I heard the bullet
as it filled the chamber,
the click echoing in the eerie silence.
My breath caught
and I tried to get between him and the gun.
"Shoot me, not him"
then over my shoulder
a single plea "David, run!"
my voice was feeble
as I got the man to focus on me.
"Shoot me! Please, don't hurt him!"
I felt David's arms wrap around my waist,
felt him pull me closer
"No Danielle, you run"
Then he shoved me to the left
and I screamed as the bullet exploded from the barrel
it was all so slow as I jumped
and the force of impact pushed me into David
"David...run...please"
I feel his arms wrap around me
and another report goes off and vaguely familiar
"please hang on"
I touch his face
the soft skin and the tears that roll down his cheeks
"please"
I feel myself fading
my thoughts become hazy
I'm fading faster as I whisper
"I love you...don't cry"
David falls to his knees
"Danielle, no, oh God please,
I love you, don't leave me"
he cradles my body to his
and his tears run into my hair
as his sobs shred through him
tearing him in two
"Danielle...I love you!"
his blonde hair falls striking against my black
as he cradles me
his tears racing down his cheeks
"Danielle" it's a whisper now
I'm fading even faster, I can't hold on much longer
"David, I love you...don't cry"
my eyes close and my hand falls from his chest
I'm gone, an empty shell
and he continues rocking me
"No Danielle, please!"
his tears fall harder
“DANIELLE!! Why?! Oh God!”
“Shoot me not him” whispers down the hall…
simply a memory,
a nightmare…
“Shoot me, please don’t hurt him”
softer now…
“Shoot me…not him…”
Author notes
Written October 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- The effects of bullying by trace3grls.
300 points, ended October 16, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #4 Losing a loved one. by xox-lankan-xox.
500 points, ended March 13, 131 entries
Honorable mention
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Wow, this was just wow. It was so sad, I had tears in my eyes, your an amazing poet and you really know how to make people want to cry. This was just wow, I can't stop saying that because 'wow' seems to be the best word to describe this poem other than amazing, wonderful spectacular and just wow
Thanks so much for entering this piece into my contest and good luck. I will keep this poem in mind as I find the winners. Thanks very much and once again good luck! I will be around to read and comment more on your poems so until then take care!
Bye!
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i liked it i like how towards the end i felt myself speed up a little as time for Dannielle was running out. i acctually can't find fault.. maybee the next one lol
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So touching,just so sad,It will just goes inside of you,I can see it clearly,it will just touch you,the power of love,This is just so amazing,A very sad nightmare
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