I need more affection than you know.
I know I may seem cold and emotionless
While you cry over children you have never met.
I sit here and talk to you, never knowing the love I need.
I need more affection than you know.
Though I sit here and pretend I don't need you,
I really need your love and hugs, your soothing voice.
Jealous eyes wander over the happy faces, longing to be happy.
I need more affection than you know.
Before my heart turns cold and completely tunes out the world.
Before the tears stop flowing forever.
Before you leave my life for good.
Even if you stare at me while I quietly read,
Trying to drown out the screaming of the voices in my head.
Pretending not to need the love you have to offer.
I really need more affection than you know.
Author notes
love happens once in a lifetime. the difference lies in how many time you're willing to live in the time that you're alive. When I was in fourth grade, my uncle died. Because I was so young, it really effected me. It made me really cold hearted, and I began to push people away. I still push people away. It kills me, but I do it. I've learned to turn off my emotions, and I think it's made me a worse person because eventually those emotions pour out and I begin to treat my friends and others like crap. I never realized the effect that death can have on a person until other people started calling me a bitch.
Written October 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- oogaboogashoogalooga...this is serious by Starlette.
525 points, ended December 7, 2007, 150 entries
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Aww this is so sad... I hate feeling like this... but you know what? It's up to you... coz lately I've gotten better... on my own... you simply change your perspective and everything changes too... I don't know how to tell you anymore... you've got to discover appreciation for yourself and then you can be happier... I'm only trying everyday... but it takes more effort than just thinking... you actually have to change you ways and life patterns too! Aight, good luck with everything and hope you don't think I'm preaching because all I'm trying to do is simply share as I've been there... though never did admit!
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I know what it's like to loose a close family member like that (I was actually the same age, it appears) and also how amazing it is to see how you start to treat other people. I like how your poem tells how you want to be paid attention to, but the actions in it show the opposite. I'm not sure that came out in the correct words, but I hope you know what I mean.
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You must have been very close to your uncle. Sounds like you do need to let people love you but, first you have to love yourself. I read it in your poem the want within you. Nice write, I wish you good luck in the contest.
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"I need more affection than you know.
Though I sit here and pretend I don't need you,
I really need your love and hugs, your soothing voice.
Jealous eyes wander over the happy faces, longing to be happy.
I need more affection than you know.
Before my heart turns cold and completely tunes out the world.
Before the tears stop flowing forever.
Before you leave my life for good."
this is a VERY touching poem
i know what it's like to be a cold
hearted person
but not due to death of family or a friend
but i've been through soooo much
for just being 16
and it sucks that im 16 and it's this bad
and im scared of what it'll be like
when im older :/
great job!
-dax
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i know the feeling of someone dying and the effect it has, in fact, my uncle died about a year and a half ago and it still eats me up inside. He was one of the few people in my family that ever made time for me and it ate me up inside to know that he wsa gone. i wrote a lot of poetry around that time in my life and it was some of the most emotional stuff i've ever written. this worked for me, it might not for you, but try just sitting down and writing without a direction. talk to your unvle through poetry, or to your friends, to god, whatever. it's easier and much more realistic poetry to write without a subject and instead to write as though thinking or talking. good work btw, that was just me babbling. can't wait to read the other one by you.
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Awww this is really good, i like the wording and i like the repitition of..
"I need more affection than you know"
great write, keep it up.
xXx Sian xxx
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