Astounding
utterly confounding
I can Love you so unconsciously
My good Friends all think I have bats in my belfry
but I know that it's because I love you fully
Lets make wild passionate love tonight
make our bodies ignite
till daylight
Form: Trois-Par-Huit
By Mrjunkman
© 2006 Mrjunkman (All rights reserved)
Author notes
"evil angels are the best kind"
Griswold
Trois-par-Huit
The Trois-par-Huit was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.
Trois-par-Huit (Three-by-Eight or Octa-Tri for short), a poem containing three stanzas of 3, 3
and 2 lines OR 3, 2 and 3 lines: 8 lines total with a syllable count of 3, 6, 9, 12, 12, 9, 6, 3.
The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line is the title of the poem and summarizes
the meaning of the poem. *Note: These poems are to appear center aligned.
Written October 6th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Forms/Dirty Pretty by the evil angel.
400 points, ended May 10, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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seductively simple yet passionate;
"make our bodies ignite
till daylight" --> now what red blooded woman could resist an invitation like that
I like that though it isn't overly erotic, it is tender and you give pure emotions not just sex
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Superb Plus
A very fine write, indeed. And more risque, than adult.
You might like to read my Risque Series, which are quite different, some humorous and some serious. Just go to my list on my title page and click on Risque.
Again, well done.
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Wow. This is quite sensual, isn't it? I've never been too big a fan of this sort of stuff, but this is portrayed in a way that I actually like and that is a feat almost impossible to achieve. This is so brilliantly put in so few words it leaves me dumbfounded. Now as for your form, I'm deciding not to follow it. I would spend all of my time focusing on the syllable count and rhyme that I wouldn't be able to really paint something beautiful like this. So I'm not looking into this form, but this poem is beautiful and you can clearly work with it unlike me.
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Thank you for following the rules. Will comment on the actual poem later.
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