You were the one for me,
My close and very best friend.
I knew you made me whole,
But you were just a prescription.
You made me happy,
And sad at the same time.
You made my mind clearer,
Yet fuzzier with each of my rhymes.
You were there for me,
In the good and in the bad.
I loved to remember,
All the good times we once had.
But now I am on a better path.
I can soon escape your deadly wrath.
I will soon be free from you,
And there’s nothing you can do.
[That is, after I finish this one last bottle.]
Author notes
Kind of based on my moms prescription drug addiction.
Written October 5th, 2006
A contest entry
- 203;::A.n.o.r.e.x.i.c...S.u.i.c.i.d.a.l...D.r.u.g...A.d.d.i.c.t:: by Bullet To The Head.
300 points, ended October 25, 2006, 85 entries
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I'm not sure if you wrote this about you, but if you did, or for ever recovered, good for you! Job well done with the writing. I really like your work and style. I have been some rough things in my life as well such as rapes, and everything that goes along with rapes such as cutting, suicide...all that stuff and I feel like i can relate with your poems. Thanks for that.
tabitha -
I'm not sure if you wrote this about you, but if you did, or for ever recovered, good for you! Job well done with the writing. I really like your work and style. I have been some rough things in my life as well such as rapes, and everything that goes along with rapes such as cutting, suicide...all that stuff and I feel like i can relate with your poems. Thanks for that.
tabitha -
wow, this is good and a very good impression of how the addiction gets to be consuming,
"You were the one for me,
My close and very best friend.
I knew you made me whole,
But you were just a prescription.
You made me happy,
And sad at the same time.
You made my mind clearer,
Yet fuzzier with each of my rhymes."
good job!
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a very good write. liked the flow and rhyming...i really like the ending...how you switched it around (sneakishly) <--i think that word may be made up
i love reading peoms wirth a twist or self deception as you conveyed here with drinking before you move on...
thats addiction and i can feel ya on this one.
thanks for sharing this and taking the time to enter my contest!
take care and good luck,
♥ Lynn -
this is nice, its short and to the point and is just overall nice to read, it's written well and has a good flow and i love the topic, you express how important it was to you and how it was a prt of your life so well. great job.
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hey...dont let atheist bring you down...ive read his poem and its...a big blah,,nothing...love your poem keep it up dont let those cussers make you stop..good day to you.
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Awesome write...very sad but great. "But now I am on a better path. I can soon escape your deadly wrath." is my favorite lines. Keep it up, thanks for sharing<3
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full of emotions.. dark.. and has a nice flow.. the ending is just great..
very nice write..
keep it up!
~rana~ -
nice.....very well written....full of timeless painful beauty great job
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the last line did it for me... amazing poem
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love the last line to it, as soon as i finish this last bottle. very good touch.
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This piece is full of detail and emotion! I loved the rhyming and it hurts to see the pain going through you and the character of this piece. You can take this poem to have many meanings, but all of the meanings have people that can relate. I felt related to certain parts of this piece. I wish all to be well, keep up the great work, and thanks for sharing!
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You took the reader on the trip with you. Allowing the reader to experience what you were feeling. Very nice write.
Good luck and God bless.
Rose -
this is really good. i love how i can kinda see what you are talking about it.. the imagery i suppose.
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Nice job. It's very sad, and I love the end
[That is, after I finish this last bottle]. Good job!
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my mom died from a prescription drug overdose in 2004, but thank you for your kind words.
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Wow this is amazing. A nice flow of feelings and emotions put into this peice. Drug addiction is bad and I pray your mother may be able to rid of this once and for all. She has to be around for her grandkids too (unless she already has some then at least for when they grow up) Great work. Best of luck in the contest. All4hugs
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This was a great piece, well written, rythmn and flow was nearly perfect. Thanks for sharing best of luck.
VSutton -
I love this piece you did a good job of getting all of your emotions out on this piece. This was written very well. I wish you luck in the contest!!!
--Trixie
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i really like this one.. i love the end line. its amazing. good luck in the contest, check out my entry please
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i like how you tell the storyof how good you felt but then moved on from the bad. interesting piece. good luck please read this in return allpoetry.com/Poem/2270077
Edited on Oct 08, 5:38 p.m. because 'typos stink'.
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