The painful sound of warped intrusion,
starts softly with a squeaking floor.
Still; she lay there, barely breathing,
praying that she’ll hear no more.
Silently, she begs the darkness,
please don’t let tonight be slow.
If he has to wreck my body,
Teddy Bear, please guard my soul.
Author notes
I know it's short, but i didn't really feel it required anything else.
Written October 5th, 2006
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I think you've captured the story of child abuse well in two stanzas. Often children find comfort in a teddy bear because it gives them some sort of comfort. Well written
xx Katy
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Poems like this make me sad and angry, because I understand the emotions in it. And in these few ahort lines, you captured it well.
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awwwwwww this is so cute. yet it's so sad. I hope no man used your body. that would be truely wrong. this is a master piece well done.
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A Must Read!
Awesome! You should be be proud of this piece! In just a few lines you get the story and emotion across... It's sad but unfortunately true that children in this situation can be made feel that the only person to protect them is their teddy bear. Well done and keep up the fantastic work!
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WONDERFUL
WOW!!! POWERFUL STUFF. I TOOK THIS TO BE A RAPE? AGAIN, SO SHORT A PIECE BUT YOU HIT HOME POWERFULLY. DARK, FOREBODING THIS PIECE IS. ANOTHER GREAT WRITE -
This is sad but good. It seems to me that pedophiles should be executed. I can't think of anything more just. - oce
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Yes this piece is short, but very very effective, and also well written. It is straight to the point, and clear. I enjoyed reading this piece, although it is sad and dark. I have written a piece similar about abuse and a child's teddy bear if you would like to check it out, it is called "tear stained teddy bear, the link is on my page. However do not feel as though you have to, it was just a suggestion.
Anyway, well written piece. Keep it up.
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Funny isn't it, how our teddybears can be our strength in times of distress? I loved this. Your're right, it doesn't need qualifying by any means, and can stand alone just as it is. Well done.
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awww that so sad.
good write tho..definetly a tear-jerker
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wow, i literally just added this piece. i'm glad it was evocative for you. thanks
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tears. tears for her.
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