Observational piece.
Dr Strangeone and Mr Shy.
Doctor Strangeone,
and...Mr Shy.
Yes! he could stop,
but he won't try,
won't take some help
...prefers to lie.
Dr Strangeone,
Mr Shy,
Dr Strangeone.
Vile indeed,
with vicious hatred
sadistic greed,
scheming...dreaming,
planting seed.
Dr Strangeone
...vile indeed.
Mr Shy, gorgeous guy.
Sweet and keen
a lovers dream,
hot with passion
romantic fashion.
Kind and caring,
not too daring,
Mr Shy, gorgeous guy.
But then there's Dr Strangeone...
Author notes
Manic.
A contest entry
- Bipolarity by Patched Up Ragdoll.
600 points, ended February 3, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
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What did you think
Comments
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Double personalities and secret intentions. When someone has more than one personality. I like to call it the Gemini Complex... As Gemini is to stand for the twins, two faced thus two minded, two different people. It's scary this, as this reminds me a lot of serial murderers and stuff as they often live normal lives and stable jobs and nobody could otherwise guess. Psychotics sometimes show none of this and it is nearly impossible to spot until it's too late, if at all.
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A quite powerful write, you capitalise every lines and i am not too keen on this especialy with such short lines. I like the way you express the contrast of the 2 personalities within one and what is left at the end a very troubled mind. Thank you for entering my contest
and good luck
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Hmmm.... this is an interesting piece. It reminds me of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. It really is intersting though...
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HOLY SH*T!
Dude, this is amazing! I wish I could still write with this kind of honesty. Something like this is modern poetry at it's sharpest edge. Not cynical, not clouded by the thought of your work. This is simply art. I commend you and I see how you have amassed as many trophies as you have. Good luck in this contest, and it would be an honor to be even close to you at the end of this contest.
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intriguing
nice take on the Dr jekyll/mr hide concept... one that is more prevelant in the world then many realize, methinks !! -
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You got it.
Very true sentiments Lady Peg.
No one is perfect but there are some who's imperfections are far worse than others.
Thankyou for reading and your comments :-)
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this sounds like the "bad boy" "good boy" complex, though obvious which one the girl should pick, the bad boy is instead chosen. Well this was unique and well written, great job and thanks for entering. -Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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lover's dream! that comma is still floating too
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Doctor Strangeone , <------- comma in a spacesuit lol
Won't take no help - any help would sound better
Sheeming, - ? do you eman scheming?
A lovers dream - A lover's dream
Mr Shy , <------- another comma in a s[pacesuit.
a good piece though it needs some work on it i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Hello Wayne.
Thanks for reading.
Yes is true everyone has 2 sides (or more) but in some i think its more obvious than in others.
Glad you liked it.
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Beautiful writing again
The alter-egos of the human psyche. This is a deep yet truthful piece of they way we are. We could be both characters at the same time. Or We could be the one character, while the other is out there, waiting to be met. I liked this a lot. It tells a lot about the human condition in such a short write. -
Yes mildly scary... thats a very good phrase to use. :-)
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sad disturbing and scary in my opinion.
I understand it. It is quite disturbing and mildly scary as well. -
Hello Mr F
Sad?, yes . I think you understood this one very well.
Thanks . :-)
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You have a good understanding.
Re: Ying and yang, yes 2 sides to everything. Accepting the rough with the smooth.
Intense badness of sorts often reflects extreme niceness.
The hard part of it all for someone who has such extremes as these is to accept, deduce and adjust accordingly to provide the correct balance.
To avoid any confusion.Can i just point out that i am not writing about me in this piece. Its an observational write about someone else.
Thanks for reading
x Blank.
Edited on Oct 08, 4:27 p.m. because 'to add extra info'. -
Hi
This is quite capturing with a sad entwined meaning.
Very excellent poem. I would not say that it,s sad sad, but relativley. Excellent poam. -
Excellent
This is very very good, I love the title and yes, I understand the poem.
I thought this would be awful, I ws wrong you have put together something very interesting here - ying and yang.
I love the words and flow, it is wonderful.
An excellent piece.
James
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