I’m feeling so angry
My eyes have gone black
My body is transforming
I’ve gone completely red
I’m growing horns on my head
I don’t feel human anymore
My nails turn into claws
The veins in my body come out
The demon inside has decided to come out
Close ones in tears and feel so ashamed
Of what I have actually became
I spill the blood from the ones I hate
I can’t remember anyone
Not even my mates
Wings come out of my back
People hear the pain and also the cracks
That I get in my body when the transformation is complete
I fly away so no one can see
What I am what I have done
Even I can’t believe what I have become
I’ve lost my feelings and my memories
Then I see more of my enemies
I’m going raise hell
I’m going to make them bleed
After all that killing
I collapse
I wake up the next day
My clothes are ripped
I see blood everywhere
I look at my family
With their eyes wide open
Some are in tears and some are shocked
The one questioned I asked them was
“So anything happen last night?”
Author notes
Written October 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- I want emotion! by TwiztidMaggot.
600 points, ended December 20, 2007, 31 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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This is an excellent piece. I love the journey that you take into the night only to awake the next morning having no memory of the events prior. It seems as though it is an emotional escape to do what one would like to do as another so as to not bring repercussions upon them selves. It is truly a dive into the emotional subconscious of everyones secret wants of revenge and/or justification. The only flaw that I could find was in this line...
"I’m going raise hell"
Please correct me if I am mistaken for I do not wish to misinterpret your writing but do you mean to say- 'I'm going (to) raise hell' or 'I'm going, raise hell'? other than this small error it is a fantastic piece and I wish you luck in the contest.
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wow. I loved this one. I loved the imagery you put into writing this!!! It's wonderful! I love it! keep up your great work! Thanks for your entry. best of luck!
Crimson -
Very descriptive poem. i like the ending a little bit comedy.
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