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One Man, My Father

Missing image

One man stands alone

With the world by his side

Harmony plays a part in his crowded life

Tuning machines, building bridges, creating beauty

Brings life to one man


One man rests alone

With love at his feet

Synchrony states worth to this hostile heart

Turning corners, shaving backs, talking defensive

Brings waste to one man


This man is never alone

With our family in his heart

Satisfactory designs speak multitudes of his silent soul

Trusting forgiveness, lasting friendships, suffering fools

Brings love to my father

Author notes

Written on 5th October 2006 at 23:32 GMT

I see beauty in this picture, because it is my daddy. He's a very special man, in that he would do anything for his family. Like my mammy says, he would work the shirt off his back for us. When I went home last weekend, I spent about 90% of my time with him, because the rest went on holiday. We don't talk much, but that's just cos we don't need to.

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  • Black JaPanther
    October 23

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    A fully fleshed out tribute

    to your Dad. Not overly unrealistic in it's idealism or sentimentality. Yet, it truly and still beams love and admiration. Thoughtful, reflective, comforting, retaining the rough edges that a Father must retain. Thanks for sharing this heartfelt work. It was a pleasure to read.
    GBU,
    MDJ. †


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 18

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    This was a very beautifully written piece of work you have here. I enjoyed reading this. It had a good flow too it as well. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.


  • Kain
    January 16, 2007

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    Are you sure that 'hostile' is the right word to use? It seems quite strong for what you were attempting to show. I would consider revising this. And then show it to your father.

    Yours,
    Kain


  • NeanderthalMan
    November 20, 2006
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    Wonderful Poetic Art!

    It was an honor to read this poem about your father, it is clear that he means alot to you. The poem had excellent flow and the emotional imagery painited an excellent image of your heart..


  • Ninth-Poet
    November 19, 2006

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    beautifully written

    The selected picture reflects greatly the words off your poems and the passion you feel for this person really shows through here

    -Nicely penned!

    -Keep the ink flowing!
    and good luck in the contest!!

    -Dave


  • keeyley
    November 17, 2006
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    wow so magistic and uniqe!speachless keep it up!


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    October 14, 2006
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    Awww, that's so great, Laura, and neat to have that relationship with your dad, because so many don't seem to have that. Family is so important to me. And, I like the poem too. I read it three or four times, just for the sounds.

    Paul


  • nell
    October 6, 2006
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    first of all I have to say I absolutely love the picture! Its very interesting, expressive and artistic! you poem speaks a beautiful tribute to your father with strong images and emotions.

    Thanks for entering
    Have a lovely day
    Shanelle

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