On a cold day in fall
I begin to reminisce
Of all the times we have shared-
Of all the times we loved
And of all the times we laughed,
But best of all
(I miss these times the most),
Of times when we were
Simply glad to be alive.
When we played in the leaves
Under that yellow Maple tree
On top of the mountain in the chilly air.
Your cheeks and nose are pink with cold
And my heart's on fire-
I can't imagine life without that smile.
At nights when your breathing slowed
I'd adore you in your sleep.
You never saw the tears of joy
Sliding down my face.
So precious and peaceful
I know love is real-
I can't imagine life without you here.
On a cold day in fall
I really begin to miss
All the times we have shared.
My imagination sucks
You made it become real-
I'm doing it, I'm hating it,
I'm living life without you.
Author notes
i had a nifty tune in my head to set this to, but it has since slipped my memory.
Written October 3rd, 2006
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Hmmmm...very nice. I have to agree with everyone else saying that this is a bit sad, but I personally think that's what makes it so great. Anyway, awesome job.
~Krishell -
Honestly, I want to beat you over the head when you put your own poetry down.
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I can't really imagine how you'd put this to a song, but it certainly makes a great poem! It flows effortlesslessly---scheisse, you make it look so easy! -
Beaytiful piece filled with sadness, it is very lyrical and has wonderful rhythm and depth of emotion. great write from start to finish! Bunny
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I got the shivers. The ending reminded me of an ex that wrote a poem about me leaving him.. made me a touch sad actually.
Good write nevertheless.
Jess -
I thought the rhythm and feel from this poem were very nice. The imagery suggested both the thoughts of happiness and sadness together. I loved the theme of autumn, it was a very beautiful poem.
-Kevin -
This is very simple, but effective. I love the usage of parenthases in poems, and you did it perfectly here. I really enjoyed this- it's very relatable, and prettily written.
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yeh this reminds me fall alot, the words, the vibe of the poem everything you put down on this page speaks out loud. I love the deep emotional content it really helps build the imagery and feeling of the poem. Excellent write
Much Love 2ya
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I really enjoyed this piece. It brought back some memories for me that had a little sadness and happiness at the sametime.
Great visuals.
Soulful Woman -
This does sound lyrical. "On a cold day in the fall" Nice! Fall is my favourite season and I often feel as you seem to. A nice piece of poetry.
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nice poem a little sad tho old memories are still great tho to be cherished x
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