Laying next to her, my heart skips a beat;
A beauty like her, I've always wished to meet.
I could stay like this forever, her breasts next to mine;
Breathing as one, our legs intertwined.
Her eyes so bright; she lights up my world.
From here on out, we'll only go forward.
It's her presence that helps me breathe;
Her sheltering love is all that I need.
Just hold me close; never let go;
In my dreams we're never apart.
No matter what, just always know
You'll forever remain in my heart.
Author notes
option 1
A contest entry
- Lesbian Erotica -- There Needs To Be More!!! by Sesheta.
700 points, ended September 14, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options For Love by lesbian-in-love.
475 points, ended October 30, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Amazing
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This is what i have with my girlfriend Erin she is so amazing she is my everything
~good write keep it up~
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sooo sweet!, makes me think of my last relationship with a female...makes me cry sometimes, to think that i lost her to a guy...still i want exactly THIS imagery to be among others i would wis to relive with her!
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I love it. I love it. Wow. That my friend is just excellent. It is just so magically. The words just flow off the page. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Wow
Just hold me close; never let go;
In my dreams we're never apart.
No matter what, just always know
You'll forever remain in my heart
These lines here are just so amazing. Thanks for the read and keep on writing
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So pretty! such a lovely love poem. Most guys don't see this part of lesbians that they really love each other. Maybe cause they are too busy trying to view them screwing each other. But nothing is more lovely then Love itself. Great work.
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niiice bbyface.. im loveing this muchly!
xoxo
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wow i love it. that is beautiful...i hope you and the person u wrote it about are still feeling this way. congrats on finding that special someone
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tanx 4 enterin
this is a great poem!!!! ull find out if u won or not!!!
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This is beautiful!
It is simple and yet laced with elegance.
Only critique I have [for future poems] is that your rhyme scheme was off for the last stanza, so I would recommend having a pattern for next time...
Great work!!
Makes me wish that I had the courage to act upon my sexuality..
~WU
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This was a sweet poem for the love the contest was looking for. You gave it an almost romantic appeal to a point and it was very soft. I enjoyed this poem a lot. I think the 2nd stanza could be changed slightly to make the ryhme scheme flow easier but either way it was well done.
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Awwe thank you! I saw your contest and right away I knew I wanted to give it a shot. Thanks again and I love your username, by the way. <3
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this is so sweet, it makes me friggin jelous. your lucky to have someone to love you and viceversa. and youve written about it quite beautifuly! thank you for entering our contest! and good luck!
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this is so sweet, so tender and the love flows
through each line. This has a feeling of satisfaction
of being right where you want to be. good job
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Great great poem!
I can relate muchly
I loved the lines
Her sheltering love is all that I need.
Just hold me close; never let go;
I thought they were great
x~Ree~x
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Thanks so much! <33
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Awww, awesome awesome write. i love the line..
"It's her presence that helps me breathe"
keep writting.
xXx Sian xXx
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