Roses are red,
Satan is too,
Violets are violet,
NOT FUCKING BLUE.
But our roses are lost,
messed up is my head,
the violets have dried,
and my spirit is dead.
The girl I once loved,
the girl I once knew,
Has broken my life,
and my will for it too...
Author notes
It started out cheesy, but i think the first part is quite original 
The rest... just the same as my last poem... why try to make it good if nothing ever works out?
Written October 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- A Good Old Poem, from younger years by Violinstrings.
650 points, ended November 15, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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it is good
yes it is original
it uses language from a young writer
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this is great. i loved the start!
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tnx for the comment all three of you
and btw soolmeetje, by standing by my side, you help me more than you can ever imagine... the only fear I had when losing her was being alone... But now I know that I still have friends, and I can feel I'm coming out stronger than I thought I could be...
Again, all of you helped me out... Even after my relapse, even though you guys 'told me so', you still don't turn your backs to me. I've known all of you for so long, and you've never let me down. You guys are the friends who I will always remember, even when I'm 80 and senile... WTF? I'll never live to see 80... But yeah
You get my drift...
Grtzzz. -
beautifull write, but as i said before...
QUIT IT
let go and write about something else
grtz bro
SeRnY -
Nice write, keep it up !
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very nice write.. like the other ones.
I know this is from deep down in your heart. and I'm sorry I can't help you but I will stand by your side, together we had a past and together we will make a futher.
greetz
soolmeet
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