Her heart of diamonds,
Glamorous and cool.
Respectfully rich-hard as ice.
Maximum security for this precious thing,
No one gets in,
The lock is sealed.
A penny falls out-what is happening?
The flow continues
Who dares to rob the bank?
My heart of diamonds
Your heart of gold
What it your need for more?
What is your need for mine
When you can have your own
My lock tries to stay shut.
Author notes
Written October 7th, 2006
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Very nice, i really like this one and i like the very insinuativeness of the diamond and gold hearts it's good stuff.
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oh, yes, I know that only too well!!!! all writers have their moments. ^_^
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I agree, so it's fine, : D.
I'm not that fond of my own poem, I wrote it pretty quickly off the top of my head, and it didn't turn out at all like it did in my head. Doesn't that just happen too much? *sigh* -
i like this, up until this part:
"A penny falls out-what is happening?
The flow continues
Who dares to rob the bank?"
i sort of think it ruins the flow, because you did have a nice one besides that bit.
anyway, that's just my opinion. ^_^ keep posting.
~Amber -
a strong poem, your heart opens to love although you want it to stay shut, i struggle to keep away from true emotion but from time to time it happens anyways. i fall... and get hurt. great write.
kelvin -
nah not bad... has depth and emotion, and you wrote it well. It has a standoffish quality and it fits.
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Kind of bad now that I re-read it.
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