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Vase Resurrect

In Response to
"A Better Resurrection" By Sylvia Plath 



O poor felled vase,
how miserable you are!
Your life-water spilt,
your deathly petals' wilt,
the crack along your porcelain face
is but a smiling demonic scar!

Upright yourself this instant,
for your dregs of sorrow leak!
Fight and rage against the wind
that knocked you over, his attacks rescind!
Do you settle for an end rampant,
or defy exposing your soul weak?




Author notes

Object Personified: Vase

I used a vase as metaphor. I personified it as being beautiful, but fragile. I challenged it to better itself. I hope I fit the requirements of your contest, dear judge. If not, I'll remove this poem.




This is what I would have to say to the persona in the poem. The poem replied to above is my favorite poem by my favorite poetess. It is inspiring because it challenges one to be more, despite their conflicting circumstances. If I could say something to the persona speaking in this poem, this is what I would say.
Written October 6th, 2006

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  • BellaD
    July 15, 2008
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    Beautifully written and some powerful imagery. "the crack along your porcelain face
    is but a smiling demonic scar!"
    I particularly like the first stanza.
    Just my opinion, but the second stanza did not read as smoothly; maybe it is the last two lines that seem a bit awkward(?). Overall, a very lovely poem. Thank you for entering.


  • pattyann4500
    June 22, 2008

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    How beautifully you write, and I believe Sylvia would have been proud. Thank you so much for your entry in my contest. Patricia


  • leander Moderators member
    February 7, 2008

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    I really like the metaphors you have used within the lines of this poem, as well as the imagery that goes with them

    Really great visual with the crack in the vase, like a smiling demong

    Keep it up!
    Leander

  • Nicole Hanna
    November 26, 2006

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    eegads, the imagery of a smiling demon associated with a crack is going to haunt me every single time I see a crack in something now. lol. Very powerful stuff indeed, and I have to say a fitting tribute to the plath quote at the opening of your poem. Your piece was short, but definitely effective and well displayed. Nicely done.


  • Pink Absinthe
    November 26, 2006

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    Wow! Firstly, Plath is one of my favourite poets also, so this poem instinctivly stirs me to comment! Secondly, I love the language...if I were to describe it I would have to say it's Plath if she were English!
    I love the imagery in this and how the poem speaks not to a character but to an unknown person, which makes it easy to relate if the author is speaking to us!
    Great, very deservant, write well done!


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 31, 2006
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    Very beautiful work. A true tribute to Plaith herself. So many brillant people are and were so deeply troubled.
    Wonderfully said, the word usage is outstanding.


  • white stone
    October 11, 2006
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    I, too, love Plaith. I believe the "Persona" to whom you speak is Plaith her self. Do you?

    Very troubled, that poor brilliant girl-woman.

    "the crack along your porcelain face
    is but a smiling demonic scar!"

    This was my favorite part, though I enjoyed it's entirety.

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