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A bucket full of surrealism.


With a bucket full of surrealism
I meandered toward the brook.
To fetch some water, for my daisy,
which had a polypetalous look!

My surroundings were extraneous
and somewhat out of sync. 
But I sforzando my way on the path
For my afflatus daisy, needed a drink.

But I was feeling xenon and bloated
and needed to hurry with my task.
Or my daisy’s ontology roots,
would be needing an oxygen mask.

Hemistich, I don’t know what to say,
I’ve found her altered upon my return.
A metempsychosis transformation;
my daisy is now a fern!





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Written October 5th, 2006

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  • FifthDove
    October 6, 2006
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    Thank you so so SO much


  • maa gold member
    October 6, 2006
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    dearest dovie,
    I honestly thought that it was absolutely impossible to use all of these weird words and create something graceful ...
    well, I was wrong
    you did a masterful job with your little daisy transforming her into a fern ...
    bravo, cindy.

    maa


  • FifthDove
    October 5, 2006
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    Thank you very much

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    October 5, 2006
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    well this answered my question, wasn't sure if we was suppose to pick some words or use them all, guess we are to use them all ... don't know that I can top this one though, you did a great job here...
    good luck in the contest dear
    Suzi


  • queen Moderators member
    October 5, 2006
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    Wow i am impressed i had to go to the contest page to see what the words meant Well done good luck in the contest


  • FifthDove
    October 5, 2006
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  • individuality gold member
    October 5, 2006
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    hehehe i loved the ending here poor daisy. a great use of the words i think and to throw humour into the equation is a bonus in my eyes. thank you for entering your piece and good luck to you - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


    Edited on Oct 05, 1:05 p.m. because ''.


  • FifthDove
    October 5, 2006
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    hehehehe
    Thanks
    It's a "w e i r d" kind of day
    Edited on Oct 05, 12:58 because ''.


  • Smirnoff Ice
    October 5, 2006
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    This is wierd but in a fun kind of way very cleverly written well done to you

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