She lays in her bed pretending she's asleep
He lays next to her, roughly presses again her young body
Sharp pain shoots through her soul
Tears swell in her eyes
Waiting for it to end
He kisses her back before he leaves
It's dark after he closes the door
Feeling the need to be sick, she sobs
Not from the pain, that is over
She knows she will never be pure
Her innocents stolen long ago
That is what sadden her the most
Author notes
Written October 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- Hurting by Grey Mouser.
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I'm actually slightly confused, maybe there's something I'm missing..
But is this about a relationship that ended? Or someone's 'first' time with someone and having had innocence forcefully taken prior.. or just rape right then.
Either way, it is a sad read, particularly the line where it 'shoots through her soul'.
I feel as though I can relate, and yet I can't, because I'm not entirely sure what specifically there is to relate to. Only the pain.
thanks for taking the time to enter it's appreciated, and best of luck.
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i was raised by an alcholic pedophilia. no worries i am an adult who has grown understanding the past is over. the answers for peace are in my future now.
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The harm done in such a situation is way to prevalent in our society. Sickening to think of.
You did your hurt justice with this write, only wish justice could be done to the one that cuased this.
well done. Be well and be blessed.
MOuser -
The poem I entered is also about this happening in my childhood. I hope that you find some peace dragonfly and I do wish you the best. This poem caught the words in my throat. Best wishes.
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very good write
sad but good to me sadness are one of the best writes that i feel and do.. smile-breathe and through wrtting you release many of the dark that was in the past,,, it gets rid of toxins within your spirit that are bad and i think you for this poem.
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Thank you for your empathy. I wrote and felt this as a young girl, I am an adult now. You're right the memories will never leave me, but I have a great support group. Thank you, dragonflywings92
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This was such a deep and sad write. Thanks for sharing it with us.You have done a great job expressing your feelings.
Kari -
so sad...please smile
that's a sad write of abuse...sexual and mental thrown in one...sadly that happens too much...to seek help and maybe something's done...maybe they'll be some closure...sometimes those visions never go away...please smile..David
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