I am ready
To storm the school
And get revenge
For the wrongs done to me
I will look like an ordinary person
But what no one will see
Is that every once in a while
With my silencer on
I pop a single round
Take down ones
I which haven't been nice
They got what they deserved
As everyone, is someones' Hitler
I am ready
To storm the school
Not just for the hell of it
But that's what people will think
As yesterday...
I seemed just fine
Less than content
But not angry
Not peeved
Just depressed
And slightly steamed
I will say nothing today
As this can only go two ways
Oh, I'm at the door
Time for tragedies
As well as atrocities to take place
I just go to
my regular place in the morning
by my locker
I sit and wait
Till there are more people
Its so hard to wait
The anticipation
Adrenaline rushing
Its now 7:30 AM
It is Time
And I'm ready
I load rounds
And pop off a few
Screw the silencer
I like their horrified screams
POP
POP
THUD
I hit someone
A bystander but its enough
He was my first victim
And I didn't know him at all
But what the hell
I may have only saw him go down
But I felt as though
I knew him to well
More rounds fired
I'm getting good
No one has realized
What those explosions are
What's going one
To them its a sick joke
To me, its destiny
And yet more time firing
And the crowd of people thins
After a while
It is rare
That I see a person
An hour of watching people die
And I'm ready to go
As I feel bad
I hit my crush
And killed her instantly
I feel so empty
So angry
Regretful
I took the life
Of one who was Innocent
I just fall to the floor
And feel heavy footsteps
I know its of S.W.A.T.
So I just take out my poetry
From my bag
Lay it next to me
With just one more round needed
I take out all but one
The trigger is heavy
But I do it
And splatter my brains all over the wall.
Author notes
This is as dark and evil as i get.
I showed this to someone from school. And he litterally shit his pants, because he knew me and how dark i am normally.
I also accidently started a school shooting threat with this
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lo0ol. How much trouble did you get into when you started that school shooting threat..Man, that principal must have been pissed..lo0ol..anyways it's a very dark and the ending with the brains spilling on the wall was fucking creepy as shit. But it is a very good poem..Nice job =)
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actually in the search for me, they shut down the major city nearby and the suburb my school is in as well as the 3 nearby.
When they found me, I gave them the information that it was old and that I no longer had these feelings about people, this is the only thing that kept them from getting charged as a terrorist.
I made the news with this one, and my pen name was found out. "Ostrasized" so I descided it to change it to what I currently have. "Crazy Dan" that's also my nickname that I'm known as
I'm so glad that people have forgotten about this. It only took several months.
Thank you for the compliment of it being good.
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WOW amazing! This is one of the best i've read! Thank you for entering and sharing this with me! It was beautiful and dark, and perfect!
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this is a great tale
all to real in our day and age
Thank you for entering.
keep up the great writing.
fire
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Oh, JEEZ!!! You're right when you said it was dark. It is kind of depressing. "You" hit your crush in the poem. Gosh. Another powerful poem. It really made me think.
How do you do it? I mean, write this way. Move people. It's strange how you can impress people, even though you've never met, and you barely know eachother at all. By the way, what do you mean when you said he *bunny* his pants? I've heard the term before, I just have no clue what it means -
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I'm an excellent actor, for only training for 3 years in school i've become very good and from that i've learned stuff that could help me anywhere. Such as overspeaking your mind making things worse can sometimes give it a stronger effect. Such the term, Mugging (drama term)
I was sensoring myself, i'm trying to get out of the habbit of swearing or i was anyways. -
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An actor, huh? Hmm... You were beaten up after school, or were you talking about other people? 'Cause if you were, that would suck. But being emotionally beaten up is worse.
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mugging means over exagerating an emotion for the purpose of proving your point.
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the beating up after school, created new meaning to the term 25-life, because you can either get life starting with juvinial jail if you win and 25 years after you recover if you lose.
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great piece of writing, loved the feel and flow and the thoughts that you so easily conveyed. very on topic with current events and gives one a glimpse inside the mentality.
Bunny
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This is dark and is very much a theme of todays society. It is sad that pieces like these are considered to be actual threats these days. Free speech is pretty well gone, and soon I think even poetry like this will be watched by the all seeing and all knowing Big Brother. Or maybe I am just a paranoid freak..who knows. Either way I think you achieved what you set out to so bravo.
Despair
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Excellant /Chilling
Aye, very morbid indeed. It was well written, however, if these are your real thoughts please find professional help.
I can relate to your depressed feelings, however. If you choose, read my poem: Depression/Transition. I hope your mood and your life improves. I care. -
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this was a dark sad tragic and very morbid poem. to take life for any reason is an abomination. i give you kudos for digging deep and writing this and posting it, knowing some of the flack you might recieve from it. i don't agree with kids killing kids. what ever happened to beating someone up after school? -
Well, thank heavens for Australian Gun Laws!! (Keep hanging on to that sense of humour, kiddo!). Nice work, though ~ and don't get yourself arrested as a potential terrorist!
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unfortunately its only true that i wouldn't because i don't have a gun, or ammuniton for what matters.
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POP
POP
THUD
it scared me. so much. it feels so real. so....
i don't know.
but i know you wouldn't do that.... -
i would have to say no
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o, so this isn't the time to pull off a prank of posting this around the school is it?
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oh well all across the U.S there have been school shootings..and students threating...I had one at my school last week...
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Wait, what, I honestly don't know what's going on in the media. I refuse to watch Tv, and i just naturally don't listen to the radio. So I don't know what's going on.
That is one thing that i definately tried to do, scare people, but I'm not trying to be the current generation's Edgar Allen Poe. -
I too would of shit my pants...lol...This was great...Kind of going along with the media at this point with all the High School threats and such...This was actually really really good...Dark and scary..You got my attention...Great job and good luck in the contest!
~^Sara^~
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