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A Valentine Day's Surprise

It was February 14, 1966. I was nine years old and already stressed over Valentine's Day. The pressure,  excitement, the likely disappointments all had me squirming in my seat. Throughout the morning, we in Miss Kennedy's 4th grade class felt the tension building in the air. There wasn't one of us who didn't walk a little slower passing by our cardboard idol, decorated in red and white paper with red hearts glued on. Well, maybe not all of us. There was Harvey Boil, but we won't go there right now.

Let's see where was I? Oh, yes the tension and excitement. All female eyes seemed to fix themselves on John Stevens and Jerry Rogers. John Stevens with his wavy blond hair and green eyes and Jerry Rogers with raven black hair and a smile to kill. A girl could hope you know. We watched with our mouths watering while the two of them finally made their red carpet trip to the "box" while we all gave them our best smiles.

 

Then I could almost hear the phantom drum roll reverberate around the room. The words spoken by Miss Kennedy, "Can I have a couple of volunteers to pass out the Valentine day cards?" Mine went up without me realizing until I heard Miss Kennedy pick Harvey Boil and myself to distribute the hot little cards. I could hear the snickers. What did that mean I wondered? The two Valentine rejects given the chance to at least touch the coveted cards before going home empty handed. Was it some omen of what awaited Harvey and me. I got up, suddenly not so exited to open the box figuring Jenny Grant and Cindy Collins would get most of them! But Harvey was already grabbing a pile so I bravely did the same, and like some elementary Joan of Arc, I went to the flames.


Well as expected Jenny and Cindy's desk quickly filled up with the cards and as you probably figured out Jerry and John's also. I peeked over at my desk to see it was still empty and then to the dwindling pile left to hand out and I began to sweat. Then a cry escaped which I turned into a sneeze, when from the corner of my eyes I saw Harvey slap one on my desk. At that moment I felt rescued, no matter who sent it. I couldn't hand out the rest fast enough, so curious to find out. Now we'll get into that.


You see everyone was busy opening their cards, using their pencils and whatever else vaguely resembled a letter opener. I slowly and delicately opened mine while trembling all the time. Being careful not to rip what lay inside as if it were my heart in there. I held onto the card with two fingers and slowly dragged it out. First I looked around to make sure no one was watching me and if the coast was clear. Then I saw Harvey looking my way with a silly grin on his face. At that moment I knew how Napoleon felt at Waterloo. Probably the only thing I related to that part of history since Miss Kennedy taught it to us weeks ago. So as if I was ripping a bandage off quickly to get the pain over as soon as possible, I opened up the card just as fast.


For over a minute confusion was written over my red face. All I saw was To Cindy, Love Jerry! Harvey gave me someone else's Valentine's card! Could it be to save my face? Or just a mistake? Now that he sat empty handed at his desk I felt incredible guilt and remorse! Suddenly Harvey looked a lot better than most days! I saw him turn away as my eyes begged to know what really happened. I stuck the card and envelope into one of my books before anyone had a chance to ask me who it was from. I waited for the bell to ring then ran out of the school as quick as I could.


On my walk home that day, I thought a lot about what Harvey did or what I wanted to believe he did. I also thought a lot about the dirty looks Cindy gave the unsuspecting Jerry the rest of that afternoon and I couldn't help wearing a silly grin. But I have to laugh even harder now and you would too if you read my Valentine cards each year since 1975. Each one reads the same, To Cindy, Love Jerry. And if you haven't gotten it yet, you will as I sign off on this Valentine's day  story as the very blessed and loved Mrs. Harvey Boil.

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  • tears.of.silence
    February 7

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    Awww

    this is so sweet. That boy loved you so much that he couldn't help but give you a card that didn't belong to you and cause a rift between the snobs! I love it. hehehe, I wish someone would have done that for me. I'm not sure if you are the one that sent me an im telling me that you chose a certain option or not, but could I get you to put your option in the notes here. Thanks for entering and the best of luck to you.


  • Ratfink
    February 4
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    Oh my gosh. This was one of the most sweetest short stories I have read. I loved it!


  • artis
    April 17, 2008

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    ahh, the innocence and sweet bliss of those moments when we struggled to identify with the great mystery of love, even at an early age, my love was Terry Levine on a valentines day in sixthe grade, her with dark curly hair and eyes bright with promise and

    she sent me a sweet card that I still have somewhere, but the clash of our families faiths prevented any further hopes as the years rolled on. Funny how God who created such exquisite feelings of love, and the opposite beliefs in God, could cancel out any opportunity to realize it's joy. But I still cherish the sun streaming in through wide windows and making her appear as an angel in my hours of need even so young as we both were. And I wish her only happiness wherever she may be. My best to you and Harvey, you fulfilled a perfect union, from beginning to end by his small acts of kindness shared. Thanks for your beautifukl entry. ~~Artis


  • Candy6
    May 27, 2007
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    wow. this is story is long. your poems are unique to read.


  • IndividualEleven
    May 6, 2007

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    nice story, didn't get the fantasy part, but found the read very well written, great imagery and feelings as well. great job and thanks for entering - Jacen an IndividualEleven.


  • Ryno
    January 8, 2007

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    Interesting and strong, a fantastic diary entry.. which is very original. I like your story telling talent, shown here. Thanks a lot for entering my contest

  • ea silver member
    October 21, 2006
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    I'm a little surprized to find out that our little school in the northeast must have had better manners than most because I surely do recall that Valentines were to be brought in for EVERYONE and my mom, also a teacher, made me invite every kid in the class to my 6th birthday party for the same reason -- this is a cute story but I feel just as bad for Cindy because no matter how popular you are, if the right one doesn't care, it doesn't matter. Thanks for the entry and if you have other material along these lines, perhaps something that isn't summed up from the adult perspective but lets you stay in the moment of childhood, I would be interested in seeing more.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 21, 2006
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    As a teacher, I always tried to think up ways to make sure all the kids got valentines. there is nothing more horrible than watching a hurting child get nothing. I took care of a time-out room for the last half of lunch rbeak. during that time, every kid that came in, for discipline, had to make valentines and sign them from a secret admirer. They ahd to come up with snappy respectful quotes. I had kids begging to come to detention because I brought in every kind of medium possible for making cards. After they were made, I put them away until Valentines Day. Then, as February started, I started dropping them in their Valentine containers ( always different year to year).
    It helped to make sure, kids all got valentines. It added the element of who did it, and it made sure that detention was not dead air time.

    I loved this little story. I am thinking to make up reams of valnetines to take to our little school here to make sure no child is left behind....


  • freespirit51
    October 19, 2006
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    Great work and alot of great promise. If it were broken down into smaller paragraphs and separated a bit it would be easier to read. The idea for this was great but loved the ending. Then to find out it was a dream was a little disappointing.

    Maybe a little more words making it a bit more descriptive would help the imagery and some more punctuation marks might help to make the charaters a little more real.

    As it stands now it feels more like an essay than a story. You need more charater interaction. But as it is now it was a good write. Continue the great penning, you have talent you have yet to tap into.


  • Dyslexia
    October 19, 2006
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    this was wonderfully cute. i loved it. there were a few grammer mistakes but i'm not one to correct them seeing as how i will probably spell something wrong in this comment and it was just some commas but other wise it was writting wonderfully. i felt like i was listening to you tell the story. i could almost see it as if i was there. it made me miss the good 'ol days of elementry...... well once again great job. ohh and you contest is a wonderful idea

  • Rudolf
    October 8, 2006
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    an interesting story ,you caputured alot of the puppy love emotions connected to valentines day.took me back to elementary school so many years ago ,great write ,thanks for sharing,rudolf

  • tears.of.silence
    October 8, 2006
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    You do : f but together and it places a rose in there for you ... excellent story by the way. Excellent. Keep up the great work. Kahy


  • trista gold member
    October 8, 2006
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    Ohhh, this is so sweet! I must admit I was disappointed when I got to the author's notes and saw it was "just a dream". lol I think with minimal tweaking you could easily turn this into a fantastic short story. Also, breaking it into several paragraphs might make it less intimidating for others to read, since a lot of people here don't seem to have the patience for reading longer writes. It would give them a chance to read the opening paragraph thinking if they didn't like it, they could stop reading then. However...I think this is written so well it would pull many hesitant readers all the way to the end. Just an idea.

    I remember Valentine's Day in grade school being exactly like this, especially the decorated boxes. My class was small, so we each had our own box. I remember going over to it every day and picking it up to shake it and see how many cards were in there. And of course always hoping a certain boy had left me a card!

    Best of luck to you in the contest with this and thank you for promoting it, or sadly I would have missed a very enjoyable story.

    All the best,
    ~J.

  • memorymaker
    October 7, 2006
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    Great story! I truly enjoyed reading this! Good luck in the contest! you are a wonderful writer! Thanks for sharing


  • Carly Pop gold member
    October 5, 2006
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    Please don't think I am stupid but I don't know how to place a rose next to quote!


  • Wee Beastie
    October 5, 2006
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    p.s. you need to follow the directions and place a
    and he quote "It was but a dream"


  • Wee Beastie
    October 5, 2006
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    two paws up

    i do enjoy this poem so much
    it made me smile
    hugs and kisses
    ~~Chef W.B.

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