long for love that can over shadow the darkest nights...I had a few ideas rolling around, and tried to weave them all together, therefore maybe only some parts you may feel apply. Thanks for your time reading me, much love to you all, peace, Timothy~
Written October 9th, 2006

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  • Sacred Ground
    February 26, 2007

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    Brilliant

    This just grabbed at my heart. Everytime I read you, I am spellbounded by the beauty you capture through your words. This is one of which I can ponder upon, and feel good feelings. Thanks for sharing. I love it!


  • poetryality silver member
    October 24, 2006
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    Timothy,

    You always weave so very well. This poem does indeed touch my heart. There are those less fortunate who I grieve for. There are them that are broken hearted, forlorn, lost...I am swallowed whole at their demise. Life cuts hard at the fabric of all of us at one time or another. I wish the world could know everlasting peace. But I am sure that the day will come when we lay down the sword and become the brothers and sisters that we are suppose to be. This is a wonderful poem that sheds a hopeful light on the depressed, stressed, and sheer unrest. You are so magical with your word-play. This is simply breathtaking. I always leave your pages awestruck. BRILLIANT!



    Much Love & Be Blessed Always ♥

    Renee


    Hug your beautiful wife and handsome son for me please.

    I LOVE YOU

  • VivienneAingeal
    October 16, 2006
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    Amazing

    This is wonderful. I commend you on this. Keep up the wonderfully touching work!

  • miss helenmarie
    October 16, 2006
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    Timothy,Thank you for sharing your spirit with us.I think all of us are in search of our own essence , when we find it
    We realize we can then share our world with someone.I enjoyed your thoughts on many levels.........

  • lovedoctor
    October 15, 2006
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    This is a true display of spirit.


  • Little Miss Mozart
    October 15, 2006
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    Beautiful! Truly lovely. A lot of the time, widely applauded poems really are just glitz and shmaltz. But yours isn't. Great write!
    ~ Katey ~


  • FeatheredSilence
    October 15, 2006
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    Loved this poem! I loved the way the words weaved together to put forward your thoughts. I don't see how anyone could not find some way to relate to this piece.


  • Cr187
    October 15, 2006
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    OMG, This is AMAZING!! I absolutely love it, I just, omg, I can't explain it! Your talent is so far beyound petty and trivial words, great job and I seriously look forward to more of your works.


  • Butterfly Kissed
    October 14, 2006
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    I can't write my life as well as you can. That was my life.

    Beautiful. I'd love if the favor was returned on some of my poems.

    Thanks,
    Holly


  • October 13, 2006
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    i thought this poem was beautifully written,and i could relate.


  • pixxiepoetess
    October 13, 2006
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    Superb use of rhyme. It flows well without seeming forced. The lines run very naturally. Beautiful piece with an uplifting message. Good stuff. --->pixxie<---


  • Blooming Poet
    October 12, 2006
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    Wow

    Very Meaningful. I liked it a lot.


  • Twinstar
    October 12, 2006
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    EXTAORDINARY!!! Loved it!!! Dark searches for light...Giving up hate for love... Magnificent Piece!!!
    Love & Light
    Twinstar
    Edited on Oct 12, 5:40 p.m. because ''.

  • ellipsistotem
    October 12, 2006
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    that poem is awesome*********************************one of the best ive read.


  • October 12, 2006
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    Excellent

    This poem flows brilliantly and I think you have captured the mood very well. It is a deep poem and I love the imagry you use as well. Excellent.


  • From The Heart
    October 11, 2006
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    que bueno

    Nice i like the rythm and the picture helps set the mood. I also if you wouldn't mind would like you to review a few of mine. But i understand if you don't want to. Either way i loved the poem and it deserves the appluads its gotten along with the one i'm going to give it.


  • MenschMariah
    October 11, 2006
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    WOW

    wow this is emotionly deep and calming the words flow like water nice and smooth. i love the rose part and the way you speak of sunsets and things like that. its written beautifully even constructed more beautifully. GREAT JOB!!!!


  • lov bigT wiggy
    October 11, 2006
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    Awsome!

    Wow, that was really in depth. I really like the "weeping on a rose" part. That shows me that you are really creative about your writing, I prefer that in poets. Keep up your good work, and don't fret.
    ~lov bigT wiggy~


  • moondance20
    October 11, 2006
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    very nice

    Wow that is cool!!


  • XNightmare-AngelX
    October 11, 2006
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    It's a bit hopefull for my taste. I like dark depressing stuff. But I like it anyway. it is very beautifully written though and I enjoyed reading it.

  • smokes89
    October 10, 2006
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    wo i really love this one, and it is beautifully written, since as you have tyhe most applause on here, i was wondering if you could give me some advice on mine, it would be much appriciated...im only 17 and only just started out, so i hope you get a chance...thank you for sharing this

    take care

  • pookiebear
    October 10, 2006
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    Very nicely written. I enjoyed this one! A very good imagination.

  • Billbard silver member
    October 10, 2006
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    A beautifully worded and excellently rhymed poem you have created well worthy of the numerous applauses.Thanks for the enjoyable read.

  • Sacred Ground
    October 10, 2006
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    Great flow you have going here. I have had these thoughts many times,for we all need someone to love, and to be loved in return. this is,(as always) beautifully written.
    God bless
    LisaMarie


  • drybones
    October 10, 2006
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    Good

    Well done. Excellent poetic flow and it contains a message.


  • Yrusonvs
    October 10, 2006
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    i really lovde this poem, very inspiring, you've really got a power with your words. this can be interpreted so many ways and if read the wrong way might be considered a bit morbid. one of the many thoughts i got from this was coming to grips with a loss and just being sad about it. anyway, i really liked this broadness of this. awesome.

  • Poetic Fanatic
    October 10, 2006
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    Applaudable!

    Very well done once yet again brother Tim. Congratulations
    on your wonderful responses. Keep up the grand work, I hope
    you're doing well. See you around my friend.

    Tommy


  • masterblaster gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    Hi, a very bautiful poem, I love the sentiments in this write, a weird thing I never hate, I get mad say my piece and it is over,I found this poem very touching and it has a smooth flow, loved it my friend, you have my applause, hugs Di


  • Ebrehlac
    October 10, 2006
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    Splendid

    Very Deep. It was very coherent, even though you took many thoughts and combined. The point is it didn't come off random. Good job

    P.S...
    The imagery you used was great!


  • Sabindi
    October 10, 2006
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    truly inspiring write

    Wowee this is a truly inspiring poem and so fully deep, with outstanding flow and meter and choise of words. You did an excellent job of penning this one and thank you so much for sharing. Blessings fellow poet. Marilyn


  • SGaaerith
    October 10, 2006
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    This is so beautiful - it's open to interpretation, so everyone can appreciate it. Very nice write!


  • WisdomWarrior
    October 10, 2006
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    I think my favorite lines are the last 4:

    "Shadow memories, let peace prevail
    From every depth, to shallow shore
    So I may see the sunset sail
    Loving others I could not before"

    Lovely.

    John

  • scamant
    October 10, 2006
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    more,more

    excellent imagnitive

  • MtnGirl98 silver member
    October 10, 2006
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    interesting... and beautiful. the nice thing is it leaves it open for individual interpretation to each reader... it can mean something entirely different for everyone. beautiful imagery too.

    thanks for giving me something to think about!

  • Lisa Haslett
    October 10, 2006
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    Great work

    Great write,I like it!Very deep!Cool!From Lisa K Haslett Rayrown Mo.


  • SabaSophiya
    October 10, 2006
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    This is really awe-inspiring in every single way. A ten on ten rightaway for its theme, content, flow, energy, thought-pattern, style, rhythm as well as rhyme. Way to go.....!!


  • gladyspshaw57
    October 10, 2006
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    Extremely Awesome!

    Extremely Awesome! What more can I say to express how I feel about this poem. I'm loving it. Keep expressing it in this way my friend. Applauds, Hugs, and Love to you, Gee

  • darrylblacksr
    October 10, 2006
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    outstanding poem

    Wow! this is an outstanding poem and I am very lucky to been able to read it and for that I must thank you. Especially for sharing the understanding of love that our heavenly father has given us as a gift.. Thank you again and may you and yours be blessed.......


  • Exodus gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    I am absolutely astounded! This is just... I don't think there is a word to encompass all I want to say! Morbidly beautiful, and written with such talent that I'm in awe!


  • Anaiya
    October 10, 2006
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    Lovely, I liked it, well done

  • JennStuff
    October 10, 2006
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    I Liked this poem, something deeper than i think i have read in a while. The feelings behind the words, make it a great read. Nice flow of words just enough to make you want more..


  • vanteya37
    October 10, 2006
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    Beautiful

    Very sad. Surprisingly deep despite its brevity. Calling God, the elements & jade gave the poem a mystic feel. Images of the sun and sea evoked similar feeling of sadness & searching in me. Great rhyme scheme too.

  • Suzanne Dia
    October 10, 2006
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    Nice with the rhyme, I usually don't really go for it, but you worked it in well, it is clear you worked to keep this from sounding forced. As to the content, I can appreciate it as well, it reminds me a bit of the song "Calling All Angels" by Jane Siberry


  • Loves to write61
    October 10, 2006
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    excellent piece of work

    this was an awsome poem great grapics,carefully selected words simpley made this a wondreful poem the picture was excellent also.


  • xxemokevinxx
    October 10, 2006
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    First, let me start by saying that your choice of picture, background and text was very good for this poem. It has a calming effect but still a depressing (in a way) one. Not to say that your poem was depressing, though I could sense the sadness in it and I think in appearances you did well with this, from the centered style to the text color it's all very much aesthetically pleasing.

    Next, let me say that I love this poem. The first stanza drew me in right away and let me know where the rest of the poem was going to stand, what it was going to be like, and when I got to the last stanza it was like a part of me was filled with hope. I think that's an excellent effect and you're a really good writer for bringing out all of those emotions (sadness, hope, calmness).

    Shadow memories, let peace prevail

    I love this a lot. When I read it I sort of thought into the past, what horrors have been done but then it was contradicted with the 'let peace prevail', I think that this is an excellent touch to the line.

    From every depth, to shallow shore
    So I may see the sunset sail
    Loving others I could not before

    Even though I'm not a huge fan on rhyme, I think you did well with it here. Not to mention, the message in this poem is so clear and beautiful, I think that it is just overall a very beautiful read and I simply adore your writing. Good job and keep up your good work!

    -Kevin


  • Xx Alice xX
    October 10, 2006
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    Rambles of a mind that find their way to sooth others. Everyday thoughts seem to relate to others and their everyday thoughts. Good of you to help them through their day.

  • Rudolf
    October 10, 2006
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    a web well woven

    this is what poems should look and read like,not to many words,not to many stanzas,alot of content,excellent ryhme and flow.something in this piece for ever one.looks to me like you woven one exceptional web of weave,judging from all those happy faces up top everyone else feels the same.very well woven,rudolf


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    well, no wonder you have so many
    clappy guys up there! This is
    a very very good poem I apologize
    for not using a word other than the
    generic, 'good', but I just got up
    and the coffee hasn't worked its
    magic yet ;D Enjoyed. Love, Lane


  • orionrising
    October 10, 2006
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    You always, always write the most Fantastic poems. I am always brought to a stop when I read your poetry. Such depth and incredible journeys you take me on. Thank you for being such an amazing talent and inspiration for me!!


  • Valesha
    October 10, 2006
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    great

    i love it!!!!


  • Angels Delight
    October 10, 2006
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    My Dear Timothy...

    What can I say honey about this most magnificent piece once again...Like Mel said we love it whe you get a thought because it always inspires something special...

    Your words always capture my heart and mind and makes me think

    Capture my heart with your words...
    love ya
    Tes


  • Rose Patrick
    October 10, 2006
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    breathe taking is not enough to say how much I love this poem. the beauty of it lift my sprit to great hieght of peace. I thank you my friend for I was feeling kind of down. but your poem brought me back to my god where I got peace over this day.

  • catcrawford22
    October 10, 2006
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    I wish i could write even a half as good as you, it is great a real emotional read.


  • sora.
    October 9, 2006
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    friggin sweet

    this is friggin awsome i luv it


  • irishpoet16
    October 9, 2006
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    The picture was very pretty and gave a sad-like mood to the poem. The background and the text color didn't clash but complimented each other and made the poem easier to read. This was a very pretty piece of poetry to read, I truly enjoyed reading this. You have talent. The title was very nice and the whole of the poem flowed nicely.

    Many webs weave their laces of lies

    And compassionate hearts decompose

    Rivers of teardrops fill hollow eyes

    As I weep silently on a rose

    This stanza really grabbed me. I think that this is my favorite stanza out of this poem. It sets the mood I guess for the reader, telling that this is sad poem. I like the reference to the rivers of teardrops sorta falling on the rose. That was sweet.

  • foolsforsarah
    October 9, 2006
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    greaT

    really great poetry...u have awesome talent


  • Faerie Me
    October 9, 2006
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    My dear blaw! I am once again in awe of you. I read and read em again and am totally blown away. I too love the compassionate hearts decomposing. And just the whole web of lies. Great job!
    I commented..I did..I did.


  • luckynsincere
    October 9, 2006
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    I love when you "jot your thought" You are as always inspiring! I enjoyed this piece.. your flow was smooth and without error at all. Thanks so much for gracing my day with your beautiful words.
    Always,
    MEl


  • mzladyt
    October 9, 2006
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    This is amazing. I read it over and over. Beautiful job

  • Trevor DeSouza
    October 9, 2006
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    excellent poem with rhyme and metreso well blended that it keeps to your title. I like the way you bring out the web and use it to expose lies as being fabricated. You have not just created an imagery but a tapestry that comes alive. Compassionate hearts decomposing also adding to the whole motion. Loving others I could not before is another line that causes a sort of metamorphosis in your lfe. Fantastic.


  • earthstar
    October 9, 2006
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    excellent

    Elements of earth, mystical jade

    Hear me softly, my plea, my request

    Grace embrace dusk, let light never fade

    My soul tires, my Lord give me rest

    These lines are so lovely the poem all I can say is it touches the soul they way you wrapped the lines are exquiste they are a honor to God. You do love very well I love like that once lost something that meant the world to me. I have not been able to love that way it has made some of my heart hard. This touched me I think I was tired this has so much hope and love in it it touched me deeply. Thanks so much for showing us how to love the way God love us take care brother dear lots of love b

  • FindingFate
    October 9, 2006
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    Well Written As Always

    Timothy this is a lovely piece you have penned. I can indeed relate to this one as of late...Everyone has said all the lovely things I could say....I love it my friend...absolutly...Trina


  • HisBreathlessDream
    October 9, 2006
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    Tim...... Crying...... you know what i am going through right now and the horrible mistakes i have made and you know what is happening to me because of them this piece...... omg..... i love ya tim but this.... the depth and emotion and likeness to what I feel..... i hate you.

    ~Ocean

    PS dont take that wrong i am sure you know what i mean.


  • Aurielle
    October 9, 2006
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    As I weep silently on a rose

    The first stanza was the best. I love this poetry keep writing. Very creative


  • Stardust-luvr
    October 9, 2006
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    heartfelt

    my dearest Timothy your write was incredibly to hte heart and soul and with everyline I could vision many of my own thoughts in your words of hope and sadness bringing tears to my eyes.My loving heart goes out to your loving and inspirational heart. I cherish your friendship forevermore.


  • HaleighGrace
    October 9, 2006
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    This is really beautifull and although i am only 12-I understand your love.
    HALEIGH


  • AgeofAquarius
    October 9, 2006
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    W RITE ONN !!

    Beautiful write my friend... You magnify what true love is supposed to look like Tim. In practice and in action.


  • SecertPoet
    October 9, 2006
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    JUr\st straight up brilliant its awaosme and flows perfect I would give a 10 thubs up .


  • Stoneface Gremlin
    October 9, 2006
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    This is a brilliant poem. I love the way you expressed yourself in this. The words flow very easily and the meaning is very strong and understandable. It has a hint of grief along with joy which makes the title very relevant. I only find one problem with your rhyme scheme. It seems like a bit of a stretch to go from "fatigue" to "critique". Given that is the only problem that I can find, I think that this is a brilliant poem. It was a great read.


  • Poet of Dreams
    October 9, 2006
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    this is realy a beautiful pem with a great message. i love the use of classic ryhme meter and the flowa was very nice. i also realy liked to way it was a prayer. in todays day in age there is so much christian censorship. i do realy like this poem. i could see this being a childrens poem * almost* kind of like a bed-time prayer. this is realy great and thanks for sharing.

    Good Write and God Bless
    ~poet of dreams~


  • Desire gold member
    October 9, 2006
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    Magnificent Verse!!

    Timothy and Your words Touch the Heart!
    You have gone out to extend a hand to others and know
    a hand extends out to You
    The Light surrounds Your temple even in times it feels like there is no view...but know this to be true~~~
    You are Loved and Appreciated by so many that the combined
    energy....is like a cushion to catch any tears that fall!
    You have been there with palms open to catch many who
    have shed from their windows...

    Thank You for sharing this with us my Friend
    You never cease to amaze with Your words~~
    I imagine You have been heard

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Marzipan
    October 9, 2006
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    "Many webs weave their laces of lies" I love this opening line so much, it just sounds so critical and yet pretty and sad. Strong start.

    "Shadow memories, let peace prevail
    From every depth, to shallow shore
    So I may see the sunset sail
    Loving others I could not before"

    I'm not sure I fully get this, yet it instills a sense of longing and sadness. Like wishful thinking.
    Great poem. I /really/ like it.
    ~ Sylvia xXx


  • Wandika gold member
    October 9, 2006
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    The older we get the less we want to banter about. We want honesty and just cut to the chase on issues. Relaionships all the more. Heartfelt honesty and nothing shallow. No time to waste or mess about.

    Your write is understood and appreciated by one so old.

    Jim


  • Always Deena
    October 9, 2006
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    So many of these lines I can relate to,as many can I am certain. Wonderful to read you.
    As Always,
    Deena

  • She Stole My Voice
    October 9, 2006
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    I can relate. I really do.
    I love the picture you chose to go with this.
    Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing on!

    ~ImmortalUndead~


  • InsideLetOut
    October 9, 2006
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    Neat poem. I enjoyed it. The picture is a good addition too.

  • fairygurl120
    October 9, 2006
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    THis poem is really good. I like your use of descriptive words and phrases.


  • Iohagh
    October 9, 2006
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    Darling P...

    I misread this peas
    giggling please I erred
    restarting reading your pleas
    to which I concur.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • tomisb
    October 9, 2006
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    Enjoyed the imagery. Not to undone by the occasional disjointedness of thought. You get away with much because of the flow and texture of your words and the gentleness that inhabits your words. Love, Tom B.

  • nothingshortofdying
    October 9, 2006
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    This is beautiful. It expresses pain but also hope, and the knowledge that God is always there to hear our pleas. Very, very excellent description. Great work.


  • eyesofanangel524
    October 9, 2006
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    This is beautiful, even though there is pain within your words. You have painted a vivid picture here. The seeking of inner peace so that you can move forward, loving thy neighbor. Doing as what was intended. Living by the grace of god. Well said. Thank you for sharing I enjoyed this. Dawn


  • poetryrocksmysox
    October 9, 2006
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    Creative and Truthful!

    Thank you once again for penning something that I can relate to, as well as learn from. Your honest writes have so much meaning within them, and I can see where you had a few ideas when you started this, just making it that much more to take in, and get more out of the poem itself. So I for one loved it, for it screams out in each line, as a glimmer of hope shines through in the end. Thank you for sharing your inspirational poetry, and I wish you all the best in future writes as well.

    poetryrocksmysox~ ~ ~


  • JoyfulWriter
    October 9, 2006
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    So much pain and darkness here....you have expressed this superbly, I might add. You are quite the weaver of words and have proved to be an awesome writer! Please keep up the ggod work! Smiles, Terry


  • esroddo silver member
    October 9, 2006
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    Breath taking I applaud you sincerely

    A wonderful write. Yes some time one feels lost and lack of love or understanding. This piece was wonderful to read and inspirational. Keep writing your words are Gold. (Lisa)
    "Shadow memories, let peace prevail
    From every depth, to shallow shore
    So I may see the sunset sail
    Loving others I could not before"


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    October 9, 2006
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    Excellant /intriguing/challenging

    A very fine write indeed. i liked it just as it is, although the font would be easier to read if it were slightly larger.


  • individuality gold member
    October 9, 2006
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    no real need for the comma in between teardrops and fill as the lien flows smoothly i think. i think we can all relate to this here, many of us will find ourselves in darker moments and then find ourselves in prayer. a good piece. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

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