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Who are you?

Missing image

Watching you sit there blank and lifeless

Not knowing who you are or what is going on around you

The look of constant panic sits where your eyes used to be

What beautiful eyes you had

So full of life and laughter 

What is going through your mind

You no longer talk and your smile has faded

You just sit there at the windows ledge


 Staring...

Memories wash over me

Watching you in the kitchen as you made the family meals

Smells of warm bread and apple pie filled the house

Listening to you as you sang

You were so happy


Sadly I come over to you to kiss your forehead good-bye

Screams of fright echo the halls 

Who are you? What do you want? Get away from me!!!!

Help!

Won't someone please help me?! 

Wiping the tears away from my cheeks I try to calm you down

Mama, it is just me, I am not going to hurt you, please stop screaming.


Get away from me!!!!

Help! Won't someone please help me?!


The nurse from the hall comes in and calmly takes my arm and leads me away... my heart beating… crying… breaking


"It is probably best that you leave right now and let her calm down. Come back another day and we can try again".  

Walking down the hallway I hear my Mother crying as she talked hysterically to the nurse. "Who was that? What did she want? Why did she try to hurt me?" 

A feeling of loneliness… a deeper sense of loneliness than I have ever known filled within me as the elevator doors shut closing me in.

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Written October 4th, 2006

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  • EmeraldNymph
    February 8, 2008

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    powerful

    such emotion and imagery i can literally feel the fear and the sadness. please keep writing you have such talent


  • Immortal Flesh
    December 19, 2007

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    touches the heart

    So sad yet so beautiful in describing how you feel. Especially when you walked away in the hallway and still hearing her even as the elevator closed. A last impact memory but one that will never be forgottened


  • heartnsoul
    December 13, 2006

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    Aw..sue, this is great! the elevator doors shut in...and shut out. Told with chilling acuracy! Hope you are doing well my friend. I miss your smile!
    ~Michelle~


  • panegyric ink
    October 30, 2006
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    Well written.


  • carlspenc1
    October 18, 2006
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    wonderful

    This is a really Great Scribe

    it makes the reader think deeply about their own life.

    stay tuned

    best wishes

    Carl


  • suseann
    October 4, 2006
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    It's like you've already lost them,I know first hand. Yet you're filled with concern for them and wish rememberance so much. This is exacting in definition of what happens with the ravages of time.I'm so sorry,it pains me to hear you going through it.But you expressed it very well.~~Suseann


  • JustFallingApart
    October 4, 2006
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    That's realy sad but a great writing


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    October 4, 2006
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    Watching you sit there blank and lifeless

    Not knowing who you are or what is going on around you



    i really like this part of the poem, i think this is a great start and has great imagery. this is a brilliant piece of work, i couldnt say anything against this at all
    great work
    laurax


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    October 4, 2006
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    Superb/Fun/Intriguing/Unique

    A fantastic write just as it is.


  • chasingtheday gold member
    October 4, 2006
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    a good piece, it is sad that some people lose their minds as age takes us, knowing how much i love my own mind i can imagine it to be the worst thing to happen though of course once in those folds we have one comfort of not knowing how we were before i suppose, but familiy members sure do.
    windows ledge - window's ledge as the ledge is belonging to the window
    spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

  • rogue ninja
    October 4, 2006
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    this poem really got to me, putting myself in that situation is a scary thing, let alone living it. i truly hope it's not true for you. great write,
    Alex


  • nobodys looking
    October 4, 2006
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    awesome job


  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 4, 2006
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    this really struck home with me as my dad has alzheimer's. he is still living on his own for now but i know the day is coming when he won't know me ...


  • Romanee
    October 4, 2006
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    POWERFUL

    This was so sad, I hope so much this is just made up, but I have a strong feeling that it's not. What I got is the mother has altzeimers or some other mental illness, this was so real, I can't believe how captured it, I'm finding it difficult to explain myself, powerful amazing write, it conjured up lots of feelings,
    Romanee, xx


  • bluejeans51
    October 4, 2006
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    Whoa that was heavy! Great work though.


  • bottleddreamz
    October 4, 2006
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    I work at a nursing home and it pains me everyday when the same old man comes up to me and asks me where his wife is. I dont have the heart to tell him that she passed away years ago, so I always tell him the same thing, "Shes out shopping"

    Its a terrible life to live, not knowing who your own children are. And this poem expresses the pain of the family that holds all these memories but their mother remembers none, not even giving birth.

    Very emotional. Very well written.

    Jess


  • El Pescador
    October 4, 2006
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    among the best

    I thank you for this poem - it really is a work of art. I believe that anyone who has experienced this tortuous event will appreciate your accuracy, sensitivity and open-hearted delivery - a great poem!

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