A cool white mist envelops
The dim frostbitten morning,
As a soft wind flows gently
Through grass kissed by a sweet dew
Making a faint melody.
Sunlight dances on the fog,
Streaming down from the heavens
In ribbons of shining gold,
Playing over flower blooms
Spotted with remnants of rain.
Birds serenade mother earth,
Singing of her eternal grace
And greeting the bright new dawn
Derived in her waking soul
On this morn, the dawn of spring.
Author notes
Lilly O'Dell aka TwistedBloodyLilly
In a list
A contest entry
- AP Talent Contest #3 by PoeticSpirit79.
300 points, ended October 15, 2006, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Spring In The Winter by Kari.
575 points, ended February 4, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Favorites by Sam-a-nantha.
825 points, ended February 5, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Nature and Imagery by Dageek2.
350 points, ended August 26, 2007, 27 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this is a very nice stroll through the seasons, very well done. it is however very hard to read without highlighting or hiding the background
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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wow...such vibrant and vivid images that would surely stay in my mind for a long time...your poem was so elegant like the mornings of the spring...good luck in the contest...
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Great job on your entry ~ The imagery used is awesome. One of the first signs is Frostbitten morning~ I did enjoy this write~
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Perfect imagery, simply flawless. This is such an amazing piece, it is a lovely cage of spring, this is so wonderful. Great work!
Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you!
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Absolutely beautiful. Your imagery is outstanding. I love it!
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Wow. This is SO good. This is exactly how I would imagine a morning after a rainstorm. I love the picture too, its really pretty. REALLY good job and good luck in the contest!
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Thank you so much for the silver. It's my second silver for this poem so that's great. Thank you, as well, for the flattering comment you added. Best of luck in the future and thanks again.
Lady Lilly
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thank you!
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beautifully written! i loved this piece! please put your name in the authors notes or write anonymous
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I HATE HAVING TO HIGHLIGHT TEXT SO I CAN READ IT PLEASE ADAPT TEXT COLOUR SO EVERYONE CAN READ IT. very good poem, creates such a powerful vision in such a concise manner, well done, best wishes to u.
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What a great flow that this poem has..I really enjoyed it. That graphic looks sooo real. The best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari -
Wow, this is a really fantastic poem. I was definitely feeling it as I read. The picture just helped so much, too. I love your word choice throughout the poem, I don't think it could be better. Not only that, you found a great way to use the words and this poem is amazing. I absolutely love it. Thanks so much for entering the contest.
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Thank you! I'm so glad that I got a trophy!
I can't wait until the next contest and thank you very much for all your kind words. Good luck with the next contest and I'll see you there. 
Peaceful Wishes and Bloody Dreams, ~Lilly~
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Congratulations with this beautiful piece! It is almost winter here and I am already longing for days like you describe. Wonderful imagery and language. Best wishes in the next round.
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Simply stunning. You did a wonderful job! Your vocabulary is amazing. Congrats on the silver! You are automatically moved and invited to APTC #4! Great job! See you there!! ~ Kerri
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I absolutely love the visual here in this piece. The sense of feeling and imagery that you left here is impeccable! Thank you for entering our contest, and good luck!!
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this is a beautiful poem! i love all the imagery! i love how the voice is more forlourn and not too personal, just observing beauty. nice write!!
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Cheery and Warm
i wish it was spring and not this cursed autumn falling of summer!
great poem by the way.
-cheers
Edited on Oct 07, 11:08 p.m. because 'like life,i am full of mistakes'. -
Wow, this is very good!
I am glad someone did something from my title section. Jay will be very pleased with this, too! It has great imagery, great vision... and I am so glad you entered. Thanks for entering our contest, good luck!!
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