He floats on clouds for miles, when Mystery winks and smiles, and buoyant there remains while time stands still. He's yet to touch her face, but lives with this one grace: the hope that one sweet day, perhaps he will. Were she to e'er come near, his silent, smothering fear is that he will not win or woo her with his wiles. All wiling is forgotten and his charms reduced to rotten, as compared to when Mystery winks and smiles. Then, one day, she "only" smiled, his refinement rendered wild by the silent siren's beckon of her stare. For an instant, in the midst of this mist of his reality, there was bliss. Inviting irises in eyes had brought it there.
Once, awakened with a horror, like a lost-at-sea explorer, feeling like he'd been dreaming that he drowned. Upon straining to remember, memories fading like embers, finally found he'd merely dreamed that she had frowned. But, he woke with her against him. Graceful, gracious arms enfenced him. Words of honey, voice of velvet pierced his fear. In her smile, he found his peace. With a wink, all fears released. In her moments, he found the rest of many years. Then, her grin grabbed him again. She said, "Kiss me on the chin.", for she'd known his want to kiss her for a while. Nervously, he leaned in toward her, and his face fallen fully forward...she bowed down to bless, and let him kiss her smile.
When he saw her looking sad, the pain near drove him mad, for he couldn't stand the thought of her not pleased. But she brightened when he came within her visions sullen frame, and a touch was all it took to bring her ease. In this touch, the words were clear, though no voice did her ear hear--words of tender, tactile tact and texture true. Stroking temple, cheek and throat, gentle fingers did promote a perspective that her eyes could hardly view. So she closed her right eye first, a winking moment through her thirst to taste the words that she had felt in his caress. Then, she closed the left, and saw and felt and knew as though t'were law, that he loved her all the more and nonetheless.
But his was not a love that asked for any statement, any task, or any favor from her in return. It only asked that she accept that which his heart had long since kept secret, and be kind if t'was to be spurned. Then, wordless did she say, "I'll spurn you not, this day. We are as two harbored, not sailing, ships; not passing in poor weather, but anchored down together." With mouth, in silence, without sound or voice, spoke she, Mystery, her choice in these words to he, in a wistful wink, and by returning his touch, but just barely, though unbearably too much, to free, and kissed him back through partly parted, softly smiling lips.
Author notes
I'm aware that this uses the same rhyme scheme as "Sunboy And Moongirl". If that makes me seem limited in my creativity, so be it. Sorry. I think that's all of the qualifiers and lame excuses I need for this. So, having said that, I hope you can just accept this piece in it's raw form for what it is...an inspired writing.
I imagine this couple that can communicate with or without words, whose Love for each other is selfless, and known to each in a way that is at times beyond the limits of spoken language. Speaking of language, I sometimes whilst writing invent words that aren't necessarily in the dictionary, "words" like "wilings" and "enfenced" (BTW, you should bookmark www.m-w.com; it will make your online writing life a lot easier.), but I try to use them in a way that makes their intended meaning very clear. Purists, please forgive me.
My hope is that anyone at all can find some pleasure in reading this piece, but if any Christians in particular want to think of it as a courting piece for the one you will eventually marry (or have already married), it goes very well with Eph. 5:31-32.
Whoever You Are, God Bless You! ^_^
Sincerely, Marvin J. †
ps-22NOV2006 UPDATE! I'm posting a direct link to the YouTube reading of this piece, it's at--
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aajpeIwYZhg
GBU, MDJ.
Written April 19th, 2003
B l a c k J a P a n t h e r
SPADES
1. Show me what love is
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What did you think
Comments
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nicely done
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Thanks, very much.
I wanted to enter it in your contest, but it's already maxed out. Have a super holiday weekend.
Sincerely,
Marvin J. †
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Brillantly Seductive
Sensual delight as the story unfolds , tender kisses of one who is adored.
A true Golden Write.
Well Done!!!
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Tnx! (*^_^*)
This is my wish and hope for all who long for romantic Love and intimacy. I appreciate your understanding and affirmation. Gobs and gobs of Thanks to You. <3, M. †
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GREAT
You did a fantastic job. i got alittle lost a few times but i picked right back up on it! I figured out it is a read out loud poem half way through! best of luck in my contest! -
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I appreciate your comment.
Thanks for leaving your honest appraisal.
Yes, almost all of my pieces are much more meant to be heard than seen.
GBU,
MDJ. †
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This is a beautiful read, enjoyed it! Thank you for entering my contest
Best wishes
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wow this is great.
It's a bit long for my liking, but its nice. Kept my attention unlike most long-er poems.
thanks for taking the time to enter.
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Thanks again...
...for your time and attention, and your complimentary comment. GBU, MDJ. †
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ok this is a lovely poem but like some of the other comments to it i believe it has to be split in some wayy :/
and i find the fact that its been in like every contest on here a bit off putting :/
Sorry about that :/
O well you never know
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I appreciate your honesty
And apologize for putting you off. I don't write very much, so the few I do write get entered a lot--especially my favorites. No harm, no foul. Thanks for your thoughts.
GBU, MDJ. †
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While I think this is a beautiful piece (and it is!), I have to agree that it needs stanzas...aligned in some way
Also, I'm not sure this really sums up the song prompt...
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I didn't read it all because I found it tiresome reading without stanzas. The rhyming and meter sound good, but it really needs some structure. I'd like to see it in stanza form, because it seems like a really good piece. I know you can make this better, so go for it!
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So I'm staring at my keyboard, trying to thing of a synonym for "wow" and anything that's more filling than "speechless".
I absolutely LOVED this. I'm bookmarking it This was really fun to read. I thought at the beginning that I was going to struggle with the flow and beat of it as I whispered it to myself, but the more I read the more I realized that this form is perfect for it. If you broke up the stanzas any more, it would probably be like 300 lines and I wouldn't have read it 
later when I re-read this I will go back and look for any made up words because if I read them the first time, I must have thought they were real because they blended in really well. The title is outstanding and I love how the first stanza emphasizes how much the man loved the lady's smile, it was soooo adorable. I am so glad to have come across a poem with this style, rhyme, and topic. I'm pretty sure my mouth was agape and my eyes were widened the whole time I was reading this because your words astonished me 
Good luck in the contests 
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Thank You, NTS...
...for you kind words of praise and encouragement. Based on your understanding of this piece and your screen name, I thought you might like a very similar work who's subtitle is "Sunboy and Moongirl".
At first I thought "Not-The-Sun" might mean "The Moon", but see in your profile that that is way off base. (*^_^*)
Nevertheless, it's in a similar style to--and with a similar theme as--"...Mystery...", so you still might like it (even if it bears no relevance to your name).
Here's the link:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2269282
Thanks Very Much, and God Bless You Forever.
Sincerely,
Marvin J. †
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hm this is pretty good... it was kind of hard for me to read for a moment, then my friend was nice enough to turn a light on for me. lol. Thank you for entering my contest, keep up your great work! Congrats on the honorable mentions.
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Thank you for your response!
Was it hard to read because of the colors or because (as so many people seem to want) it wasn't in stanzas? And when you say your friend turned a light on for you, do you mean a mental light? I'd really like to understand how the piece went from being hard to read to you actually being able to enjoy it.
BTW, You have a beautiful family. (*^_^*)
God Bless You Forever!
Sincerely,
Marvin J. †
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Your prose poem is delightful. I agree with Darianna. However, we both know this is not verse but prose because you have set it out so. It therefore cannot be Free Verse.
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I have fallen in love with this piece! It's so airily romantic! It sweeps you along in its arms and renders you pretty much captive in it's charms! I love the rhyming throughout...it adds to whe whole piece. None of it sounded forced or anything like that. As for the invented words...I didn't even notice! I applaud you! xxx
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Very nice write...
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Definately filled with rich imagery!! Gives so much emotion to the reader! I clicked on your link and I have to say that listening to you read it aloud definately adds that rich romantic feel to it. You have a wonderful voice. Thank you for your entry (and I didnt think you looked "jabberwonky" at all)
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Thanks for the great imagery! Good luck in my contest!
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This was very descriptive with nice use of rhyme. Emotion used well with your words.
Thank you for entering.
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a nice long story added to the tenderness of the kiss not once but twicely given.
best of luck to you.
Riftkin
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such a sweet poem...great use of words!! thanks heaps for entering its been a joy to read
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Thank you so much for entering this wonderful prose into my contest.
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I want to comment before I read other comments as I don't want them to detract from my first impressions....( hope that makes sense ) so, I found this to be creative just in the over all theme. It reads incredibly well and the rymthing is not forced but in my opinion tactfully fits. I found myself smiling through out. You paint a lovely little place that we all want to be. I do want to say, while constructive critizism helps us grow and stretch who cares in the grand scheme of things? We write to appease first ourselves......I personally think you did a grand job! Sorry my comment is so long.....
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Wow! I'm impressed! I chose to listen to you reading the text, while I followed the lines. You truly speak with passion and understanding of every word, and I loved that. Your text is so tender, it really got to me. I loved this one
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Thank you, very much...
...for your kind comment, and for the hm. God Bless You And Your Art.
†'s <3, MDJ.
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Reminds me a little of a modern Shakespeare with Edgar Poe speed; remember the poem "The Bells" by Poe, and how it pulled you along.
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i liked it, you didn't need justifications.
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Nice poem. a very different writing. thank you for entering.
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I truly do accept this for what it is. It is quite and inspiring write. Simply gorgeous. It is very different than what I am used to seeing. Unique and creative. Heartfelt and bold in its expression. Thank you for gracing my contest with this.
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this is pretty good, it might look better,
if it was set out in paragraphs or in poetic terms is stanza's,
like:
He floats on clouds for miles, when Mystery winks and smiles,
and buoyant there remains while time stands still.
He's yet to touch her face, but lives with this one grace:
the hope that one sweet day, perhaps he will.
Were she to e'er come near, his silent,
smothering fear is that he will not win or woo her with his wiles.
i love your wording despite the slight disorganisation,
great poem overall,
all my love, best of luck in the contest,
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Awe thanks for directing me to this one, i truly liked it, and im sorry u didnt get to answer many of them sucked, and ive become not to fond of prewrites lol noone entered a real poem....Thanks again, and keep penning!!!!
Emily
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