There amidst the virgin forest
To an island in the lake
Sailed the warrior Standing Bear
Rippling Waters his bride to take
He had built their nuptial lodge
In the hope she would be his
He had traded many horses
Now her Father had accepted this
She felt pleased with his attention
Wanted him to be her mate
Yearned for the days and nights of passion
Longed to be in the motherhood state
High above an eagle soaring
Wingtips spread out like a fan
Heard the song of nature calling
Heard her voice softly call her man
In the warmth of their forest dwelling
Joined as one their limbs entwined
Lay the bodies of the lovers glistening
As if to keep their love confined
Author notes
a muse inspired by the image...
Written October 9th, 2006
What did you think
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Outstanding!!!
I love this poem, it's a wonderful tribute to Native Americans' history and culture. Rich in metaphor, you've painted a beautifully romantic love story. "The Virgin Forest" draws the reader into its cool and blessed sanctuary, gently enticing us to take a break from the world, relax, and feel (and hear) the closeness and wonder of nature... The colorful, reflective image is breathtaking, as well. Great job!!!
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Thank you kindly!
I love this poem too...I seem to have an affinity to North American Indian culture and it seems to come to the surface periodically and I write something about different aspects on their wayof life..it may be a purely spiritual connection...all I know is it gives me a great deal of pleasure and I am pleased you enjoyed it too!...Dan xx
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BEAUTIFUL!!!
I often feel our native indians had the spiritual way about them, they always were very close to nature and all of its beauty and wisdom.
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Nifty spin on a companionship and lovemaking, rather intreeging..
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This is great, I love poems with a story and especially Native images, you had great images here, by the way.
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with me being roughly 30% Native American, you already have my kudos for this piece, either way however, i find it a magnificent piece, I'm not sure if it was what you intended, but I thought of how the eagle soaring calling her mate relfected much upon the man and his wife/wife to be, I'm new to this site but I must say, this is one of my favorite poems now, thank you for writing this beautiful work of art, keep up the greatness
Taylor F.
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Thank you
Yes that was the intention..to show the link between all creatures and the feeling of love that brings everything together as one...the eagle...although flying high above heard Rippling Waters called to her man Standing Bear and at once understood the language of love being expressed...thank you for your generous remarks on my write...I have a deep respect for native american culture and have written other pieces with that theme....peace and harmony poet...Dan
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I am extremely partial to Native American poems and thoughts, so I really like this! I like the flow of this also...I like the abcb rhyme scheme too. Very nice flow...
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Thank you
Many thanks for commenting..its appreciated!...Dan x
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OMG flawless
wow got to love the flow . i darn good write i envy your talent . i am still in awe
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Thank you very much!
Thank you for such generous remarks on my write...I appreciate it very much!...Dan
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Great
This is my style of poetry. Great stuff
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Thank you!
I am so sorry I failed to notice your comment on my write..I usually try to respond to every remark I get...thank you very much for taking the time to comment...its appreciated!...Dan
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I love this! It brought to my memory and old George Jones song called, "Running Bear". "Running bear loved little white dove, with a love as big as the sky..."
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Thanks hunny!
Im just an old romantic at heart!...thanks for the comment!...Dan xxx love you!
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WOW!
I love this makes my mind worl with private emotions of a man and his wife. Not at all what I thought it would be when I read the title
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your deep appeciation for nature and the natives
comes through vividly here
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Thank you very much!
I appreciate your most generous comment on my write!...regards Dan xxx
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so sweet. a beautiful story.
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Another very nice piece. You've told a story in pictures which is often the best kind of poetry.
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I love the story you have chosen to tell...and you have done so, very well! I was pulled in by this piece. As I began reading I felt the need to savor every word, all the while in anticipation of the conclusion of the story. You are able to keep the reader interested, without making them feel as though they need to rush through.
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Beautiful. The imagery is wonderful and calming. The picture is very pretty. My favorite part is the last stanza. Well done.
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yeh the image is lovely by itself......its everybodys wish to run to some virgin places to get rid of our busssy bee cities.
like the image, your poems is very soothing. I very sweet and adorable piece in here. Makes me go for a vacation lol. as its really tough to find such peace in my chaotic city, mumbai
it was a nice treat to read these lines early morning.
wish to read more of your work
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keep going
Ankita
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Wonderful piece here Dan!
I love the way that you capture
every picture that you write about.
Always a pleasure to read you my friend!
Thanks a lot for sharing this and keep
up the great work here!
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Thank you!
It pleases me that you found pleasure in reading this write...and your comment is most welcome!...I am delighted and proud that my write can stir such emotions...Love is such a wonderful feeling and it is not the easiest thing to describe...butwhen you become the person in the image and try to think how they might do...then it becomes easier...Native Americans are and were such a spiritual people and I like to think of them as being truly noble and honest and filled with a sense of pride in who they were and are and they have my respect for the goodness in their hearts...thank you for commenting so strongly and passionately about my write...Dan xxx
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I am pleased you sent this my way> I love it. You have great imagery of NATIVE WAYS and the way you have presented it here is beautiful . "In the warmth of their forest dwelling
Joined as one their limbs entwined
Lay the bodies of the lovers glistening
As if to keep their love confined" Absolutely intertwined with nature as natives always are, even in love. Thanks so much for sharing this.
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Thank you
I have always felt an affinity to Native American culture...it sends a warm shiver through me when I read or see anything about it...I have no explanation for it...I only know it makes me feel something!...regards...Dan x
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Once again I thank you for your courtesy and generosity when commenting on my poems...it pleases me that you find pleasure in my writes...regards Dan x
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Thanks Dusty...as ever I appreciate your heartfelt comments and value them immensely...your pal Dan xx
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Awww this is so very sweet!! You DO have talent dammit lol
This one was very neat, I liked it alot.
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Dan this just goes toward the diversity of your abilty to write and your talent to see such beauty. As always your work a pleasure to read
the romantic in your heart dan is written in the lines of this piece. The illusion of the romance the love between the two you paint the picture in words time and race endless across the seas makes no difference. yeah got the dan trademark and touch thank you for the post dan a pleasure to read.
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Thank you very much for your remarks...its much appreciated...Dan
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Very Romantic, love cherokee indian style philosophy,
and really enjoyed your write, Cheers..
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