I'm looking at you and
my heart is beating so fast.
Quicker and quicker with
each second that has passed.
Is this all real?
I look in your eyes and
see a fierce look,
something quite enticing.
Making me want to be
close to you.
Don't even know how much time has passed.
Feeling your racing pulse
harmonize with mine.
I kiss you an it
somehow feels a trillion
times more passionate than
ever before and it feels
like we've been through it all.
My love for you is so great
and I hope you can see how
you're the only one
I want
I LOVE YOU
Baby
Author notes
I wrote this to my girlfriend who i usually write most of my poetry to and I love her so fucking much and theres nothing I would ever do to hurt her on pourpose
Written October 4th, 2006
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alright
hello i love your peom gurl it ius so true and i wish you the best in youe relatonshipos and i wish that you and your husband start getting along.......................................... -
Sweet
A Lovely poem. I was especially touched when you said why you wrote it. All luck, love and happiness to you and your girlfriend!!! -
Drop the "baby", imho. Sweet poem.
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LOVELY POEM !!!!!!!
SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO SWEET!!!! Ah!!! You have penned a wonderful poem. It was quite lovely and heartfelt. Thank you for sharing. This was a pleasure to read today. Take care, Sandy
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Awwwww love, Your flow of words is great, written from the heart..... very romantic
Well done
Tracey -
Lovely poem, I really liked it. I've wrote a few poems for my boyfriend, and its so nice we can express ourselves through poetry
Well done x
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Hey Rachel,
I love that you are in love.
The way this poem starts with the perfect rhyme and the degenerates to a different level of want and need. I think the harmonizing of pulses is a great touch although I can never remember that happening in my life.
I do like that you use the familiar nickname "Baby", however, I think there could be a separation between "I LOVE YOU Baby" and the body of your poem.
You done good kid.
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Its a good, sweet poem and I must say it kept me .. i don't know. I'm a hopeless romantic so when I see something like this, it's a good thing... especially with all the sad depressing poems you see these days.
My suggestions? I personally believe that every poem should have SOME type of a background instead of the original blue that allpoetry gives. Even if it's just white, it brings a lot more to a poem if you are able to have a strong background to go with the poem. But, thats just my suggestion.
The only part of the poem I didn't like? The end.. the last two lines.. just don't seem to fit. I mean, they fit, but it seems like they are just... not put in the right way. I guess I understand, "I LOVE YOU", but i personally don't like "Baby".
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what a sweet poem, I could tell how much you love her just from this one line:
"I kiss you an it
somehow feels a trillion
times more passionate than
ever before"
That is powerful and Heart-reaching. I really thought your poem had a nice flow to it and also romantic. What passion u have for her. She is a lucky girl to have you.
Amanda
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A wonderful love poem and so different from the other erotic poems. This had none of this yet, deep emotions and feelings of desire are brought out. A sense of true love and so profound is the thought behind this poem that it aroused within me a whole spectrum of biblical values. ---
Never had true love been truer
Than to desire
And not burn out the fire.
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great write i loved it. very passionate piece
keep up the good work
beck
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This is really good i loved it it is just how i feel about my kids and it is heart warming
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