In the deep night
when indigo turned
into the gray,
I saw your face,
drenched
with the pale light.
I have heard you
followed
by the Full Moon Prince
howling voices.
Sliding screams' were going
higher and higher,
flying,
united with star tears,
vanished
invisible
like Universe breathing.
You,
wounded and thirsty
were looking for healing lake
deep as eternity,
to immerse
into the dark blue,
to clean you,
to emerge toward the light,
to find your companion
never to be alone,
not to sing
again
Full Moon Night Blues.
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Written October 7th, 2006
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This was lovely, and there is Such a soft tone to the poem. It fits the picture perfectly. If there is any metaphoric meaning though, I didn't pick up on it.
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Picture and poem merge nicely--good sense of word-flow and rhythm. And a gently empathetic take on the mythology.
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Thank you for your time to read my poetry and for such a nice comment. Well, Moon as a planet comapanion or Moon as romantic light, lovers leader or hard worker...depands what you better like. Even Moon has its (or his?) dark side. Nothing is perfect and we much cherish poetry about the bright side of life, love and such...
I am glad that you like it. You are always welcome to my site even without a comment. Poetry is here to be shared.
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Ok, this is the second time I have been at this page, and so it is the second time I am wondering about you, this write and going to my veranda to have a look at it, once again...and yes, you succeed, it makes me think, is the moon deserving enough such pure, sounding and moving words
Really a very fine art of penning
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Thank you Greysen.
~Sonja~ -
united with star tears,
vanished
invisible
like Universe breathing.
I Liked That Part The Best. I Imagine Astral Projection, And Floating Slowly To The Sky,Away From The World, Into Secrecy. Good Write, best of luck-Greysen. -
Thank you Kevin. Sometimes words only floes, sometimes not. Temporarely my muse has gone because I am too bussy with other duties.
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AMAZINGLY BEAUTIFUL!
WOW! The picture sets the mood and your beautiful words stir the heart
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Thanks Walt, I am always happy to see your comments here because I know that you are still reading my poetical trials. Also, your honest comments means a lot to me.
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Thank you Nicolette. It was my pleasure to meet you again. Yes, Full Moon looks very inviting and has a special reflection to our inner world. It was always very touhg job to howl all alone.
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Thank you Cyberartist. I am still learning language and each poem is a new chalenge to learn something new. I am glad that you like it.
~Sonja~
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Thank you waydownuponjoy for your very nice and precious comment.
~Sonja~ -
Hi xeroabyss, if you like organs together with the Full Moon Blues, than my ansver will be - yes - Bach is somwehere there between the stars or maybe one of them
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Hi Sonja, loved your use of color (words)in this one. Great overall mood set by the pic and the word choices. Brilliant. Walt.
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There is something about a full moon that makes one want to howl... be it because of loneliness of because of some ecstatic experience. You've painted the moon in all its full-blue colours here, Sonja. I've just recently wrote a poem along the same lines... remembering, and the nostalgia of memories; of a beautiful time lost... Indeed we all want the companion to howl to the moon with! A lovely poem to which I can relate very much too. Was good to read you again
~ Nicolette
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ooooo very nice you have set a tall mountain I will try to do this justice you have written this very eloquently
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I usually find that pictures distract from the poem, but in this instance your poem obviously enhanced the picture! A good choice of words that flowed down the page and captured the essence of where a soul can glide when one has the freedom to "let loose and let fly" and there's no better time than a full moon to go there! Your words aptly described the emotion of a lonely heart! joy
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Selene Would Smile To Read This
lovely...
hey is that Sabastian Bach up there ?
anyhell,love the night,love the Moon,love the poem.
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Thank you Johnny. I think I will have to ask you to write something with me in collaboration, because your comments - verses are always great and they looks like a part of my poetry, althought they are looking like a kind of answer. You are allways kind with your applauses making me proud.
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Thank you Moonshine Pixie for applauses. Your comments are honest and kind advices are always very precious to me.
~Sonja~
Edited on Oct 08, 2:01 because 'Typos as always.
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aRRRRRRRRooooooooooooooooo
prance with the full moon prince
your loving presence does he sense
Silently across the cold dark rocks
Runs swiftly until his heart knocks
Baying vanquished screams of the night
Praying for his mate as sun begets light
Through bright snow and trees does he wait
As she proceeds towards him,destiny's fate
Nice Sonja, the second stanza really made the poem>
JD
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Very nice free verse, Sonja. You did very depicting the lonliness and the sounds of the dark night. Your second stanza is the strongest:
I have heard you
followed
by the Full Moon Prince
howling voices.
Sliding screams' were going
higher and higher,
flying,
united with star tears,
vanished
invisible
like Universe breathing.
It flows with the pitch of the voices, as they increase. Very well done.
Maybe in you last line, you might want to capitalize Full Moon, to match up with the Full Moon Prince in stanza 2? It is just a thought. Good luck in the contest.
Moonshine Pixie
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